The Twinkie Group Collab!

by Drizzle Quill

Never - Yesterday

Author: Yesterday

Prompt: Never

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"Pinkie... I'm sorry, but again, no. I appreciate how you feel it's just... I'm not sure about how I feel, try again later, maybe?" Twilight slipped behind the door closing it behind her.

The pink party mares mane deflated with a woosh, and she looked down sadly. It was always the same, always 'later,' never just 'yes' or 'no'. Just false hope. She ignored the swooping sounds of the wings of a pegasus coming to a halt above, still paying close attention to the ground and firmly planted in the same spot.

"Hey Pinks, what's gotcha so down?" Rainbow Dash said, hovering over a cloud that was floating over Pinkie Pies head. Pinkie shook her head, "nothing..."

Rainbow looked at her friend worriedly and shrugged. She plopped down on the cloud and it began to pour rain from it, right onto the pink mares head. Rainbow rushed off the cloud and belted out multiple apologies, all of which were waved off by Pinkie. She tried to walk out from under the cloud, except it followed her, covering the ground around her in muck, 'I guess it fits my mood... Miserable...'

Pinkie Pie waved a half-hearted goodbye to her friend, and trudged through the mud towards the Cakes' house. Upon entering the home, she quickly made her way to the bathroom, and tried to drown her sorrows in a bubble-bath.

Pinkie felt something rub up against her hind legs, and slither up her side. She wasn't very surprised to see Gummy, her alligator, pop out of the suds near her face. He loved baths more then anything... Lucky...

"Oh Gummy, what should I doooo..." She said, hopelessly, rubbing the side of the gators head.

Using his usual response, he blinked twice. Pinkie facehoofed, "of course! Why didn't I think of it before!?"

She raced out of the tub, to get supplies before heading to Twilights.

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"Pinkie... What are you doing now?" Twilight asked the sad looking mare suspiciously.

"Twi... Just... Listen," Pinkie pulled the guitar off from around her neck, and began to strum in a slow, steady rhythm.

"Oh, I've seen the moon shine
Through your eyes.
No one here to see me cry,
Oh, am I still alive?

It felt like broken glass,
In winters grasp
I let my tears flow
I watched them melt the snow,
I didn't want to have to go.

Oh, I've seen the moon shine
through your eyes.
No one here to see me cry,
Oh, am I still alive?

I'll wipe back all your tears,
Even in one thousand years...
I'd ignore times fears,
With you so near.

Because I've seen the moon shine,
Through your eyes.
No one here to see me cry,
I never wanted to say good bye,
Oh am I still alive?
Oh am I still alive...?"

Twilight looked at the pink party mare with tears in her eyes, and said, "yes."

Pinkie rushed forwards to embrace the lavender mare, and hesitantly begone to kiss her which Twilight welcomed.

Pinkie pulled back, gasping, "Twilight, three things. One, the cats were a lie. Two, why do you taste like licorice? And three, I love you."

Twilight blushed, "I... I love you too Pinkie." And quickly submerged her head into the poofed up curls that make up Pinkies mane, breathing in the bubble gum scent.

Comments

[LDSocrates]

This entry I'm sort of "eh" on. Some formatting and mechanics errors aside, the emotions felt somewhat flat for me. That, and I can't really get into any piece that includes a song without a link to the actual music.

Okay, completely caught up... but I've noticed I'm the only contributor really reviewing the other entries. Shouldn't we be encouraging feedback in return for posting entries? Because otherwise that's encouraging just posting work and leaving, which doesn't really bring the individual authors together like a collab ideally would. I don't know, maybe I'm just babbling.

[Blue Dragon]

This one didn't appeal too much to me. I've always had a dislike for song-fics, and I also don't like stories where Pinkie's mane suddenly un-poofs. In my opinion, it's overdone. I wasn't a fan of how Twilight didn't like Pinkie in the beginning, and then changed her mind so quickly. It didn't sit right with me. However, I do like the idea of Pinkie singing and playing guitar for Twilight, but I don't think it worked well for this specific entry. The beginning was my favorite part; when the cloud was following Pinkie. The thought of Rainbow trying and failing to get rid of a storm cloud made me laugh a little, even though I knew I shouldn't. (Poor Pinkie.) It was good writing, but some personal things kept me from enjoying it as much as I should've.

[OreoKookie]

>>LDSocrates yes, i totally agree, we should give proper feedback.

The story was a bit flat when it comes to feels and I was very confused at the beginning, but when i got towards the end I finally got what it was about. Still the story was cute in the fact that they kissed at the end.

[FluffyPinks]

3442994 Hiya! I just wanted to point out that LDSocrates may not have seen your reply because it doesn't have the link thing. I also wanted to agree with you on the song