Staring at Stars

When Fluttershy goes to relax, she bumps into a stallion who is named after an apple that she has only glimpsed upon a few times before. She suddenly finds herself thinking about him. What happens with her and this mystery stallion?

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Bluegrass Brooke

Bluegrass Brooke #1 · Mar 20th, 2014 · · ·

Yeah! First to comment

I liked your story. It was super cute! Big Mac is such a fun character and I love how he interacts with Fluttershy in the story.

I'd be willing to edit your story if you'd like. I noticed you had some difficulty with the accents and I'm pretty good with them. It would be fun to help out. Let me know!

SageBrony07

SageBrony07 #2 · Mar 20th, 2014 · · ·

Nice story. I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope you get an editor soon. Best of luck.

BobtheLurker

BobtheLurker #3 · Mar 20th, 2014 · · ·

This looks really good. Keep going!

Major League Pony

Major League Pony #4 · Mar 20th, 2014 · · ·

I really thought this was good.

I can help edit with grammar and stuff like that. PM me if you want.

Darth Redbeard

Darth Redbeard #5 · Mar 21st, 2014 · · ·

love it.

ReptileAFK

ReptileAFK #6 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · ·

Big Macintosh was in awe. Even with her tumbled mane and tail after sleeping, she looked heaven-sent by the light from the window.

OOOOOO SHIT SON!!! I THINK SOMEONE IS IN LOVEEE
Great work thou, i hope you get an editor soon, to continue this story

Eclipse LunarSol

Eclipse LunarSol #7 · Mar 24th, 2014 · · ·

I freak whenever I make a grammar or spelling mistake. Of course I would be your editor!

TheGentlecoltAlex

TheGentlecoltAlex #8 · Mar 25th, 2014 · · ·

Damn, this story has a lot of amazing potential under it's belt and I can't wait to see more of it. I'm willing to hep edit, but I'm bad with grammar so I can help with the plot of the story and maybe keeping it fresh and consistent. Goodnight, and Good Luck.

MoonSparkle The Vampony

MoonSparkle The Vampony #9 · Apr 1st, 2014 · · ·

Awwww!

The Chubby Totoro

The Chubby Totoro #10 · Apr 3rd, 2014 · · ·

Sorry guys, I forgot about continuity... I'll be editing this later. Thanks for all the favorites and likes!!

Templar22

Templar22 #11 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

Good stuff this.

Well written, cute, in character, and AJ's accent wasn't over the top. (probably wouldn't say "y'all" that much but you are still leaps and bounds better at it than most)

Only gripe might be that the ending felt a little off in comparison to the rest of the chapter.

I look forward to more

DarthWill3

DarthWill3 #12 · Apr 25th, 2014 · · ·

Good thing Fluttershy sought shelter at Sweet Apple Acres.
You're right, Fluttershy. Dashie would love this cider.
I didn't think Big Mac would be such a talented artist!
Aw... I think Fluttershy and Big Mac are showing their love for each other!
A couple of edits I've done for you: