"All she wants is to make sure others are happy before she makes herself happy. But all she is doing is hurting herself..." Derpy is sinking deep in depression and only the Doctor can save her. Will Derpy leave her friends forever, or will the Doctor save her?
I was listening to the song The A Team and this story popped in my head. So I wrote it and thought is was worthy enough to post! So, Enjoy I guess! (PS. I am sorry the description stinks. I am not good at making summary thingys so... Just give it a chance please!)
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I shall read tomorrow and tell you what I think.
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Ok x3 Can't wait to hear it
OK, my thoughts.
I liked it, well done with the concept and the execution. As a writer I probably could not do much better on my own. As a reader I had to think a bit harder trying to make sense of the words and what was going on. In structure of paragraph it could be better made.
I like Derpy, she is my favorite pony, and the suicidal behavior probably could of been written better. (I say this because I am suicidal and suffer from depression.) All in all I enjoyed reading this, and if you do decide to write more, I will read what more you have to offer.
You have earned a Like from me, and ignore all the dislike. If there is no comment for the dislike then it is irrelevant.
~Make Life an Adventure~
Mr. Flare
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Thank You for the response. It was very helpful! This was really just a story I wrote because I was bored and I was a tiny bit depressed at the time. I felt like I rushed the story a bit, because I had a time limit because everyone was calling me on Skype and I was panicking. But Thank You again for the response and have a wonderful rest of your day x3
MOARRRRR
Um..if that's ok with you, that is...
3819736 I agree!! I need more!
and the only nitpick I have thought of is:
The Doctor calls her Ditzy, not Derpy. Ditzy hates the name Derpy because it refers to her wonky eyes.
There are no words....:
This is really depressing but good great job
Just shuddup and take my money!! This is beautiful and perfect! My favorite ship EVER and it's done in 1000 words...short but absolutely brilliant!
3851917 actually, he calls her both. Being serious or just when he wants to he calls her Ditzy, but other times he calls her Derpy
I love dis!!!!