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Thundercolt


not much to say really im just a new writer to the expanding community

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Stories tell of ancient times where more than two alicorn princesses ruled one known as rhythm princess of sound who like the others vanished.now she has found here way to communicate with one pony known as Deathnote who from these messages from the goddess has created a group called the sound of death as sometimes Equestria needs to be cleaned or somepony silenced not to mention it get's bits and as some members say is more fun then your normal day job. (warning gore and some more gruesome deaths in this story)

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 8 )

Yes i know this is short it's a prologue for a reason and any comments are appreciated even if they point out errors my first story or my first fail we shall see

If the names confuse you well this'll help
Deathnote=Midnight sonata
Circuit break=Lightning rod
octavia=octavia
vinyl scratch=vinyl scratch
Feather blade=Hurricane wind

You could really benefit from a proofreader; there are more than a few run-on sentences, even in the description.

it probably wouldnt hurt to tell who says what a little more, some of the conversations got a little confuseing

i thank you all for the comments i know im not the best writer i'll try to improve but since im about to go on vacation i can't improve much right now

I seriously had no idea what was going on or who was saying what throughout this fic. Also, spellcheck is your friend.

back from vacation fixing stories hopefully soon

Finally got around to fixing the main problem of the conversations now i'm working on my draft of chapter 2

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