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It might be a good idea to link to your fanfiction.net page, so that your readers can get more background for the 'Verse established in your previous fics.
6476926 Good point. Thanks for pointing that out. Was a bit more concerned with getting things to the point the story would be accepted.
I like it so far keep it up.
6477860 Thanks. Needless to say there will be a very one sided beat down in the future of this story.
I almost forgot about this story hurray for updates. Nice chapter as well.
7172631 Well it has been a good number of months since I last updated. And glad to hear that you enjoyed it.
Took me awhile to realize that they where anthros... wich only makes it better ♡ They are anthro right? Keep up the good work you really got me hooked on this one ☺ I thought the plane would be a renamed spitfire first, had to Google if it had existed a thunderbolt plane.☺ I have no idea how the smileys look like writning from my phone.
7173388 Yes they will be staying anthro, it is just easier for me to write and keep straight in my head. Also the Supermarine Spitfire might be making an appearance as well, we'll just have to wait and see.
7173482 Hi, hope you don't mind me bombarding you with some questions. How is the next chapter going? And how old do you picture that the princesses and Disqord are? How old are Tails? Is she closer to 20k or 10k since she knows she are over 10k but lots count millennia ago? Wouldn't it be fun to have Tails give Celistia a "until you have seen what I have seen, child" speech? :D Have fun and happy writing.
7331029 It is going okay, got a lot of stuff going on right now. But Kerra (what I have named Tails) is over ten thousand years old, and I am going to say that the Royal Sisters are around four thousand and Discord is about fifty-five hundred (his reign was something along the lines of a thousand years if I recall, not really sure, but that is my headcanon), so there will be moments where she will have that indulgent parent, 'oh you have so much to learn my child' look on her face, but mostly she will be just your average pony who likes to build things.
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One thing I should point out is that one-sided beatdowns delivered by OCs are rarely satisfying to anyone but people who hate the character being beaten down, plus the writer. It's better to have fair fights that are well choreographed and give the OC a real challenge before they win; that way even fans of the character being beaten down can enjoy them. (I think your character might... technically? not be an OC? Is she a genderswap of Tails from Sonic? But even if she is, she's enough different from the base character to be effectively an OC.)
In particular, an OC who easily beats the crap out of a top-level character (Celestia, Starswirl, or one of the powerful villains) may come across as uncomfortably close to a Mary Sue (and being an extreme variant of a canon character from a crossover fandom doesn't actually save them here.)
It's understandable that a character who's ten thousand years old should be more powerful than pretty much everyone in Equestria, but Twilight, who is about 20 or so, fought Tirek to a standstill after he took magic from practically all the ponies in Equestria, with just the power of four alicorns... and it wasn't entirely because their powers were too close in level. It was more that Twilight fought smart. Celestia, Luna, Nightmare Moon, Discord and Sombra have all had experience fighting each other (and Celestia and Luna fought Tirek), and Chrysalis beat Celestia once. So just because your character has more experience and higher power levels doesn't mean that they should win a fight easily against a powerful Equestrian -- they'll win, but it should not be a "one-sided beatdown", as you said. Otherwise it's not very entertaining.
7898812 That is the thing, Emerald was a soldier for a very long time. She is a firm believer in the policy of Admiral Halsey from World War II, "Strike first, strike fast, strike hard, and strike often."
Bah tried to make a... never mind to tired... can't focus and can barely remember what I read.
Not even sure if written in correct English. My comment that is. Well nice to see this fiction not dead. Welcome back. :)
... This was surprisingly hard to write...
Edit: yes I deleted my first comment.
7899487 It happens. Also: FOR PONY!!!!!
7899633 Can you add the anthro tag to your story please because it did confuse me at first
8199033 Sorry, thought it was in there already. Fixed.
8199046 thank you
Now it's getting closer to Return of Crystal Empire and Reformation of Discord....THIS WILL BE GOOD
(Especially her meeting with Discord , somehow I don't think she will be too happy with him
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8223943 Oh no, she will not be pleased.
Really losing her memory? That is so original. This story may be good but seriously couldn't you pick something more original than losing her memories?
8381673 If you ever look into the Sonic canon, it is a thing. When Shadow does something major using Chaos Energy, his memory gets wiped until something triggers it. Consider it the price of using Chaos Energy is such a way.
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You dont think i know that. Ive seen a lot storys that have the same thing. But that's the problem that's been used a lot. There are a lot of things in the fimfict thats been used a lot. Like losing your memory, humans that are cowards, humans that are too nice. Let me tell you That there is no human Alive that is that nice. Othere than that your story is good.
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Ah, okay. So it is more of just an issue with an overused trope. Understandable from that perspective. Myself, I haven't run across very many stories where the amnesia trope has been used, so I didn't find any issue with using it. In my mind, the kind of magical exhaustion that Emerald suffered from her body trying to regenerate coupled with the summoning across realities scrambled a few things. But it won't be showing up again in this story, or any other ones that I write because it doesn't fit with them.
Ah, so Discord's existence/magic prevented sentient life outside from the planet to find Equis and this machine from sending a signal to its builders?
Well Emerald, you've gone and fucked up. Maybe Luna and Celestia knew about it and that's one reason why they never wanted to harm Discord in this universe.
But I really hope that you'll show Celestia's and the bearers' reaction to what happened, but mostly Celestia's. She wanted to "reform" him into an ally and this plan completely failed now that he's dead. I find it hilarious how Celestia's plans just go out of the window with Emerald's interventions time after time. I wonder if Twilight Alicorn is still a possible thing, because the castle is already out of the question without Discord's reformation during the season 4 finale what would give them the last key.
That chapter was a very unexpected twist.
Now that I think about it, Discord's Plunder Seeds maybe just died now as well, because their creator is dead. So the Tree of Harmony will never be in danger. And THAT would mean... no magical box anyway.
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Well, as far as Emerald screwing up, maybe. But her paranoia of a planet being attacked has led to her setting up contingencies. This like Orbital Defense Platforms and a ship yard located on the same island she was going to be training the Equestrian SPARTANs at for building her heavy cruisers. Things will come to a head in the next chapter. Things like Twilight's Ascension and the magic tree castle in a box will still happen, but Twilight's key will be different than it was.
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She did warn celestia shit would go down and he inflicted pain on twilight.... the technology might be this dimensions humans because that robot sounded way to stargate sg-1 but humans are suppossed to be extinct....tirek only got strong enough to stand toe to toe with the alicorns due to discord letting him drain ponies. Emerald who has the same chaos magic or other technology to track him would crush tirek on sight. I think that emeralds fiendfire could clear out the roots strangling the tree of harmony. Truthfully I'd see her getting a key from sunset shimmer way before discord anyway she literally taught her friendship and i don't see emerald letting her be abandoned like in the movie I mean come on twilight banished her to earth no letting her try to fix things with celestia no nothing yah she made friends ....eventually with the equestria girls but we know she would've had an easier time befriending equestria main 6.
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I think it was explained why Sunset never returned because she wasn't ready to make amends with Celestia because she felt she didn't deserve it because of what she had done. But you can bet Emerald will be poking her head in to check on her to make sure she is doing alright from time to time. Also, as far as humans being extinct, this is a completely different reality than the one that Emerald is from, so there are no guarantees on them being extinct.
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Oh no i agree with you on the humans that's why I said this dimensions humans.... as for eq girls it all comes down to how you interpret twilight speech about stopping sunset from conquering equestria yadah yadah but in the end I personally feel she got abandoned she'd of had an easier time befriending her pony friends if she wanted to teach her about friendship and it's not like twilight really gave celestia any real info about what happened or celestia woulda been thorough the gate 5 seconds later apologizing with hugs and kisses for how she treated sunset.
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This is very true. But I doubt that Sunset would have been able to develop and learn the lessons she has if she went back to Equestria. The absence of magic at her beck and call also helped. She had to learn to rely on people.
A person named Emerald dating twilight sparkle this sounds familiar
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It has probably happened in other stories I am sure.
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Yes, I live. Just been working on other stories and being busy on the road.
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Also, I see you are a person of culture as well.
Will you be continuing your vixen and witch stories on fanfiction.net?
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At some point yes. Haven't had the inspiration for those stories as of late and it is hard as hell to update stories there on mobile since I am on the road for most of the month.
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Well it is great film
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Indeed it is