• Member Since 3rd Jan, 2014
  • offline last seen Nov 7th, 2017

Eclipse Shine


I enjoy reading fan fictions and try to write my own from time to time. I mostly write poetry but I will occasionally follow up on my stories.

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Sweetie Belle, a young filly must overcome her fears and face her demons before they slowly start to take control of her life. Lately she's been acting out without any explanation and digging a deeper hole within her overwhelming problems. Can she face the world knowing that they may not all except her as a blankflank?

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 10 )

Wow
This is amazing, and very well written. I looked for mistakes, yet found none. This one chapter is twenty times better than both of mine combined. You even NAMED THE CHAPTER BETTER!
You, are a true artist.

3927394

Thank you so much! I'm glad that you like it! It takes time to improve but with dedication; I'm sure that anyone can write like this. I'm used to poetry so writing stories is a new thing for me, I'm really happy that you appreciate it and expect more soon! :twilightsmile:

ron

This is amazing, the best story I've read tonight.

make moar and ron will adore

ron

ps make sweetie belle kill herself super feels

You did it again, another story im really looking forward to

3928056

I will make more don't worry but Sweetie Belle isn't going to die, this isn't a tragedy after all.

3928145

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you like it! :twilightsmile:

I like where this is going. I'm not much in the way of criticism, but I would like the chapters to be a little longer in the future.

3938850

Thank you! :twilightsmile: I'll try to make the chapters a bit longer but I generally like to keep them short to avoid confusion for the readers as well as myself. Just this story alone has an intro three times a big as my last story and chapters twice as large; so there's always room for improvement!

um you should give mysticalpha credit for the cover photo of this story as its his art and i don't see you mentioning him or that he made the picture

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