Ex-King Sombra was once reformed, but the darkness wouldn't let its bind to him go so easily. So here he is, stuck somewhere in the south pole, wishing there was a way back out of the darkness that traps him in this evil mind of his. And his dream to find a way out is answered, just not in a way that he expected. A strange male alicorn with glowing eyes approaches him, and offers him a chance to break the bond he has with dark magic, instead using a magic thought to be lost. Join them on their quest to break the bond and help restore order to the world that they live on, equis. Inspired by the wonderful story by the talented Note-Sketch, Shadow's Enigma
Post Note: You have to be good when writing a story that includes an alicorn, and since the first time writing this, I have improved.
As I read this, I kept a smile on my face. The references are a nice touch, but it is a little hard to take seriously especially since this is Sombra's down fall into madness once again.
That reminds me, though people that have read my story will know about the vase and what Sombra and Celestia were doing there, no one else will. It seems far fetched to simply start from there without much back story to...your back story
There were a few mistakes here and there, but I mostly found them at the beginning. It would be wrong of me to criticize on that since I make them all the time too, but it would be a good idea to review your work several times to make sure you get them corrected.
I'm not much for Alicorn OCs, but I'll see where you take this
4768478 mi amigo, I will be doing a back story, i need a hook to keep readers interested. don't fret. It will come in its due time
Also, this is an alternate universe. maybe the alicorn race thrives in this one (they don"t, but eh)
but thanks for the tip anyway
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It took me over a year, but it seems I'm finally getting back into the swing of things.
