Celestia and Luna share a tender moment.
Special thanks to TwiwnB for editing
Special thanks to Flint Sparks for pre-reading
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the legitimacy of the grass root workers will never be questioned. the quality... ALWAYS... but the legitimacy. never.
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My apologies for not being able to get around to pre-reading/editing for you on this story due to midterms. I'm sorry...
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with you for a minute? At first I was like 
YEAH YOU BETTER BE SORRY. But then I was like 
Wow that was really random. Bottom line, no worries. We can catch each other next time 
, just do well in school okay. General advice for everyone listening: DON'T GET AN ARTS DEGREE!!!
Can I be
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XD Actually, wanna collab on a one-shot in the future? Maybe? Possibly?
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Of course. As long as it's not clop. Don't have anything against it... just a very touchy subject with me, ya know?
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Yeah. I was thinking more along the lines of a fic where Pinkie gives Twilight a locked box for her birthday.
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That... That's evil. It must happen. It must, It Must, IT MUST!
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I know, right? We'll discuss it whenever you want. Just PM me or message me on my skype (electreXcessive)
This could use some work with a proofreader/editor.
"It's" is always short for "it is", so in this case you want "its".
Missing a comma after the word "nobles".
Since Philomena is being directly addressed, she needs a comma before her name. There also needs to be a comma after Celestia's name, due to the sentence returning to dialogue. I would also put another comma after "season" to indicate a natural pause in speaking.
The word you want is actually "donned".
You definitely need a comma after "said", and while it's optional, you may want to consider one after the word "or". As for Philomena's name, I know sometimes I mean one thing and my fingers type another, so I'm guessing that's what happened to you.
There are some more spots, but I think a few examples are enough...
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Thanks for those catches. People tell me I have an "interesting" way of writing things.