So they're inside the very essence of magic, huh? Pretty cool. I imagine it looking/acting like the loading program in The Matrix. So they're currently their mental projection of their digital-I mean Magical selves.
Emotional problems between TwiDash? Mostly fixed Physical problems? The absence of a body to return to and the magic plane collapsing is troubling (or did that just get fixed?)
Anyways, awesome chapter and can't wait to see what happens next!
normally I'd finish reading before putting comments here but >My heart is round for you is the best thing I've read for a fairly long time. And if nothing else happens this chapter, that was worth it.
edit: Spiritsex -> back to realworld -> Twi is preggers. <.<
Third fic in this community, or ever really, that has ever evoked such a reaction from me, bravo.
Have to say, I've been reading it a while now and the way you manage to get get all those different highs and lows to fit into each chapter so well is amazing. The story as a whole is very well written from start, to where it is right now (please don't let it finish ). The way it develops is very clear in some ways, and subtle in others. The style in which it is written is also well used and aids in the portrayal of the story. The foreshadowing I can see From previous chapters was also very well done and I did not notice it until reading through again. The writing is very well done as well and has clearly developed over time, and I find it difficult to see anything that could be improved upon, honestly.
So, to summarise. Very well written and presented, and one of the most enjoyable reads that I've had. Well done, and I hope to see it continue to grow as it has done.
1433780 Oh my goodness, can't process the idea of Dash being an alicorn What are you up to, TAW? Let's alicornize everything... well, that's a good idea
I love this chapter... Seems like the relationship is fixed We'll see how they go back from the void, where they are now
“There must be another option, I will not allow my student to be hurt while there are other avenues to be researched.”
Don't lose a thousand lives to save one, Celestia. Any good ruler should know that. I mean, I get that's it's her personal student whom she loves like a daughter, but come on.
Damn TAW, you've taken this to well-written clop to an interesting story with clop then to a freakin' emotional rollercoaster. Good work! I can't wait to see how this all wraps up!
You have made this from a storyline that started with Dash writing a self-insert clopfic of her and Daring Do which lead to a sexual encounter with Twilight involving ridiculous amounts of chocolate pudding. What. The. Actual. Fuck. I am in awe. I am in complete awe of how you've managed to weave together such an incredible tale.
1434642 Gosh, thank you! 1434996 No, giving Dash that sort of power seems like a terrible idea! 1435535 I always try to write Celestia with flaws, and this is one of them. She's not a perfect ruler, just almost. 1437593 I... am against multiple endings in many ways. I have a story I'm trying to tell here, it's not up to the readers to choose their favourite.
o gosh the feels! they are so strong! my heart is racing, i'm on the brink of tears and o gawsh that was so great, and i loved how the story developed as it was made it was amazing and I'm happy that it's not done because i wan't more!
Wow...VERY nice...as usual I can only imagine that Twi is now a winged unicorn now?? Or will she outlive Dash by a few millennia?? also 1438349 so much this....so much this XD
I was going to go to bed after reading this, but damnit TAW this is just so amazing! I can't sleep after reading something this awesome. You should write more fics like these!
1439593 if you've had scenes in your head for months that must mean you really wanted to use them and if you really wanted to use them that means that they must be amazingly awesome AH!
My predictions: They're going to use a nexus crystal to escape the magic plane. Twilight said that she could only grow them in her tree house - but it wasn't just her tree house, it was THEIR house. The environment for necessary for creating those crystals is their love. Furthermore, as Dash said, home is where ever she is with Twilight, which should enable them to make a crystal, and rework it to teleport without another crystal.
My thoughts: It's wrong of all of them to blame Dash - not that Twilight 'blames' her. Sure, she left Twilight, but Twilight left her first for her work. Seriously, not even time enough for a simple conversation? Yeesh. They've all drifted apart somewhat, but only Pinkie could see that something was wrong with Dash. Unfortunately, everypony brushed her off as the fool playing at being wise, and nopony aside from her so much as considered Dash's feelings. Thus, the stress built up, she broke, and they blame her simply because she: A) is Rainbow Dash, and B) broke first. And by 'they,' I mostly mean Rarity, who seems just a touch shallow to me at this point - which is fine, because she serves her purpose as a definitive plot device.
Now don't get me wrong, I ain't even criticizin'! Really, I've enjoyed this so grossly that I've not noticed any errors at all. Regardless of how things turn out, I look forward to reading the end of this, because I know that you'll deliver.
TL;DR: I feel bad for Dash, and I can't wait to see how this ends.
1443739 That's a great and adorable idea! Unfortunately, now I can't use it! Ah well.
Your thoughts are right, but you're missing a fairly crucial component. We've seen a lot more than most of their friends have, and before Dash explained it more than even Twilight knew. From their perspective, Dash didn't have any reasoning to do what she did, so I think being angry at her is justified. I had originally planned to have the rest of the girls there at the spa and have a conversation about Dash beforehand, but I was already at like 18,000 words for a 10,000 word chapter, so decided it'd be best to cut that bit. A shame, it could have been interesting. Pinkie wouldn't have blamed Dash either.
Woah! Another update already!? What is this madness? Who cares though, I am quite happy with this!
New chapter!?
Yay!
Ahh, some resolution, nice. Plus Twi accidentally giving herself wings, that's always fun.
Still pissed at Spitfire, she mismanaged Dash's membership on the Wonderbolts really badly.
That was fun, and so much less ouch.
Awesome!!
need moar! nao!
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...Why did it take you a week to give me closure ON THE AGONIZING PAIN?!
THE AGONIZING PAIN?!
AND THEN THEY FUCKED!
or maybe they should get back to the real world first....
Amazing chapter!
1433474
Confusing howso?
1433534
because I loathe editing.
So they're inside the very essence of magic, huh? Pretty cool. I imagine it looking/acting like the loading program in The Matrix. So they're currently their mental projection of their digital-I mean Magical selves.
Gotta give rainbow a horn now... rainbow must have horn.
1433753
But that'd be futa!
brb giving Dash a horn
A proper list of my reactions from start to finish:
I was sad, happy, and confused all at the same time by the end. I love it!
Emotional problems between TwiDash? Mostly fixed
Physical problems? The absence of a body to return to and the magic plane collapsing is troubling (or did that just get fixed?)
Anyways, awesome chapter and can't wait to see what happens next!
1433845
We'll see. Twilight hasn't exactly had much time to explain yet, after all.
1433780 dat idea.....
Oh wow, I thought the story would be over now, that ending just seemed like the perfect ending for the whole story
Am I glad to see the 'Incomplete' tag still in it's rightful place
Awesome chapter! Simply awesome! Now they'd better get back home in one piece
I love, love, love, this fic. One of the best ones I've read so far, can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work
normally I'd finish reading before putting comments here but
>My heart is round for you
is the best thing I've read for a fairly long time. And if nothing else happens this chapter, that was worth it.
edit:
Spiritsex -> back to realworld -> Twi is preggers.
<.<
1433780
Alicornize EVERYTHING!
1434319
Shhh
Third fic in this community, or ever really, that has ever evoked such a reaction from me, bravo.
Have to say, I've been reading it a while now and the way you manage to get get all those different highs and lows to fit into each chapter so well is amazing. The story as a whole is very well written from start, to where it is right now (please don't let it finish ). The way it develops is very clear in some ways, and subtle in others. The style in which it is written is also well used and aids in the portrayal of the story. The foreshadowing I can see From previous chapters was also very well done and I did not notice it until reading through again. The writing is very well done as well and has clearly developed over time, and I find it difficult to see anything that could be improved upon, honestly.
So, to summarise. Very well written and presented, and one of the most enjoyable reads that I've had. Well done, and I hope to see it continue to grow as it has done.
~Nova
1433780 Oh my goodness, can't process the idea of Dash being an alicorn What are you up to, TAW?
Let's alicornize everything... well, that's a good idea
I love this chapter... Seems like the relationship is fixed We'll see how they go back from the void, where they are now
Looking forward to read upcoming chapters!
Only part that confused me is what happened at the spa right when Luna appeared. Might just be misunderstanding it though.
Don't lose a thousand lives to save one, Celestia.
Any good ruler should know that.
I mean, I get that's it's her personal student whom she loves like a daughter, but come on.
Damn TAW, you've taken this to well-written clop to an interesting story with clop then to a freakin' emotional rollercoaster. Good work! I can't wait to see how this all wraps up!
You have made this from a storyline that started with Dash writing a self-insert clopfic of her and Daring Do which lead to a sexual encounter with Twilight involving ridiculous amounts of chocolate pudding.
What.
The.
Actual.
Fuck.
I am in awe.
I am in complete awe of how you've managed to weave together such an incredible tale.
I kinda want multiple endings now.
Sad one that ends right when Dash and Twi break her speed record together. Bodies were never found type of deal.
Spiritsex > preggers alicorn Twi is still good though, do that one.
plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz
Also make that preggers Alicorn Dash cuz that would be funny
plz x Infinity
Wow.... That was amazing, damn I love it when a fic is fifty different flavors of epic.
1434642
Gosh, thank you!
1434996
No, giving Dash that sort of power seems like a terrible idea!
1435535
I always try to write Celestia with flaws, and this is one of them. She's not a perfect ruler, just almost.
1437593
I... am against multiple endings in many ways. I have a story I'm trying to tell here, it's not up to the readers to choose their favourite.
1437987 She won't be able to control the power of a horn, I agree
It reminds me of this
Dammit, now I want so much moar, amazing chapter btw - 9.5/10
1433637
Just replace 'Chell' with 'Twilight'.
Fantastic. I'm in it until the end, now. Brilliant work.
And to think it all started with pudding >.>
...Holy Shit
o gosh the feels! they are so strong! my heart is racing, i'm on the brink of tears and o gawsh that was so great, and i loved how the story developed as it was made it was amazing and I'm happy that it's not done because i wan't more!
1439476
oh, there's more. There are scenes from the next chapter I've had stuck in my head for months. So cute ^_^
Well, I was expecting 'magic is collapsing because its Element is broken', but this works too.
Wow...VERY nice...as usual
I can only imagine that Twi is now a winged unicorn now?? Or will she outlive Dash by a few millennia??
also 1438349 so much this....so much this XD
I was going to go to bed after reading this, but damnit TAW this is just so amazing! I can't sleep after reading something this awesome. You should write more fics like these!
1437987
Very true... no ruler can be perfect.
But I guess she doesn't know the golden rule of war (to me).
1439593
if you've had scenes in your head for months that must mean you really wanted to use them and if you really wanted to use them that means that they must be amazingly awesome AH!
Well.
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I have been reading it for ages now, and it just gets better. But the next chapter? Well, all I'll be able to say after I read it will be:lolbrary.com/content/661/shit-got-real-15661.jpg
I need moar.
1437992 *Sees link*
*Clicks*
*Reaction to image*
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I don't even...
I'm kinda confused
1437987
It was more of a joke then actual requests
Love what you're doing still, absolutely spectacular! Kinda getting anxious to see how it really ends
My predictions:
They're going to use a nexus crystal to escape the magic plane. Twilight said that she could only grow them in her tree house - but it wasn't just her tree house, it was THEIR house. The environment for necessary for creating those crystals is their love. Furthermore, as Dash said, home is where ever she is with Twilight, which should enable them to make a crystal, and rework it to teleport without another crystal.
My thoughts:
It's wrong of all of them to blame Dash - not that Twilight 'blames' her. Sure, she left Twilight, but Twilight left her first for her work. Seriously, not even time enough for a simple conversation? Yeesh. They've all drifted apart somewhat, but only Pinkie could see that something was wrong with Dash. Unfortunately, everypony brushed her off as the fool playing at being wise, and nopony aside from her so much as considered Dash's feelings. Thus, the stress built up, she broke, and they blame her simply because she: A) is Rainbow Dash, and B) broke first. And by 'they,' I mostly mean Rarity, who seems just a touch shallow to me at this point - which is fine, because she serves her purpose as a definitive plot device.
Now don't get me wrong, I ain't even criticizin'! Really, I've enjoyed this so grossly that I've not noticed any errors at all. Regardless of how things turn out, I look forward to reading the end of this, because I know that you'll deliver.
TL;DR: I feel bad for Dash, and I can't wait to see how this ends.
1443739
That's a great and adorable idea! Unfortunately, now I can't use it! Ah well.
Your thoughts are right, but you're missing a fairly crucial component. We've seen a lot more than most of their friends have, and before Dash explained it more than even Twilight knew. From their perspective, Dash didn't have any reasoning to do what she did, so I think being angry at her is justified.
I had originally planned to have the rest of the girls there at the spa and have a conversation about Dash beforehand, but I was already at like 18,000 words for a 10,000 word chapter, so decided it'd be best to cut that bit. A shame, it could have been interesting. Pinkie wouldn't have blamed Dash either.