The More The Marrier
''I mean she was so mean to me even after I did all those favors for her.'' Rainbow dash said flying around Twilight, she looked at her.
''Rainbow stop!'' Twilight yelled as she grabbed Rainbow dash's tail pulling her to the ground. "Like I've been trying too say for the past 10 minutes is that I've been starting too learn more about stardust." Twilight said,rainbow dash rolled her eyes she didn't like how her best friend was talking about the one who hated her most.
"Yeah whatever." Rainbow dash replied stretching her blue wings,Twilight stared at her.
"I learned that stardust just got a job at the hay aid dinner." Twilight continued as she glared at rainbow dash. "today is her first day!" Twilight leaped into the air. "And I can't wait too hear all about it!" twilight cheered as she flutter her hooves,she let herself land and grabbed a blank book from her book shelf,rainbow dash looked at her and lifted an eyebrow.
"Ah what's that?" She asked,twilight flipped threw the blank pages.
"Its a research book I'm not really using it to write down much research I'm using it to write down facts about stardust after all the more the merrier." Twilight explain showing rainbow the first page of her book.
Rainbow dash glared at her and smacked the book out of her magic grip. "Oh give me a break,twilight have you been listening too me at all?haven't you seen the way she's been treating me?!!!" Rai bow asked in frustration as she flew back into the air.
"Uh...! Twilight was speachless.
"YOU DON'T EVEN CARE DO YOU?!!!!!" Rainbow dash growled."ITS TRUE AND YOU KNOW IT!!!!!" She yelled as she stormed out.
"RAINBOW!!!!!!" Twilight shouted as she trotted outside but she was already gone.she sighs "maybe I should go get more facts from stardust."
Twilight sat on her bed writing the last few words too the new facts she had just learned about stardust,Rainbow dash walked in looking at twilight. "Oh hi rainbow, did you know that stardust is almost as great at magic as me,and did..." She didn't get too finish her sentence.
Rainbow dash flew up into the air and glared at twilight. "You can't listen too me can you?just hear me out,you're my best friend don't you believe me about stardust?"
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43 word chapter ?????????
4856553 the chapters being worked on
4441745 well can you be my editor or no?
5460956 well I need an editor
what did you planned for this story?, how was it supposed to be? If you want it, i would like a short PM about it, i am somewhat interessted in this story idea, i mean i would like it if her secret sister would be special too, and not just stay normal while she is going to be a Princess, but i am interessted in that secret sister theme.
eddit: Do you still want to write in this story?
6235396 I wrote the story on paper but I need to re-write a chapter and finish it I do plan on finishing this story but i"'vevery busy lately and I just can't find the time
6253865 well it´s okay, for now it is enough to know that the story isn´t dead.
However like i said, i don´t need an OP OC, but i would like it if her sister has the same potential as Twilight.
Somehow i think i would not enjoy it to have her weaker, at least not if Twilight should act like i think she maybe would.
edit: If you want to add something like that, a slow paced romance with one of her friends would be interessting too, maybe they could mistaken her for Twilight.
6253968 omg that's so guinus!
6254073 well i am glad if i could actually give you a good
idea
I noticed that you already agreed that you need an editor, and i guess it is alright then, but i still want to make my comment about this chapter.
I can´t poin out the mistake, since i am more or less bad with the english grammar, but the last part with Rainbow Dash seems to be wrong, and it was to short again, take more time and make a longer chapter, rather then trying to give us more even faster, if you should do it like that.
I am not that much after the grammar actually, i just hope for a long story, that they doesn´t try to get Stardust to exactly act like them, and i would like it if Stardust is allowed to stay as cocky as she is.
Like i said, and only to make sure i got my point across, i am okay with the trying to get Stardust to nnot being intentional mean to them, but till now i think Rainbow Dash just can´t stand it, that someone doesn´t like her, she never did something really mean, but Stardust could have told her that she doesn´t care.
If it is a help, i think i miss some thought´s from Stardust, more talking, or at least her point of View.
I give you a thumb up, i like the story, and i hope you get an editor to make it even better, maybe even a proffreader to give more ideas what you could add or whatever they do.
I really would like a new chapter, I remember I liked the idea, but I would prefer much more words.
I would like to have a new chapter please.
I probably said something like this alrady, but I had read a certain part of the story again, and I hope Stardust isn't that type of character that is just changing her whole personality and be as happy as everyone. I would rather like to she the others getting used to her and stardust itself just being a little less mean, not....what was the word again when Discord turned good?
I like it if a character doesn't wants to do what they do, that they actually don't do it and not just agree with everything suddenly.