Equestria is dead. Using massive weapons of utter destruction, the Caribou have killed all but a handful of ponies, including Princess Twilight. But leaving the Princess of Magic alive was folly. After all, love conquers all. Even death.
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Well that was fantastic! Keep up the amazing work!
5089927 I think Cadence went crazy when Shining died.
Awesome chapter, I hope it works, I also hope that b!tch Purity gets whats coming to her.
To be honest, kinda wish both Trixie and Twilight are both killed.
5089945 Might I ask why?
5089971 Well the crystal heart only acted as a amplifier for love magic. There is no reason that it cannot amplify other types of magic.
5089987 considering it is shaped as a heart and relies on positive feelings to work, seems more than likely it does work with love alone. like how a gun only uses certain caliburs of bullets.
5090000 Celestia has the sun for a cutie mark and can raise the moon.
The crystal heart looks to be corrupted which would most likely have a negative effect on Cadence considering she is so tightly linked to it.
5090000 adept comparison there. But why didn't cadence use her spell to see the intents of other ponies like when she repaired love in canterlot? She must know twilight felt that she had no choice to do what she had to. She must know what purity is thinking which is possibly vile. Hmm I'm starting to wonder if she is related to sombra with how she turned cadence against twilight. Wouldn't past her to have killed shining armor and frame the caribou.
Fucking Purity! I knew they should have killed her when thay had the chance. Also, did Trixie kill Cadence or just subdue her?
Not precisely the best way for the battle to go so far.
Cadance seems to have become less than smart, apparently not bothering with some truth detection magic before accepting that her sister in law has become a monster.
Well, being the queen of a city undergoing two decades of siege may predispose you for bad news.
Honestly I would have killed purity from the get go.
Her type of thinking is like a terminal cancerous growth in a social setting.
5089955 Cadance was right. Twilight died the day equestria burned, in her place we a have tyrant, though granted not a steotypical "I do what I want because I have all the power" kind of tyrant.
Her abolishment of Equestria's old goverment, just because it was a hinderance to her way of doing things, is what really put her in the "hope she ends up dead category", because in it place she created a facist goverment and those are never good. Also, it seems that she won't let anything stop her even if it betraying old firends (Cadance).
Also, the ponies under her. Since the scence of Sweetie prolonging the death those caribous just because she wanted them to suffer, I wonder how the others will treat the Caribou who end up injured or surrender. If the are just executed, I would be would not be too overly concered, but if they are made to suffer just quench the bloodlust of those that were wrong I would take serious issue with it.
That is some thing that I can not condone even when the offenders are as vile as the Caribou.
To me it seems that they are trading one group of monsters for a not so obivous group.
Trixie on the other hand is a bit of an over reaction, but in her case is being too hasty and enabling Twilight to continue on with her plan just because of one battle in which Twilight was a little more controled at the time.
5090112 thank you! i'm in total agreement! honestly, twilight needs to understand that in order to make an empire like she is, ponies that think like purity do need to die.
WOOT WOOT!!! Chugga chugga, WOOT WOOT!!! The rape train is real!
another wonderful chapter to a wonderful story. sad to see that the princess of love could not even scene love. but hard to remain sane on this kind of battle field.
5090137 That is certainly one way to look at it...
Another way is: Twilight is the leader that Equestria needs at the current time.
I mean does it really make sense to try and prop up an old system that did not see them through these trying times?
Especially if most of the people that made the old system function are either dead or a breeding slave.
I think it makes much more sense to default back to an older system that functioned during times of war than it does to limp along with one that was designed to function in a time of peace.
As far as betraying old friends...really?
Twilight did not betray Cadence...Cadence betrayed Twilight.
Cadence chose a brown nosing overly religious nut job of a noble over her own friends and family.
Cadence was willing to kill Twilight as well as Trixie for the crime of saving ponies in a way that she did not like or believe in.
Twilight and Trixie however fought to subdue rather than kill.
I also have a feeling that with Trixie here we will see a new Diarchy form...The Battle Empresses Twilight Revival and Trixie Bloodmoon!
Ok after reading this I am somewhat confused.
Purity went to Cadance saying Twilight destroyed equestria while it was Cadance who helped the Caribou...
So yea I am very confused with how Cadance is acting in this chapter....
After just finishing ep 25 of Attack on Titan, I didn't think my heart could beat any harder from anticipation and awe.
Then I read this...
If you made it any more awesome mate, I may have need to call the hospital for heart failure.
5090036
I guess all these years on the receiving end of a losing siege while watching the remains of what used to be Equestria burn to the ground around her, watching her subjects die a slow death while battling against an endless tide, being forced to lead (what she believed to be) the last of ponykind in a losing battle that can only end in genocide of her people have left her slightly unhinged. Death of Shining probably didn't help matters.
I mean, she was reduced to citing religious, zealotry driven drivel while facing off against Trixie, and apparently proceeded to believe Purity's words without even checking the other side of the story (and her powers indeed being uniquely suited for finding out what exactly Twilight has done - which is invent a new form of magic ... again).
I imagine after all these years she's paranoid, stressed and exhausted to the point of being unhealthy, probably with a good dose of fatalism and resignation. She's probably not thinking all too straight at the moment, and might not for a long time to come yet after all that she and Equestria have been put through. The best anyone can do for her is probably knock her out and let her have a week's worth of sleep - I'd imagine it's been years since she has had a moment of rest, never mind peace of mind and opportunity to relax even the slightest.
Not going to lie a little confused on why purity was so easily believed but other then that good work
What is it with retarded ponies like Purity that do nothing but attempt to ruin their own kinds chances? My hatred for characters like that in stories is strong but that only goes to prove how well written they are. Good job sir. I do hope that she gets severely punished though.
Poor Cadence. I mean , yes , she is acting like a fanatical religious zealot who don't bother with anything except her truth. But I think that she must be pitied rather than blamed .
I hope that Twilight is going to find a way to save her... without killing her to raise her later , if possible.
5090778 Purity is masquerading herself as a priestess of the dominant religion in the Crystal Empire. She figured out that Cadence had sequestered herself in that religion, struggling to just remain sane during the siege, and used that to her advantage. Purity is bat shit insane, by the way. She went from being a leader of her ponies to being tossed aside, and she did not... take it well.
5090701 You hit the nail right on the head, my friend. Cadence is exhausted, unhinged, and has just been told the one she adored as much as her departed husband is a corpse-raising murderer. If she was in her right mind, she would check it out. But in this state, she's so utterly used up, well...
5090856 I see thanks for clearing that up.
Ok, I'm pretty sure I've said this in this comment section before. But in the words of the awesome Rainbow Dash... "Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh. That. Was. Awesome!"
5089932
I feel like Twilight went mad too.
There's no good side in this battle.
5090137 Not to sound too snoby, but Sweetie has, essentially, been through hell, and these caribou are responsible for the torture, rape, and/or murder of everyone she's known besides the few that escaped. She's been living on the run since, if my mental timeline is accurate, about the age she is in the show. She's traumatized, and the caribou themselves inadvertently conditioned her to be extremely violent.
As for Twilight, she is about the most mentally sound of them, though I'm no sure how she managed it, but the general populace is in no mental condition to be trusted with themselves. And, besides, I'm not sure I buy the old Equestria being anything other than a monarchy, which is only really different from what she's doing in titles and a bit of paperwork
5091130
Indeed, Twilight has come out of her ordeal pretty sound - the first chapter actually described the stages her mind went through before settling in the niche she is in now. I believe the main difference between her and many others (and Cadence at this point) is that, for a long time now, she has had hope, and she has spent many a year nurturing and planning it out.
She saw the proverbial light at the end of a tunnel, where others lived in perpetual darkness, ever since she came up with Love necromancy and realized the full implications of it. While others had no reason to ever believe things could be better again, and thus no hopes or aspirations for the future, Twilight knew that she could fix this.
Having a very tangible hope, a purpose to focus on probably helped a lot in keeping her mind centered once Twilight regained her mental footing. And, slowly but surely, she is succeeding. She must know and realize that the fate of what remains of ponykind lies in her hooves and will not allow herself to falter while being dead-set (I'm sure there's a pun in there) on said goal. She owes her people nothing less that that.
As for her choice of government? It's a perfectly sound one, especially during a time where efficiency and strong leadership that isn't bugged down in bureaucracy is essential if ponykind is to pull through and survive as a species. She is saddled with pulling back her people from the brink of annihilation - she, they, can't afford anything less. After all, there is no such thing as a bad monarchy or dictatorship - only bad dictators. And Twilight is exactly what Equestria needs right now.
5091130 my thoughts exactly there. A empire is still a monarchy just on a larger scale. The most I think to snap cadence out will be celestia explaining to her the differences in the two necromancy magics and from that white light that means celestia's group just arrived. She can tell the difference as love necromancy was in her library.
Excellent chapter this, and well worth waiting for! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Sooooo, next chapter! Soon! Please!!!
On another note, though, I read something in the last paragraph of this chapter that has me more than a bit uneasy. To wit:
Not sure what this means, but I'm hoping that it just means that Twilight has managed to do what she needed to do with the Crystal Heart...and that that brain-dead idiot Purity (now there's a misnomer of a name if I ever heard one, because pure this bitch definitely is not!) did not manage to get past both Twilight and Twixie, and do something stupid to Twilight to stop her from doing what she needs to do for the sake of Equestria and her people.
Although if she did...well, let's just say that I wouldn't want to be in her horseshoes when AJ, Dash or one of Twi's other resurrected friends shows up at an inopportune (for Purity) moment.
If (when) that happens; well, let's just say that it likely won't be a very happy ending...for Purity.
But we'll just have to to wait for the next chapter to see, I guess, huh?
5090333 As for changing of government in times of need, the last government did not fail in combating the Caribou , quite of the opposite, the last government was in fact winning against the Caribou. The only reason it failed was the sudden uses of nuclear-type weapons. Also, it is a Senate, just vote for new people to take the place of those that were lost.
Cadence was betrayed. We know how Twilight and Trixie are using their powers, but Cadence had not see either of them till this point. How was she was to know their intentions was to help, plus there a reason why both blood magic and necromancy is treated with such suspicion. Also, right after they subdue Cadence, do they even try to clam her down and explain their reason for their actions? No, they just go straight for their own goal. Sure, Cadence was too overly hostile,but given the conditions I am not too angry with her.
5090333 How did you get the black boxes over your words?
5091130 Conditioned or not, What Sweetie has done was still something i can not condone, and therefore i can not I see myself routing for her side.
Also, the older government would have been more akin to a constitutional Monarchy (or what every you would call the equestrian government) , unlike twilight fascist state, difference being that in the former the leader are bound by certain laws to prevent abuse of power. While the latter gives government free reign to make what ever laws it wants.
As for the mental state of anyone in this fic, I find them all to be dubious and unable to lead them selves.
5091620 I never said Sweetie was justified, just that her mental condition was going to lead to extreme violence, an I doubt any court in any country that considers mental trauma an actual thing to consider would send her to jail for it
5091687 Jail? No. A mental alysum? Yes.
5091620 I should point out, Twilight isn't going for a facist state. Her goal isn't uber-conservative ultra-nationalism centered around herself as a figure of supreme power. She's trying to set Equestria up with strong, firm leaders and a non-corrupt aristocracy to rebuild.
She took a constitutional monarchy and reverted back to an absolute monarchy, and who's to say how long she'll keep it that way.
5091592 Like this:
[spoiler ] [/spoiler ].
Leave out the spaces between the "r's" at the end of each word, and there you have it!
Like so:
Hello!
5091707
Not to mention that at this point in the story there is no such thing as Equestria as we see it in the show - the nation known as Equestria ceased to exist as a functional state some two decades ago when it and nearly all of its people were pretty much erased from existence.
What Twilight has done is essentially establish a new country where none has existed for over two decades as of now. She has named it (the Empire of) Equestria for obvious sentimental reasons and it's a spiritual successor to the Equestria of a now bygone era, but it's essentially a whole new country at this point. It's really her prerogative as to how she chooses to lead it (and arguably as a Princess of Equestria, this was the case previously anyway).
And at any rate, it's quite short sighted to believe that the form of government denotes moral intentions of the leaders - empires aren't inherently evil and democracies aren't inherently good, and neither is the superior form of government by default.
Each has its pros and cons and may be better suited for a specific country during specific circumstances (and how good of a monarch you can scrounge up in case of autocracies, and Equestria has it pretty good on that front), and at this point in time absolute monarchy is by far the best fit for the fledgling Equestrian remnant - they need a strong direction and firm decision making, (and the ability to cast aside insidious elements like Purity's faction of zealots who would rather see their country remain a pile of ashes and their species dead rather than be rebuilt in any way that doesn't adhere to their beliefs), not bogged down by bureaucracy.
What she does with it afterwards is another story (and that's assuming the majority of civilian population would even want her to step down - more so than Celestia's sun, Twilight is the beacon of Equestria's hope in these times), but that's another story.
An absolute monarchy, so long as the monarch is indeed competent and benevolent and works for the betterment of their people and doesn't hesitate to stomp out corruption (which all forms of government are filled to the brim with - though perhaps slightly less if your leader is an immortal alicorn whom you know won't hesitate to stomp you in to the ground if you try and abuse your position), may well be the best system to live under - and certainly not worse than any other alternatives.
As far as the current situation goes though, Twilight has the right idea - rebuild, cleanse their lands of the Caribou filth until there is none of the stench left (and don't bother with prisoners - there is neither any point with beings as indoctrinated as they are, not that their country would accept prisoner exchanges anyway, nor can the Equestrians spare the resources and manpower to look after them), get the population on their feet again and then start worrying about shedding her control over things if she gets tired of running everything by herself or simply doesn't want to.
For now though, Twilight has managed admirably and likely has established the best possible administration for the situation.
5091984 Exactly. Twilight is by no means perfect, but she's also a living computer at this point. She had twenty years to plan down a functional nation based on the data she had.
Her primary goal is the salvation of her people. It's not power, and greed isn't even a factor. She just watched her people raped and butchered. If there is a secondary goal, it's revenge, but revenge is hardly worth it if her primary goal remains unfulfilled.
5092002
Revenge is probably a secondary goal of every being in Equestria at this point (even Celestia and Luna nuked the Caribou capitol the second they got out, hundreds of thousands if not milians of civilians and all), and considering what happened I'm not at all surprised - and hey, if butchering Caribou (which is hardly undeserved on their part, considering that "rape, pillage, plunder, destroy" is their national policy, so they kinda can't complain about it - they are getting their own preferred way of international politics after all) lets them shed some of their inner demons and get if off their chests to some degree, I say go for it.
As for Twilight and power, I get the feeling that more so than power she wants efficiency - the Equestrian remnant can't afford anything less at this point, and she herself is the by far the most efficient option Equestria has at this point (and by contrast, the more hoops decision making has to jump through in a government, the less efficient it is - which, again, is unaffordable in this situation) - she's had years upon years to come up with the plans after all.
Besides, even if she was after "power", I'd imagine most of the ponies would be happy to throw it at her - hell, she might have issues shedding some of it at a later date, because if she pulls this off (and if she doesn't then we have no issue, because there is no nation to speak of anyway, heh) then she will be a national hero of the sorts never seen before and having pulled their nation, their race out of a fate worse than death. Chances are people will be begging her to lead the moment she announces of stepping down.
5091707 Since you are the writer, I can not really argue the motivations of your characters.
Fascism is a really hard concept to pin down to be truthful, but to me Fascism is a system in which is opposed to democracy. Where government has the final say in how things should be while not being bound to laws like a constitution or being subjective to scrutiny of its population. Twilight has basically consolidated all the power to herself, and disposed all others like Purity and the Cloudsdale senate.
Though by no means is your story bad, in fact it is well written and fun to read, I just dislike the characters which not really all that uncommon for me (just like how I really dislike Max form "Your Human and You"). So as a show of support I'll give you a thumbs up as support, though I have already faved.
5091866 Thank you.
New pony appears out of nowhere, spreading lies about Twilight, but for what purpose?
Purity is currently someone thrown in with no purpose but for the sake of causing conflict. She has no motive, no "screen time" (that I can remember), and we've never even heard her mentioned before. In all honesty, it's really quite weak and I'm really disappointed that you resorted to something this... bad. It seems like you, due to the lack of better ideas, suddenly chose to threw in someone to force conflict, rather than have it appear naturally. Also, you don't take into consideration Cadence's personality. She and Twilight are like sisters, so why in Tartarus would she believe the word of some random pony over that of her sister-in-law's? She literally has no reason to believe this "Purity," and even if she did believe Purity she's the kind of pony who would listen to Twilight and let her prove her innocence instead of instantly condemning Twilight and calling her a "monster."
5092411 Oh, Purity was brought in during Reformation, as the leader of the Canterlotian survivors. She's one of the old guard of nobility. As for Cadence, I did take her personality in to account... and then killed Shining Armor. Losing both aunts, her sister-in-law, and her husband shattered her, mentally and emotionally.
I've only alluded to it so far, but Cadence fell head-first into religion just to stay sane. And with Purity masquerading as a priestess, and with her already fragile psyche, she was more willing to believe a religious head with bad news that seemed more likely than "your sister-in-law invented new magic to rebuild Equestria." It's unfortunate, but...
She's stressed, exhausted, and "alone." Cadence has, for all intents and purposes, snapped.
5092359 You're very welcome.
5092431 Well put.
And snapped hard, I might add!