Collar full

by Aleksandr Sherbet

Collar full

Vices and Virtues

The young fall for the secret of the old and old of the secret of the young.

I know this makes no sense but that's what makes life bearable I like to think of myself in neutrality but what am I?

What are you? Why do you care? Why should you I'm just one silly filly, until he came he was the one the one who loved me for me.

For my craziness for my over the top events. He loved me for all my down falls and yet I didn't love him back.

My name is Pinkie Pie and I invited him here so I can tell him the truth and why I rejected his love, and maybe start a relationship with him.

You...

You wake up knowing that something was a miss sure moving from somewhere far to somewhere where your old friend lived was a bit strange but she invited you here.

For some reason she cared for you which was extremely strange her name was Pinkie Pie the little filly you fell for all those years but you knew it was just a schoolyard crush or was it?

She invited you here gave a room to a hotel and told you to meet her at the top of the hill near town by sundown.

As you walked through town many ponies waved at you happily making your smile widen. A friend of a friend once told you that if you love someone let it go. That sole reminder made your smile faultier was she here to tell you that she was getting married, or that she's pregnant.

You walked through the streets with worry and looked at many shops.

Why would she even bring you here to tell you about marriage, sure you were her best friend all those years but why would she tell you.

She might as well just send you a letter to the ceremony. Or a letter for the location of the baby shower.

Why were you so worked up though, she's old enough to make her own decisions why were you worried?

She just probably brought you here to trade her mistakes.

When you told her you loved her she was silent it was during your birthday she rejected you, and you knew that it was sudden but it was something you had to do.

You sat down on a bench worried for your mind you were scared knowing that it was years ago but the mental image of her stayed with you.

Her mane curly and messy yet beautiful hot pink, her coat light pink with a trio of balloons on her flank and her eyes the most beautiful part of her body light blue like little pools of the clearest of waters.

Pinkie...

I was extremely happy wanting to confess everything to him, the cute colt I met all those years he confessed his love to me but something made me say no, I just couldn't say I loved him back

I was worried about the young colt was he married did he have a young colt or filly on the way. He did respond back he also did check in the hotel that I paid for.

Was he here to just say hi and take off with his loving wife, I couldn't handle the feelings welling up in my head I wanted to cry but I didn't, I breathed in and, breathed out I looked into my mirror and said five simple words.

"You can do it pinkie." I said to myself

I told my friends about my predicament and they supported me they said to follow my heart and talk to him. If he had a family then id start to date again.

Every time I tried to date a stallion it always ended in me crying in my bed, Because I feared that the colt I loved but couldn't admit it to him.

"Okay Pinkie, relax just tell him when you see him again." I inhaled and exhaled the breath I held.

You...

The sun was near the horizon as it was almost time for the truth, it was something that frighten you was she going to reject your love or embrace it.

You semi understood why she didn't say she loved you, mostly because you two were at the age where you two didn't understand how love worked.

You sat on the hill waiting for the very mare you going to confess to the very mare that may want a relationship with you.

You swallowed a lump that you were holding in your throat.

"It's okay if she has news on her personal life it's okay just don't worry you got this." You said to yourself

You heard hoofsteps and looked to your side to see the very mare you wanted to meet.

"Um h-hello uh ..." She said your name her beautiful hyperactive voice gone replaced by a nervous yet calm voice.

"Oh hey Pinkie I got your letter what did you want to talk about?" You asked

"Um I well do you remember when you told me that you loved me when we were a lot younger?" She asked nervousness clearly there in her voice

"Y-yes? What about it?"

"And I said that I couldn't love you well I I I I was wrong. After rejecting you I started dating other stallions and every once in awhile I'd have a dream or visualize you and I couldn't stop crying after that I love you. I LOVE YOU!" She shouted as her lips connected with yours

You were stunned by the sudden affection, and the sudden shout. She admitted that she loved you.

You gasped for air as she backed away shyly.

"I'm sorry I got carried away." She said looking away

You put a hoof on her lips and kissed her again. You slowly closed your eyes as she closed hers.

You wanted this and you, you felt great the mare of your dreams with you.

"Pinkie I love you."

Author's Note:

Yeah I'm not good but whatever.

Comments

[TalltalePony]

Well, I'll say this: You could have used someone to review your grammar and punctuation, and the ending felt a tad bit rushed, but it got the job done. I felt those feels. To, in a thousand words, make me (cynical prick that I am) feel something takes skill.

You've got a thumbs up from me. Good job!

[Aleksandr Sherbet]

3351191 thanks it was something I made in a few minutes.

[Lord Vinder]

So...where to start.
Issues.
+This wasn't edited.
+I had to read several sentences at least twice to understand what was going on; your lack of commas and grammar was most displeasing.
+Clearly showed it was written in half an hour--or less.
+Names and I should always be capitalized,
+You missed words at some points.

Pro's.
+You KISed it--Kept It Simple.
+"You semi understood why she didn't say she loved you, mostly because you two were at the age where you two didn't understand how love worked." I like that line. I like that line a lot.
+Capable story.
+Short, Sweet, and efficient.

6/10. I liked it, wouldn't read it again, but I liked it enough

[PyrodianBrony]

Plenty of spelling and grammar mistakes, yes, but I forgive ya. After all, you did say you made this in half an hour. You earned a like from me, though. :D Great story!

[Aleksandr Sherbet]

3376319 thank you it means a lot

[PyrodianBrony]

3376366 :D No prob

[Phenoix12]

It was a little hard to follow at times but in the end it was okay. Thumbs up.
...also do you listen to 'Panic! At The Disco' because I swear I saw a reference to them in this story.

[Aleksandr Sherbet]

6038299 yes I do!

[Phenoix12]

6038388
So I guess that means that those references were intentional.