Two years ago Luna returned from the Wasteland to find that her home had shifted dramatically from what she remembered. Even now she attempts to find a way to transport her lost love, Sarah, to her side, but a chitinous foe seeks to tear them apart.
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i love finishing a chapter only to see one of my favorite stories from one of my favorite authors has updated!
Mmmmhmmmm.
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Thanks.
4585545 OK. Sorry, I just checked favorites randomly. So yeah... But seriously, really good work. I like the story, and those last few paragraphs were great.
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Love this story can I marry it? plz
oh dads
oh dads
HUZZAH! I have finally caught up after only a day of reading! How many points do I receive!?
Seriously though, cool story, guy. I like the alternate Equestria you've set up and the different roles which the characters have taken.
Now, I am curious if they actually respect each other or if they are just trying to trick the other. Your Majesty.
'Twould seem that Celestia and Aurora are coming to like one another. As much as they can in the present situation.
they are sooooo alike
Great chapter!
I swear, this two will become the best frenemy ever seen.
Also good story, keep going!
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Talk to Knighty about turning a story into a person first, then if you can figure it out I might give consent
4585685 have a my fine sir
And then they both take a Super Sledge to the face!
Cuz nothing is more peaceful and democratic that Fallout weaponry!
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Well, I can tell that things are going to get interesting. The first scene was interesting. I didn't really know how you'd tackle Chrysalis's lingering effects, but you did it pretty well. You mentioned that it was venom, but is actually? Or is Cadance just saying that because Chrysalis is a bug. At any rate, it was a well written little chunk, and I hope that it plays a role later in the story. Luna meeting Jonathan wasn't written as well as it could've been. Jonathan's emotions were stale, and it didn't really help that you went immediately into the fatherly rage. You would've done better to write Jonathan as distant and cold at first. It took away from the emotional impact of the scene. That being said, their conversation afterwords was written well; it felt like a daughter catching up with her father, like it should've. Aurora's and Celestia's meeting was written fantastically, actually. You did a great job of putting two stone cold and experienced monarchs at mental odds. It's obvious that Aurora has ulterior motives, and it was cool to see Celestia adapt to the situation. Although, Tornado and this Echo fella hit me by surprise. It was a short conversation, but you done opened up a can of worms. It'll be interesting to see where you go with it. All in all, this chapter gets a 10 Changeling Smiles/10.
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HRRRRM
I love it! I really like how this is progressing and I can hardly wait until I can read more.
Aurora and Celestia might need to face one another in the sparring ring just to get rid of some stress and prove just how bad ass they both are. I can totally see Aurora and Echo getting high off the ah... night time activities of Celestia and Tornado before they start their own fun.
Oh, and do the Changelings know about Jonathan? I can just see Chrysalis suddenly finding a dragon has come to visit because his little pony princess got hurt on her orders. BBQ bugs anyone?????
Sorry to others, you know why I did it.
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Going to assume it was a comment war?
Regardless, another excellent chapter.
Dude, you posted this before I could finish editing it
I kind of hope that Aurora and Celestia become genuine Vitriolic Best Buds
godly pissing contest ehh. I like it
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i like this chapter
Oh battles of wits how carefully must you be fought....
We think Chrysalis's plans should fail, so long as Nim keeps her head on straight. Though with recent developments she might not. Hmmm.....
Keep going! ;)
Oh ye, next chapter now please :D.
4589717 WAT XD
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4597583 O_o No thank you.
lets put a smile on that face AHAHAHHHHAHAHAHHAHHAHAAHHAHAHHAHHAHAHHAHH
love the fact we got a sequel, can't wait for more
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Wow, thank you for picking up on everything that I put into her character, I'm legitimately impressed.
4602271 Your entire argument requires that moving the sun takes as much energy as it would to do so in real life, Celestia may be as strong as this story shows her to be, and she could have been holding back, as you said, OR she could have been legitimately overpowered by the changeling queen, and moving the sun might be far easier in this setting then it is in real life. That is not to say that stories that use uber Celestia are invalid, they jest feel a bit hallow to me, because if she could solve everything forever, why wouldn't she solve everything forever. Why would she send a librarian, a baker, a seamstress, a farmer, a weather pony, and a animal caretaker to evict a dragon when she could just teleport there, throw him into orbit, and teleport back before anyone even noticed she was missing? If her power was totally beyond comparison why would she not just take out Sombra herself?
In short I do not believe that canon Celestia is on the same level of power as the one in this story, but I will not say it is an impossibility either, but it causes so much of the show to become completely stupid that I personally dislike that interpretation.
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Awesome chapter man! :D legitness!
Peace between the two... that might not happen~
Keep it up!