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Saying that there was nothing except rocks on the rock farm wasn't exactly true. Saying there was no talking and no smiling is absolutely wrong.
A compilation of chronological short stories about the life of the Pie sisters.
A huge 'THANK YOU' to BluegrassBrooke for the editing.
Link to the cover art: here!
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Aww, that's the cutest chapter I've ever read. I'm so tracking this.
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My hands were trembling when I clicked the "publish' button, so seeing that someone likes my work is very, very nice.
Thank you so much! Your comment really means a lot to me, due to the fact that I'm pretty insecure on the internet, heh...
I'm glad you liked it
Great story. I really love how you're developing Maud and Pinkie's relationship. Your OC Granny Pie seems really realistic, a difficult feat for OC's, especially on your first story. I especially love the fact that her personality is like Pinkie's, it explains where she got her humor from. I adored how Maud was so concerned for Pinkie. I felt so bad for her when Pinkie fell into the hole she made
Your wording and grammar could use some help, but it's not terrible. Mostly it was the repetitive wording that bothered me (for example you used 'Maud' like 6 times in one paragraph). Another thing, you use a lot of 'said-isms', it's where you tack on 'said' after a character's lines. There's no need for them, and it's a little distracting. It's all really easily fixed errors that make the reading a bit rough.
Would you perchance like an editor/proofreader?
I like your story and would love to help out. I may not be the best with grammar, but I can certainly point out and smooth over the other parts. Oh, I'm also part of author's helping authors so I'd love to do a review exchange with you. Let me know.
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First of all: I am so grateful for your comment! I really appreciate that you took time to give me such an informative piece of advice!
Second: I'm glad you noticed that about Granny Pie, it was my goal to make her similar to the present-day Pinkie.
Oh, thank you for pointing that out. I'm still a new author, so I am learning those things...
I'll take a look at the repetition. And about the 'said tag'... I'll also take a look at it, but I've read in many places that it's OK to use them. But maybe I did overuse it...
Third: Would you really like to edit for me? That would be so awesome!
I'm overwhelmed by your proposition. I'm not from an English-speaking country (though I do speak it fluently), so it's a bit of a difficulty for me.
Great! I would love an exchange on reviews!
Once again, thank you so much for the comment!
4152707 Yeah I'm serious. WOW English isn't your first language? I wouldn't believe it reading your story. I'm impressed! I'll PM you with my corrections and thoughts. Look forward to it
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Only on "special" occasions.
I'm learning English from...well, since I was born, but I don't get to practice it too much.
And thanks!
Interesting, I like it so far... keep it up...
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Thanks! I really appreciate your comment!
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no prob, will give you a full review once there are more chapters. just keep up the good work. 
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A full review? That would be great!
Just out of curiosity, how would that work? Each chapter is a new story. (I did write that, right?)
4181088 would just to a quick summary of each and combine them together as a whole experience.
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Ah, sounds cool. Thank you so much!
4181596 no prob... Now off to my story...
This was a real joy to read. I cannot wait to read the next chapter!
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Well thank you so much! Also, I really appreciate you favoriting this
The second story/chapter should come out soon, I hope.
I like how this is going. Keep it up!
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Thanks!
This really did capture a trace of childhood fears, bringing to life Pinkie's nightmare and giving us a reminder what its like to be a kid again. Thank you for that!
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And thanks!
Haha, no problem.
I loved this one! Your story is just so sweet
I can't wait for more. Keep up the good work 
I like this story, never really seen another one that dealt with Pinkies foalhood.
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Thanks! I promise to get the next chapter soon!
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Thanks, and really? Well, I only saw one-shots... I wanted to try my own hand at it, since whenever I do see a story that somehow references her childhood days, it's usually, "She was depressed and lonely, and now she has trauma, guyz!!1!1!" And I was sick of that. But I do have a good (I hope) explanation for why Pinkie saw her childhood that way. But that chapter is still far away.