Enemy - Shigawan
Author: Shigawan
Prompt: Enemy
“Since I subjacated this silly savant,” Pinkie Pie giggled as her bubblegum mane curled tighter and tighter with growing energy, “I have become powerful. This preposterous precog permits me to peruse plausible paths to my personal paradise! The energy enveloped by this eccentric equine engulfs my very essense!”
Twilight stomach churned violently. Outmaneuvered, her best friends lay strewn about the forest and she had failed to save Pinkie Pie from influence of those Nightmarish whispers.
“My friends,” Pinkie bellowed, “I’m having so much fun!” With a laugh, she bounded over to the limp Applejack and landed a swift kick to the farmer’s ribs. “Buck you, Applejack!”
Leaping over to a cowering Rarity, the pink bundle of malevolent energy began to theatrically examine a gash across the seamstress’ muzzle. “Oh Rarity, I think that might need stiches!”
A grunt drew her attention to a slowly crawling Rainbow Dash, trying her best to crawl to the aid of her friends. “Heya, Dashie!” Pinkie Pie sang as she cartwheeled towards the prone racer.
Dash spat on the ground. “Only Pinkie Pie calls me that. And you aren’t her.”
“Well, DUH! But I control her. I command her every errant thought and muscle twitch. I can control what she sees and feels, how she acts and talks.” The figure that was previously Pinkie Pie paused as her face grew incredibly somber. “I can make her enjoy this. The thing she cares most about in this world, her precious friends, I can corrupt her so completely that she feels pleasure from your pain.”
Whirling around, the being in Pinkie’s body stomped mirthlessly towards the bound Twilight. “I can make her despise Dash, ravage Rarity, abase Applejack and even flay Fluttershy…so why?” Shaking, Pinkie’s face grew pained. “Why can I only tentatively tease you, Twilight? What makes you so special?”
Twilight answered, her gaze like flint despite her watering eyes and wavering voice. “Because when my misgivings about opening my heart wide enough for a special somepony almost drove us apart, Pinkie Pie swore she would never hurt me. She Pinkie Promised. Just like I Pinkie Promised that I would save her.”
With a lunge, Twilight tapped Pinkie’s forehead with her horn and let loose a powerful spell. “Nobody breaks a Pinkie Promise.”
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I liked that one. I think that depicting the fight scene before would have led the ending to have more emotional impact.
I... love this one.
One, omg alliteration. 
Two, Nightmare Pinkie? Yes, this must be a thing. 
Three, the idea that one of her Pinkie Promises could go past even demonic possession is so incredibly sweet, a bit heroic, and perfectly in-character that it's amazing. Gold star! 
I'm not sure why I like this one. Upon my first read-through, I was confused about what was going on, and then by the second, I had fallen in love with it. Especially these parts:
Alliteration for the win. The ending was also very in-character of Twilight. She's the kind of pony that'll stay strong no matter what, and never give up to opposition. I feel this was a nice thing to include, as often times this part of her character is overlooked. Somehow, this reminds me of some of the more gruesome Pinkie fics/animations I've seen, but I'm glad you didn't make her Pinkamena. That irks me. On the other hand, it was original to make her possessed, instead.
Loved it.
It was too short!!!
AAARRRRGGGHHH!!!!
But it was AWESOME!!!!!