"All anypony needs is a touch of kindness."
~Fluttershy
"Kindness is a luxury not everypony can afford."
~Trixie Lulamoon
After the events of 'Magic Duel' Fluttershy can now once more visit Zecora and restock on medicinal herbs that she had run out of. But something comes up on the way there inside the forest. A mare she thought long gone, now in front of her helpless and wounded. Fluttershy not being able to stand the sight brings the pony back to her cottage and nurses her back to health, learning some very special things about the mare.
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Nice. I will be following this.
4138787 I'm elated to know that.
This catches mine attention. More chapters of this story must be read.
4139858 :3
I'm loving this.
But, as a suggestion. I think it could use more splitting into paragraphs.
4143430 At the moment I'm looking for a proof reader to help me out. So hopefully by next chapter I will have one that could help me get rid of the pesky mistakes.
And this first chapter I wanted to try a different style than what I am use to using to see how it would turn up.
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Personally I don't really mind little mistakes. It's easy enough to read the intention.
The thing about space between paragraphs is merely that it does wonders for readability.
On one hand, the "X finds Trixie who is wounded/starving/homeless/suffering, nurses her back to health, and love happens" has been done so many times it's a grand cliche. On the other hand, there have been a few stories that used this opening and still managed to turn out original and interesting. So I'll give this story the chance it deserves.
Besides, cliches become cliches because people like them. The fact that there are plenty of writers and readers who thinks that Trixie deserves a little happiness isn't a bad thing at all.
Regardless, the insight in Fluttershy's mind - the contrast between the coward who wants to stay in safety and the courageous who's willing to brave danger to help the needy - is picture-perfect Fluttershy. Very good.
4168363 Who said anything about love?
4168853 Dozens upon dozens of fanfics following said cliche, that's what.
If you plan to deviate from that, then my hat's off to you, because that's a variation that holds some interest.
4169304 I'll admit shipping was my original intent until I realized I can't write lovey dovey lines without me wanting to bang my head on the wall. Though I won't say there won't any shipping at all.
And my last statement sounded somewhat rude. I apologize for that.
4171423 Well, there are many favors of shipping. Basic friendshipping is perfectly legitimate, and often so neglected that it's refreshing when it happens. I'm looking forward to seeing what you'll make of it. For that matter, lovey-dovey lines are just one way of doing it. Plenty of options. You'll be fine.
No apologies necessary. I may have been a little too critical with my comments. It's all good.
Is Trixie, at first, going to mistake Fluttershy for her sister?
As long as you keep this story going, and it doesn't turn into six months or more between chapters, I don't mind the wait.
4328248 Thank you for your patience. But i can almost guarantee a chapter next week.
This is something I hope doesn't come back to haunt me.