Well, this suddenly got a lot more interesting-waitwaitwaitwait! That... what's-her-face, the bisexual waitress Viola worked with in the bar? Wasn't she an Earth Pony?
Geez, that Doc aint very discrete. Even though she isn't technically his patient, I suspect spilling stuff she obviously wants kept quiet like that would be considered unethical by medical types.
3281744 Plush? Yeah, I wondered what her involvement would be later on in the story.
I don't usually like to read ahead and speculate in stories like this, I'd rather just take it as it comes. But it seems likely that is where this scenario is headed.
"Come on, Vi," she spoke sweetly, "The doctor has no appointments now, so he can see me right now."
I, personally, try to avoid using a word twice in a sentence (unless it's "the" or something). Read this sentence. Doesn't it sound odd? I think "The doctor has no appointments, so he can see me right now" or whatever you feel is right. You can keep it, as is, but I think it sounds more casual and it doesn't break immersion. In my opinion, at least.
"I think it is possible to get you pregnant,' he said in a serious tone.
I like how this story took a medical sort of turn, having face'd her fears, Viola now understands she has a condition AND can naturally get pregnant?!?! This is awesome! But... Will her PTSD hinder her in the future? 5 / 5 stars..!
Well, I kinda saw it coming. I mean that her colegue from the cafe will help her wirh making a foal. But I particalury like the explonation of how does it work. Very logical (if you can use such word when you apply it to magic).
One thing no one else is mentioning. Way to go Glimmer. Way to spill personal secrets at the drop of a hat. Way to be a friend. (note sarcasm) Man. If a friend of mine ever spilled a secret that personal to ANYONE else, even a professional, one black eye would be the least of their troubles. I can't continue reading. That betrayal of trust just leaves my stomach in knots. Gonna have to withdraw my follow. Not gonna touch the like button. Gonna leave that green. Ciao.
Oh dear...I like this guy, but something tells me that his method of treatment is unauthorized... or not legal... or blacklisted, or something of the sort...
So...Basically does Violet just has to turn gay or something with another female? Well, this isn't the first time I've read something like this happening, and so far you've done well to keep me interested. So, whether or not I am kept interested depends on how well you explain this, er, process in which she can become pregnant. I expect to hear at least some description of how the magic is going to be transferred. Even if it requires magic to do it. Which I assume it will. Also, when you finish this story, I demand that you put a picture of what her baby looks like in a separate chapter, like was done in another story called 'March to the Scaffold'. Brilliant story, by the by. The guy who wrote it was friendly enough. So yeah, two thumbs up for this chapter.
3284243 Mine says this guy's possible 'method' has been banned from medical usage and he's a psycho who wants to do this regardless of any possible consequences, 'for science', so anything's possible.
You just like throwing twists and turns in your stories don't you. Once I think I've figured how this story's going to roll, and am ready to pack it in... cdn3.sbnation.com/imported_assets/1011193/348oawl_jpg_medium.gif You decide it's time to throw a bird in front of the speeding ball....Murderer.
You know what? Like a school bus driven by a golden retriever, I have no idea where this is going. Plush is a bit of an obvious choice, and so the technicals all look to work out nicely, EXCEPT there's more than a couple metric s*yay*t-ton of emotions to be worked through. Plush's connection to the foal, Glimmer's well-intentioned betrayal (or is it poorly-executed loyalty? She did what she had to do, but she had to hurt Vi...), there may be more going on with Herr Doktor than we've seen, and of course Viola herself is mostly a ball of rage, despiration, lonelyness, pain, terror and then there's the actual mental illness to deal with.
Oh yea. The plot thickened so much. So so much. I think this calls for my party cannon. Modified for positive things! Here you go! http://i.imgur.com/ScHXXc6.gif
3296489 I have seen the magic explanation WAY too many times. This fic can make a good story with good drama, but the use of magic can take a ton out of that drama interest. It will depend on how you use this to develop the story. It can either make or break this fic, so be careful.
I knew I'd like this fic the second I saw it. And not just due to the adorable batpony. It did not prove me wrong.
Viola is interesting as all hell. The way that she thinks. Her mannerisms. Her views. Even her panic attacks. All of her oddity makes for a very engaging character. I can't say that I get all of her hangups, entirely, but I'm sure we'll get there. I'm certainly willing to wait for all that to come to light.
I really have to give props for the way you handled the eroticism in the piece. It's mature, thoughtful and yeah, more than a little titillating at times. All without being crude or explicit. I can buy into it, and I don't feel like it's just shameless sex for its own sake. That's always a very difficult path to walk. So kudos for pulling it off, in my view.
As for this particular chapter: I'm always happy to see earth pony magic touched on. It's so very easy to overlook, and is never touched on in canon. And I count that as an incredible shame and a wasted opportunity. Can't wait to see what you do with it!
Earth pony mare... Dafuq?
Well, this suddenly got a lot more interesting-waitwaitwaitwait!
That... what's-her-face, the bisexual waitress Viola worked with in the bar? Wasn't she an Earth Pony?
Geez, that Doc aint very discrete. Even though she isn't technically his patient, I suspect spilling stuff she obviously wants kept quiet like that would be considered unethical by medical types.
holy fuck balls! that's a damn good way to link up the plot nicely. I'm so excited right now!
Magic to the rescue ? Let's see how this turns out.
A minor typo;
Otherwise, I think I have a pretty good guess as to how Violet gets a baby.
3281744 HOLY F*CK. HOLY F*CKING SH*T. WHADDAF*CK. Conspiracy theory! We must go deeper, Scotty!
Oh gawd, yes. DOKTOR IS HERE.
Holy crap that was awsome!
I always like fics that say pegasi and earth ponies have their own special magic. I don't hold to much headcanon, but that I can accept and believe.
3281744 Plush? Yeah, I wondered what her involvement would be later on in the story.
I don't usually like to read ahead and speculate in stories like this, I'd rather just take it as it comes. But it seems likely that is where this scenario is headed.
Yay she can have a foal of her own now really looking towards the next chapter.
Accidentally'd that "F"
I, personally, try to avoid using a word twice in a sentence (unless it's "the" or something). Read this sentence. Doesn't it sound odd? I think "The doctor has no appointments, so he can see me right now" or whatever you feel is right. You can keep it, as is, but I think it sounds more casual and it doesn't break immersion. In my opinion, at least.
Missing quotation mark.
3281754 It is
I like how this story took a medical sort of turn, having face'd her fears, Viola now understands she has a condition AND can naturally get pregnant?!?! This is awesome! But... Will her PTSD hinder her in the future?
5 / 5 stars..!
So...
The disorder is recognized and perhaps Viola could slowly begin to heal. She might never recover, but at least she has some closure.
She also can take some time to change her lifestyle for her child too. It's highly unbecoming for a mother to have the current occupation she has now.
Earth-pony mares have a magical hereditary trait to be fertile. I'm assuming it's hereditary because of racial traits and background. Nice touch.
Only one detail remains unexplained...
Who is willing to donate?
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I wonder, was Plush an Earth Pony?
Well, I kinda saw it coming. I mean that her colegue from the cafe will help her wirh making a foal. But I particalury like the explonation of how does it work. Very logical (if you can use such word when you apply it to magic).
One thing no one else is mentioning. Way to go Glimmer. Way to spill personal secrets at the drop of a hat. Way to be a friend. (note sarcasm) Man. If a friend of mine ever spilled a secret that personal to ANYONE else, even a professional, one black eye would be the least of their troubles. I can't continue reading. That betrayal of trust just leaves my stomach in knots. Gonna have to withdraw my follow. Not gonna touch the like button. Gonna leave that green. Ciao.
I guess you could say that Viola got a bit
Batshit Crazy
YEAAAAA- (Gets violently shot - multiple times)
But! Comet, come on! Step up your game!
1st I could've sworn that last chapter, the kind doctor had said something along the lines of "What are you doing on my balcony?"
2nd At the very end the quotation mark is missing its friend.
Pregnant, ', not "
Oh dear...I like this guy, but something tells me that his method of treatment is unauthorized... or not legal... or blacklisted, or something of the sort...
Hurr durr, awkward as fuck reading.
So...Basically does Violet just has to turn gay or something with another female?
Well, this isn't the first time I've read something like this happening, and so far you've done well to keep me interested.
So, whether or not I am kept interested depends on how well you explain this, er, process in which she can become pregnant. I expect to hear at least some description of how the magic is going to be transferred. Even if it requires magic to do it. Which I assume it will.
Also, when you finish this story, I demand that you put a picture of what her baby looks like in a separate chapter, like was done in another story called 'March to the Scaffold'. Brilliant story, by the by. The guy who wrote it was friendly enough.
So yeah, two thumbs up for this chapter.
I can see where this is going, and it is interesting...
AHH!! She's gonna use pluch for her fertility! i call that she's going to fake emotions for plush just to have a kid.
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I smell a potential plot point.
the little voice in the back of my head wants to suggest big mac coming into the picture somehow
3284243 Mine says this guy's possible 'method' has been banned from medical usage and he's a psycho who wants to do this regardless of any possible consequences, 'for science', so anything's possible.
Awhhh she might get so happy. Here's to hope!
You just like throwing twists and turns in your stories don't you. Once I think I've figured how this story's going to roll, and am ready to pack it in...
cdn3.sbnation.com/imported_assets/1011193/348oawl_jpg_medium.gif
You decide it's time to throw a bird in front of the speeding ball....Murderer.
But, seriously, nice in the story.
You know what? Like a school bus driven by a golden retriever, I have no idea where this is going. Plush is a bit of an obvious choice, and so the technicals all look to work out nicely, EXCEPT there's more than a couple metric s*yay*t-ton of emotions to be worked through. Plush's connection to the foal, Glimmer's well-intentioned betrayal (or is it poorly-executed loyalty? She did what she had to do, but she had to hurt Vi...), there may be more going on with Herr Doktor than we've seen, and of course Viola herself is mostly a ball of rage, despiration, lonelyness, pain, terror and then there's the actual mental illness to deal with.
This could very well be interesting.
Something told me Plush would be coming back into the story. She's an earth right?
Oh yea. The plot thickened so much. So so much. I think this calls for my party cannon. Modified for positive things! Here you go! http://i.imgur.com/ScHXXc6.gif
Every time a doctor proposes something experimental, I think human centipede.
oh my god give me moar!!! the suspense is killing me
Another interesting chapter!
3284666
I had the same idea
LIKE I SAID BEFORE!!!!! POST MORE CHAPTERS!!!! PLEASE! IT'S SO GOOD BRO!!
Doctors with insane ideas that somewhat make sense are the best kind of doctor.
yey, possible foal! I can't wait for the cuteness!
Vi's gonna have a baby! Hopefully!
If this works out, then there is hope for the bat-pony race yet.
oh damn... i can't wait to see where this leads
I KNEW DOCTOR CRIMSON-COLT WILL SAVE THE DAY
Magic? MAGIC???? You are using that old excuse??? It had better be a good story because that is the most overused Bucking solution in fanfics!!
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Do you doubt my ability?
3296489 I have seen the magic explanation WAY too many times. This fic can make a good story with good drama, but the use of magic can take a ton out of that drama interest. It will depend on how you use this to develop the story. It can either make or break this fic, so be careful.
I knew I'd like this fic the second I saw it. And not just due to the adorable batpony. It did not prove me wrong.
Viola is interesting as all hell. The way that she thinks. Her mannerisms. Her views. Even her panic attacks. All of her oddity makes for a very engaging character. I can't say that I get all of her hangups, entirely, but I'm sure we'll get there. I'm certainly willing to wait for all that to come to light.
I really have to give props for the way you handled the eroticism in the piece. It's mature, thoughtful and yeah, more than a little titillating at times. All without being crude or explicit. I can buy into it, and I don't feel like it's just shameless sex for its own sake. That's always a very difficult path to walk. So kudos for pulling it off, in my view.
As for this particular chapter: I'm always happy to see earth pony magic touched on. It's so very easy to overlook, and is never touched on in canon. And I count that as an incredible shame and a wasted opportunity. Can't wait to see what you do with it!
You have yet to stop giving my Mind-splosions
This story is so good it hurts.
*Checks to see if author has begun work on the next chapter*
*Sees nothing*
[Anger intensifies]