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Impurity


Im just here pressing buttons and losing my sanity. ~SS

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Celestia is woken up from her slumber. When she opens her eyes all she see's is darkness and then hears crying. When her eyes finally adjust she finds a hooded pony on the ground, against the wall in tears saying "I'm sorry."

What will she do?

Second contest entry for the Everfree NorthWest writing competition

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Comments ( 10 )

Corrupted by 'Him'?! Him who?
Discord? Tarik [or however he's spelled..the G1 villain]?
Nice little story.

4032144 I'm really sorry I couldn't clarify further on this story, I was heavily pressed for time.
and that would be spoiling the story.

4033279
Well okay. Hopefully you are continuing this [and not a one-shot] or make a sequel or something.

“I will thank you.”
(You need punctuation between 'will' and 'thank'. A comma or period would do.)

As the princesses eyes started to adapt to the darkness
(Should be Princess's)

4096482 Oh, thank you for the corrections. As of now though I don't want to make any changes until the competition is over. Much appreciated. :pinkiesmile:

I do wish you wouldn't keep us in suspense as to who "Him" is.

4392918 I believe it's sombra

7163110 i believe it's him

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