Celestia is woken up from her slumber. When she opens her eyes all she see's is darkness and then hears crying. When her eyes finally adjust she finds a hooded pony on the ground, against the wall in tears saying "I'm sorry."
What will she do?
Second contest entry for the Everfree NorthWest writing competition
Corrupted by 'Him'?! Him who?
Discord? Tarik [or however he's spelled..the G1 villain]?
Nice little story.
4032144 I'm really sorry I couldn't clarify further on this story, I was heavily pressed for time.
and that would be spoiling the story.
4033279
Well okay. Hopefully you are continuing this [and not a one-shot] or make a sequel or something.
“I will thank you.”
(You need punctuation between 'will' and 'thank'. A comma or period would do.)
As the princesses eyes started to adapt to the darkness
(Should be Princess's)
4096482 Oh, thank you for the corrections. As of now though I don't want to make any changes until the competition is over. Much appreciated.
I do wish you wouldn't keep us in suspense as to who "Him" is.
4392918 I believe it's sombra
4032144 sombra
7160972
Okay, thanks.
7163110 i believe it's him