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Chapter 2

It was time. Today was the day. Today James, AKA Vulcan, had his first fight. And it wasn't going to be pretty. "HELLO EVERYPONY!!" shouted the announcer over the loud speaker. "HOW ARE YOU ALL TODAY?!" The crowd respond by cheering even louder.
Great. thought James. They're all nutcases. I mean seriously, how can a herbivore species enjoy the sight of blood?
"ARE.YOU. READY TO SEE SOME BLOOD?!" shouted the announcer.
Well, apparently like this. James thought.
"TONIGHT" yelled the announcer. WE HAVE SOME FRESH BLOOD!" That made the crowd go crazy.
"FRESH BLOOD!' They cheered. "FRESH BLOOD!" James was handed a single-edged sword, with a blade about two feet long, and a hand and a half handle. It was some fusion of a samurai's katana and a vorpal blade. He held it in his right hand.
Well this is gonna be messy. He thought as a door opened in the wall,'
"IN THIS CORNER" yelled the announcer. WE HAVE OUR FRESH BLOOD, VULCAN!" The crowd cheered. AND IN THIS CORNER, IS THE MIGHTY THOR!!"
Thor? Really? Is it just me, or is there a god-naming thing going on here that I missed the memo for? James thought. He peered across the stadium and saw Thor. Thor was almost 6 ft high, rather tall for a human of this world, well muscled, was wearing an animal-fur tunic, had dirty blond, short hair, and was carrying a massive hammer in his right hand. Well this won't end well. James thought, as Thor charged him. James, however, calmly walked about ten feet forward. He'll be reckless. I'll let him tire himself out, then I'll fight back. He thought. Just as he thought, Thor was absolutely reckless, swinging his hammer wildly, in an almost predictable manner. Clearly he was used to fighting opponents that had never heard of the words dodge, block, and parry. Well, not that I think about it, they never had. James thought smugly. After about 10 minutes of swinging, Thor paused, and breathed heavily for a moment, before going right back to swinging. Good, James thought. He's weakening. 5 more minutes passed. Thor caught James in one of his swings."Ahh!" he cried out, but the crowd loved it. Just a little bit more...just a little bit more... James told himself. NOW!! James mentally screamed as he struck back. He swung his blade low slicing Thor's leg, then in a quick motion, he swung his leg forward, behind Thor's. Without pausing for a second, he swept it backwards, causing Thor to fall on his back. All this happened in the blink of an eye. James held the point of his sword to Thor's throat and placed his right foot on top of Thor's hairy chest.Thank god for those karate classes mom made me go to.... and the weapon training... even though it was only on Saturday... Silently, he looked up at the announcer, bearing a disapproving look on his face. The announcer stared confusedly for a moment, before regaining his composure.
"WELL HUMAN FIGHT FANS!! boomed the announcer. IT SEEMS VULCAN IS OFFERING US A CHOICE!! NOW, PRAY TELL, SHALL WE LET THE FALLEN WARRIOR LIVE?!"
"NO!" replied the crowd.
"SO BE IT!!' With that, he nodded at James.
I can't thought James. But I must. So he steeled himself, and in one quick motion, drove his blade into Thor's neck, killing him, spilling his blood everywhere.

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The Snide Sniper

The Snide Sniper #1 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · ·

As a great Ent once said, "don't be hasty."

Your story reads like a summary, and suffers greatly for it.

Dragonlover553

Dragonlover553 #2 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · ·

3888766 can you specify a bit?

Violet-Dragoon

Violet-Dragoon #3 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · ·

3902884 Agreed, it doesn't paint a very pretty picture at all. It's like a Jackson Polluk, simply achieved and with little to no effort. Don't get me wrong though, Polluk did rock out loud, I'm just using him as an analogy.

Violet-Dragoon

Violet-Dragoon #4 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · ·

Okay, I'm caught up and I'm in agreement with The Snide Sniper here, you rushed this too much. You description of the battle is brief and image less. What did the arena look like? What did the opponent look like?

Description is key. The more imagery you give us, the more enthralled we become. Despite that, you're doing great. I am a little puzzled by the slightly nonchalant attitude the announcer has toward you human character's hesitation at killing. Any sort of hesitation, or look of acknowledgement from a human could be interpreted as intelligence. I would think he'd be more shocked or flabbergasted than talkative. Then again, announcers are known to be able to think on the fly. Either way, it works. Well done.

Dragonlover553