Cheated Dreams

by Kodeake

Sequel

Hey! This story! It finally got the sequel I promised! Actually, that happened a week ago, but I forgot to post this chapter. Sorry! Anyway, you can find the link to the sequel at the front page for this story. Go read Missing Dreams. The second chapter of it should be up in a couple days.

Comments

[pegasianguitarplayer]

My heart just broke a little bit. I already liked and favorited that story and thought that this chapter was the new one for half of a second. Then I saw how many chapters there were and that it said complete. I was like, "Oh man! He must have cranked that one out!" Silly me. It's early in the morning lol.

[Kodeake]

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Yeah.... the entire point of Neon in this fic was to make the readers hate her. Also, if you read the sequel, you'll hate her even more.

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You know, I could have sworn I fixed that... AH well. Also, I was right with my hail; the ground temperature has to be warm, because hail isc caused by raindrops being lifted by the rising air from the warmer ground, where it is the introduced to the colder temperatures up high, where it freezes, then comes back down.

[Kodeake]

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In the real world, when people are caught cheating at something, say using some form of performance enhancing drug, are they allowed to simply re-do it without said drug? No, they're disqualified - for good reason.

[AleaJactaEst]

"Buck you, buck, buck, buck you, bad Kodeake..." hoof cloping, and then rather quite sound from the other room, "maaa, mama, this bad guy made me cry"
No offense, just making fun from myself and my reaction to this
Interesting thing, realy draws into itself, make you feel everything on your own, with interesting plot, but...
The amount of typos make my eyes suffer hardly. At some point I was thinking to give the thing a re-read (when i'll be done with first time), to point out all the typos, but eventually i understand - i wouldn't be able to. Just not my type of thing for reading maybe, whatever. Also, i do apologize, but i wouldnt read the sequel
Your writings are certainly 20% cooler of that im used to like
Best of luck man, you realy deserve it

[Kodeake]

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The typos in this were a direct result of it being a competition entry; I had limited time to finish this. As it was I published the last chapter mere hours before the deadline. Most of my other work, when not written with a deadline, is much cleaner. Not perfect, mind you, but honestly the mistakes in this make me cringe. i haven't had a chance to give this thing a proper edit, mostly because if I did I'd likely end up rewriting entire chapters I wasn't happy with. The sequel is especially polished by my standards in an effort to make up for the lack-luster writing seen in this.

[graypaw]

daww :D
Good story with some really cute moments.