Attack of the Cyberponies

Mysterious metal ponies have invaded Ponyville. Can Applejack stop them before they upgrade everypony? She'll need all her courage to do so - plus some help from the enigmatic stranger, Doctor Whooves.

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Masked_Frenchman

Masked_Frenchman #1 · Aug 28th, 2013 · · ·

Wow, for some one so new, you are really good. Spelling is amazing, grammar is good as well , I am a new doctor who fan and I thought this was really good, I am a some what new writer myself. if you ever need story ideas and what not, read some of my stuff, I am a hopeless romantic so almost all of my stories are romance based. But if you ever want to get some ideas or advice or anything, just let me know, although you look better off than I am. Either way, I enjoyed your story

scarletmanuka

scarletmanuka #2 · Aug 28th, 2013 · · ·

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Thanks so much for the feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I have a friend who proofs my work so I really can't take credit for the correct grammar . When he gave it back to me he'd picked up so many mistakes! But I shall slowly learn You should check out his stories, they're awesome
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/eselle
I'll definitely check out your stories, nothing wrong with being a hopeless romantic lol

Screw

Screw #3 · Aug 28th, 2013 · · ·

This was interesting. You managed to stuff all the actions and drama so quick that I didn't had time to get my feel fast enough to process. Nice short and sweet story.

Masked_Frenchman

Masked_Frenchman #4 · Aug 28th, 2013 · · ·

3118348 I see, so you have a proof reader from the start, huh? Niceness! but yea, I loved your story, I will be honest, when I read that part about you having a proof reader I was like "Oh, I guess that makes sense" but even if you do, way to go, I don't have a proof reader but I am slowly learning to not need one, here is a helpful hint for ya to take down a good chunk of those stupid spelling errors, just for you! make a google account and use google drive, I now use that for my writing and I have almost no spelling or grammar mistakes, now it's just like "opps, accidentally put a comma instead of a period," I think you have potential, I'll help you in any way I can, so if ya need help, just let me know, and as always, have a good morning/day/evening

Nic Whooves

Nic Whooves #5 · Aug 29th, 2013 · · ·

A doctor whooves story... wow....this is better then mine...good job. keep up the work

scarletmanuka

scarletmanuka #6 · Aug 29th, 2013 · · ·

3118852 lol Trust me, I didn't plan on having a proof reader. I didn't even plan on publishing the story! Eselle suggested I watch the show as he loves it and I devoured all three seasons in about a week. I then got a little inspired and wrote Attck of the Cyberponies. He offered to read over it which was lucky. I'm a comma splicing heathen!

I'm working on a new story now which doesn't feature Doctor Whooves. I'm hoping my first draft is much better this time round. We shall see

Masked_Frenchman

Masked_Frenchman #7 · Aug 29th, 2013 · · ·

3122775 ether way, I wish you the best of luck of course, I might do a quick story about it, not sure, I am caught up on 4 stories at the moment, not a lot of room for another at this time but still, I look forward to reading this, great job, I normally only read big timers stories, but I am glad I gave this a chance, I should do that more often