Test - Drizzle Quill
Author: Drizzle Quill
Prompt: Test
After another horrifyingly stressful day as a princess of Equestria, there was nothing more that Twilight Sparkle loved to do than curl up in her warm bed under the sheets with a stack of books next to her, and she would read them one by one. The adventure stories captured her mind and held it, not letting it go, while the comedy stories had her snorting so loud that Spike would wake up and yell at her to be quiet. But the romance stories…ah, the romance stories were pure gold. The passionate words spoken by the lovers, the wonderful interactions that they had…
…Twilight wanted to feel that someday. And she knew exactly which pony she wanted to feel it with.
Pinkamina Diane Pie, or perhaps more commonly known as Pinkie Pie, Ponyville’s craziest party pony.
Some might wonder at the princess choosing this particular pony, but for the last few months, Pinkie had certainly made a lasting impression on Twilight. Her clinginess and random yet heartfelt statements made her chest throb until she was sure her heart would explode straight out of it. Her sparkly blue eyes made her want to embrace that adoring pink equine.
But her only question was: Did Pinkie return the feelings?
Twilight closed her book, lost in her train of thought. Immediately she knew what she had to do.
She had to conduct a test. And not just any test. A test of romance, of skill, and of heart.
A test to see if Pinkie Pie loved her back.
Part One of the test was to send flowers. Flowers and an anonymous note. That always worked in the books. Twilight narrowed her eyes in concentration as she levitated the bouquet into perfect formation on the doorstep of Sugarcube Corner. A single bead of sweat trickled down the side of her face as the flowers shifted ever so slightly to the left…
“Hiya, Twilight!”
The alicorn shrieked and leapt about a foot in the air, whipping around to see none other than Ponyville’s proclaimed pink party pony standing in front of her with a wide grin. “P-Pinkie Pie! What’re you doing?”
“Following you, silly-filly Twilight!” Pinkie giggled. “What’re you doing with those flowers?”
Heat flooded to Twilight’s face before she knew what was happening; she flattened her ears back, heart suddenly pounding. “…testing something?” she croaked, because that was true.
“Can I see?”
Before Twilight could answer, Pinkie had already bounced over to the flowers and sniffed them, breathing in the scent with a contented sigh. “Preeeetty…Ooh, a note~!” With a little giggle she plucked it out from between the flowers.
The alicorn’s heartbeat, if possible, quickened.
“Pinkie, no! Don’t read tha—”
“If your eyes are blue, they’re the best kind of blue, the one that makes me shudder with delight and say…” Pinkie looked up, and stared straight at Twilight, apparently having memorized the last three words already. They were relatively easy to remember, after all. The most common phrase in romance stories. “…I love you.”
Twilight had no idea what to say; her mind felt as blank as a sheet of parchment just waiting to be written on. “Pinkie…I…” she managed to get out, and then blanked again when she felt pink arms wrapping around her neck in a tight embrace.
“Twilight,” Pinkie whispered in her ear, a breath, a simple word. “Why do you think I was following you today, silly filly?” She snuggled harder, and Twilight’s heartbeat, for the third time, increased. “I was going to tell you the same thing.”
The scene following was more or less like a scene in one of the romance books Twilight had read, yet it was so much better because it was so real. She could smell the sweets in Pinkie’s mane and breathe in the essence of the pony now pressing her lips to hers, and all she could think beyond the pure ecstasy was test complete.
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D'awww...
Very sweet, yeah, and the whole "testing her love thing" is cliche, but it is something Twilight would definitely do. Still, the nitpick inside me took issue with some odd word choices and "silly dilly" (it's always been silly filly, so this just perplexed me). Still nice, but not as much of a fan as I am of the others so far.
This one was cute. The ending was my favorite part, when it became clear that Pinkie had feelings for Twilight too. It did seem sort of rushed to me, but it's understandable considering the 500 word constraints. It does seem like a very Twilight thing to do, and I'm glad it worked out for her.
Coincidence is coincidental. I just figured that Pinkie stalked all of her friends in her down time. (and by down time, of course I mean the time that she spends on the ground, so like 40-60% of the time)
Tests are totally Twilight's thing, but it would have been nice to see a little conflict. Perhaps if she had tested herself to be sure of her feelings...but that's me being nitpicky. Nice job.
Cute