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Twinkie prompts that are 100-500 words long written by many talented authors and put together into a collection for the very first time! (Credit goes to the AppleDash group, who started it all)
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So who's ready to eat - I mean, read, - some Twinkies?
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Twinkie? Never heard that one before.
I like Twinkies!
One of the perfect couples in my mind.
Because as family guy taught us Twinkies are one of the few things that can stand up to a nuclear blast.
Poor rarity
*squee*
This pleases me greatly, given that Twinkie is a pairing that is often overlooked.
Have a chorus of Flutteryays
D'awww...
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Sorry, I just had to do this
I just remembered... what happened in September! Haha, I like this, cause the song came into my head at the very first line, and I didn't realize it was intentional until Twilight's last line.
Hooray for nonsensical pairings!
Twinkies
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I thought this fandom was about tolerance.
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Being in a fandom does not make me obligated to "tolerate" anything.
"Love and Tolerance" is just a defense mechanism. Very few people actually follow it.
If I am getting the implications it sounds like Twilight was going to make a potion to force Pinkie to love her. I think I would have liked the idea better if she was creating a potion to prevent her loving at all or to have her forget about Pinkie. That would make just as much drama but with less moral problems.
… I used to wonder what friendship could be...
'Til five good mares showed its magic to me...
There was Big adventure, we had Tons of fun...
Our beautiful hearts were Faithful and strong...
We shared our kindness. It was an easy feat,
and magic made it all complete~
You know you were all my very best friends...
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Really?, by the implications it seemed to me that Twilight was making an potion to change herself into an stallion because she was under the impression that Pinkie liked stallions and not mares.
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Hmm could be I guess. That is certainly better than the force Pinkie to love you plan...
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You would be correct about her changing herself into a stallion.
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This depressed me more than actually writing it did. Stop that. Please.
Going to take a look at and review the other segments, partly curiosity and partly because I don't want to just post my own work and leave. If it gets annoying, stop me.
I found this one really, really sweet, and kind of funny at the start. It's a classic set-up, yes, but as it's done I think it could warrant a full one-shot. Though as a side note...
In light of the entry I wrote, I honestly felt like bawling my eyes out right here.
Beauty of collab anthologies is when their entries can emotionally collide by complete accident, I think.
Short, really sweet, really hit me right in the feels.
Though I guess if I had the nitpick, the note could've been better... then again, knowing Twilight, that's the smoothest she's capable of being when it comes to romance. 
Very sweet, yeah, and the whole "testing her love thing" is cliche, but it is something Twilight would definitely do. Still, the nitpick inside me took issue with some odd word choices and "silly dilly" (it's always been silly filly, so this just perplexed me). Still nice, but not as much of a fan as I am of the others so far.
Not exactly sweet, but I liked how distinctly themselves Twilight and Pinkie were, if that makes sense. I guess a tiny step beyond being in character and towards being the characters. Eh, I'm probably making no sense. Still, I liked.
Another one I really like.
Both Twi and Pinkie seemed a step beyond being in character, especially Pinkie. I could totally see her doing every single little action here, especially her simple but silly and sweet proposal. It got a big smile out of me. 
Though...
Fix this?
The others were sweet... I think this one gave me diabeetus.
What really struck me was the loving, almost sensual nature and tone of it that really brought forth the "d'awwww"s and the goofy grin. Love it! 
Though I am a bit perplexed by the choice of Trixie. 
First off, appreciate this one not going for the obvious deathbed route. That said, it tried to tug my heartstrings really hard, but I was more vexed than anything. I mean, yeah, three months can really feel like a long, long time, but it does come to an end before long. Not the sort of dilemma I find tear-worthy. It's probably just me, though.
I would love this so much more if not for the glaring spelling, capitalization, and formatting errors.
This is seriously the one where Twilight is most like Twilight and Pinkie is most like Pinkie I've seen thus far. It's sweet, it's funny, and really enjoyable - and yet the errors ruin the effect. Someone please fix? 
Um... wow. This... this sets the bar.
Emotionally impacting, great atmosphere (loving and more than a bit sensual, which I'm a sucker for), very, very, very well written... just...
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Following the author of it just for this segment. Seriously, this was beyond great.
This was another really sweet one, and babbling TMI Twilight is always adorable... but then that ending.
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I can't be the only one who thought of this! I mean... Jesus! That doesn't make this entry bad or anything, but... Jesus!
Sad, but... more bizarre than anything.
Not really sure what to feel about this one. Just sort of... neutral.
Sweet, kind of funny, though the premise of Celestia finding two orphans and immediately giving them to her protege is... odd and a bit flawed? I mean, why those two orphans specifically? They can't be the only ones.
Still, this one was okay.
Another loving, sensual piece that I'm a total sucker for.
Really liked this one. It's the sort of thing Pinkie would do. 
Also, this bit:
This made me giggle so hard. Started sounding seductive, then descended into nerdery of the highest order - and Twi still probably thought it sounded seductive.
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Sorry... I... I just find it all too sad... it hurts...
It's nice as an overview of their relationship and the history accompanying it, and I suppose a history excerpt is a really nice, unexpected way to capture Longevity, but as a story... I'm kind of meh on this one, meself, but that's just my opinion.
Aside from some major formatting errors and a spelling error here or there, I kinda liked this one. Again, sensuality is a surefire way to make me like something. On the other hand... making Rarity a sort-of housebreaker...? Not the sort of thing that can be introduced and dropped in a short, under 1k snippet, in my opinion.
Another "oh god I have diabeetus" entry.
And... honestly one that really hit home for me. I once was so hopelessly, foolishly in love with a straight friend of mine I considered getting the same change in the future, even though I wasn't truly trans. Thankfully came to my senses. 
This is another entry I really, really like, needless to say, especially how unorthodox it is with the prompt that was assigned.
This entry I'm sort of "eh" on. Some formatting and mechanics errors aside, the emotions felt somewhat flat for me. That, and I can't really get into any piece that includes a song without a link to the actual music.
Okay, completely caught up... but I've noticed I'm the only contributor really reviewing the other entries.
Shouldn't we be encouraging feedback in return for posting entries? Because otherwise that's encouraging just posting work and leaving, which doesn't really bring the individual authors together like a collab ideally would. 
I don't know, maybe I'm just babbling.
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Although I'm the mod of this, I think I will do that as well - go through and individually review them. So that we're all combined, knowing we've read the works being posted and all. I think I'll go post something to encourage the others to do the same.
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You have a good point there. I think I'll do that as well.
I really like this one. It definitely wasn't what I expected from the prompt given, even though a wedding does seem to fit the bill. I especially liked how you emphasized on her being scared, and then as time went on, excited. The transition was lovely and you did a good job. If anything would need improvement, I'd also have to say the note. It didn't seem like something Twilight would write, and it didn't impact my feels as much as the rest of the entry. But even so, you still did very well.
This one was cute. The ending was my favorite part, when it became clear that Pinkie had feelings for Twilight too. It did seem sort of rushed to me, but it's understandable considering the 500 word constraints. It does seem like a very Twilight thing to do, and I'm glad it worked out for her.
This one was adorable. I absolutely loved how you portrayed Pinkie. The way she proposed to Twilight was a very cute gesture that, had I not known the prompt title was proposal, I wouldn't have known what was to come. The only thing I had a problem with was how Pinkie spoke when she had things in her mouth. The way it was written didn't really hit home with me, though I understand what was going on. Overall, a cute entry, with minor errors. Good job!
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As I go through and comment on each one of these entries, I like seeing your comments on 'em. And of course, I can't critique my own work, so I figured I'd reply to you while I'm on my own entry. Anyway, I don't know why I chose Trixie. Just kinda seemed right for the story--It's always a sorceress that steals a princess, and Trixie stuck out to me as a worthy character in that regard.
I think this would've been sadder had the time been extended longer. If it was something like a year, or even more than that, I'd understand why Twilight's so emotionally distraught. As a kid in a military family, this one would've really tugged at my heartstrings if I could connect more with it. To me, three months isn't all that long. I've had to move every three years and start over with new friends, so this one had a lot of potential to me. That's not to say it wasn't sad, but that one detail lessened the blow. I like how it was written, especially the part at the party, but it still seemed a bit melodramatic. Either way, good job.
I like the idea behind this one, and especially the thought of Rainbow Dash "always dressing in style". That's just too funny to me.
However, I have to agree with LD. There were a bunch of mistakes littered throughout this entry, and it did make it less enjoyable. The most notable of which is this:
There were way too many quotation marks in this, and when you thought she was done talking, she wasn't. Other than that, there were quite a few other errors, such as not capitalizing, missing commas, misspelled words... The idea was good, but the grammar was a fatal flaw.
Man, this entry was amazing. I feel like all I can do right now is sing praises to the author. The descriptions were great, and Twilight's feelings were almost tangible. And especially how Twilight had said "It's just me being dumb again" and having Pinkie counter that... It was a very emotional piece.
It's just... gah. I can't explain how I'm feeling right now. I'm still not sure if Pinkie actually returned Twi's feelings, as it seems to me she could've just been comforting her. But seriously, this one is among my favorites for the collab. You did absolutely great. I don't think there's anything I could honestly critique about it, especially considering the 500 word limit (though, you did happen to go over. Ah, well. Not by much).
I really hope you write more Twinkie, because I'll definitely read it. You've earned a watch on my part. (Seriously, how do you not have thousands of them? Your writing looks really good!)
I found this one endearing. I hadn't expected it at all, and my heart just about leaped out of my chest when Twi almost said it was a rock. I also think it was very cute when Twilight started rambling about Pinkie's closet and the embarrassing things in it. It was a really unexpected way to go with the prompt, and I seriously doubt anyone saw it coming.
Great job!
This was an interesting piece, though I have to say it was strange. I can't see the princesses killing Pinkie Pie without a really good reason, and I don't think it worked well within the 500 word limit. I found myself wondering who was narrating half the time, and I also don't think Spike would've been so... calm about it. He knows about Pinkie's fate since he's talking about it, and yet he's okay with it? This type of idea would've been better suited as an entire story, as then it could be elaborated with more details instead of a timeline of sorts. It fell kind of flat emotion-wise, but I did really like this:
That was my favorite part of the story. You did okay, but there are ways it could've been improved.