An Unexpected Sibling

by wrestleforever

Tommy The Alicorn

"Hey Gold?! We got anymore beer?" Kyle asked his older brother who was watching TV. "You don't need that shit, you're only twenty." Gold replied plain as day. "Bullshit!" Kyle yelled as he sat on the couch near Gold. "What's the big deal? It's not like you're gonna get in trouble. I'll get in trouble." "Actually, I'll get arrested for giving alcohol to an underaged colt, and then I'll get put on the fucking newspaper, telling everypony that I gave beer to my little brother!" Gold yelled angrily at Kyle. "Alright, Christ!" Kyle grumbled. "By the way, why do you want to drink at this time? It's 8 in the mor-." Gold's sentence was cut short when they heard a knock at he door. They walked up to the door, and saw a tall mare wearing a suit with a little colt standing next to her.

"Hello gentlemen, I'm sorry to bother you so early, but I am from Child Services and I have this colt with me and a note from his parents. They were deemed unfit to take care of this child. The parents gave me this address, telling me that you two were his brothers. Is that true that you two are his siblings." The tall mare asked. "Uh...will you excuse us for one moment?" Gold said as he closed the door for a second. "SHIT!" Gold yelled with a whisper to Kyle. "Did you know about this?" "No, I haven't seen mom and dad for two years! You saw mom two weeks ago!" "Yeah, but she never mentioned a fucking colt!" "How can we be sure if this really is our brother? Although, he does look kind of like mom." "Yeah but mom was a unicorn and dad was an earth pony! So why the fuck does he have wings? No one in mom or dad's family had a pegasus in their family trees!" "Let's just ask him a few questions and find out if he knows who we are." "That's...actually a pretty good idea!" Gold complimented on Kyle's idea. Gold opened the door. "Why, yes, this is our brother. Is there any paperwork that we need to fill out?" Gold asked. The mare handed him some papers. Kyle took the dirty looking colt inside while Gold filled out the paperwork.

As Gold finished the papers, he handed them to her and they both said thanks and she went on her way. She handed him the note before she left. Gold closed the door and began reading the note aloud as the mysterious alicorn sat on the bar stool in their kitchen and began spinning around on it. The note read,

Dear Gold, I know this is all very confusing, and you might be furious at me, but please, take care of Tommy. I know you're wondering why he is an alicorn. I slept with another pegasus, and your father found out and left me. I raised him in a bad neighborhood, and he might be troublesome, but please, he's been through a lot and he needs his big brother's guidance. I bet you're wondering where's the pegasus and where am I. He was flying home one day, and he wasn't paying attention to where he was going and crashed into a tree and broke his neck. He never knew about my drug problem and now I'm in rehab, thus deeming me an unfit mother. I tried giving him to your father, but he wouldn't take him. So now I rely on you to take care of him. I know you've got your hooves full already taking care of Kyle, but please, just take care of him for two months while I'm in rehab.

Sincerely, Magenta

"Oh shit." Gold said to himself. "I guess he is our brother. So Tommy, how old are you?" Gold asked. "Nine." He replied as he continued spinning on the chair. "That means he's Applebloom's age. So that means he can go to school." Gold said. "Aaawwwww." Tommy moaned. "You don't have to start tomorrow, I'm just saying." Gold stated. "So Tommy, what was it like living in Manehattan?" Kyle asked. "It was okay I guess. I was in a gang and we beat ponies up. And we made fun of something called a Cutsie Marx Cashier or something like that." "Wait...did you happen to know somepony named Babs Seed?" Gold asked nervously. "That little bitch? Yeah, I beat her up one time. I nearly put her mouth on the curb when she didn't give me her money." "Oh...well...there are three Cutie Mark Crusaders here in Ponyville." "Aww sweet!" Tommy yelled. "But you can't hurt them though. They're our friends." Kyle scolded. "You're not my parents!" Tommy yelled as he ran out of the room. "Well that escalated quickly." Gold said. "Well, at least we know where he got his attitude from." Kyle said jokingly. Gold chuckled a bit.

When Kyle went out to the back porch, he saw Tommy sitting at the steps. "Look, I know you guys hate me and don't want me here. That's why I'm Leaving." Tommy said. "Leaving?! But why? We don't hate you. Who gave you such an idea?" Kyle demanded an answer. "Mom told me that you guys were rich and successful. I thought I'd be intruding in your lives if I came here." Tommy replied sadly. "WHAT?! No! You'd never be intruding in our lives. We've actually been longing for someone new at the house. If anything, you'd be helping us out." Kyle exclaimed. "Look, why don't we all stay home from work and school tomorrow, and go somewhere nice to eat? I have great connections in Canterlot. The food their is amazing." "That sounds nice." Tommy said as he lay his head on Kyle's shoulder and Kyle lay his head on Tommy's head as they watched the sunset.

Author's Note:

Any sexual comments are gonna get deleted. It's annoying, no exceptions.

Comments

[Regidar]

Tragedy and comedy are conflicting tags, broski.

[apple shock]

i know exactly how this is gonna go down. ladies and gentlecolts grab your umbrellas, there's a shit storm on its way.

[The Guy on Your Right]

Yay! You wrote another story.

Okay, let's see.

An Unexpected Sibling

Ha, I knew he was a mistake.

They went to go answer it, and they found a tall mare wearing a suit with a little colt standing next to her.

Your fuck-ed, kids. Mares in black are coming to town.

"Sorry to bother you gentlemen, but I am from Child Services. I have here with me a young colt and a note from his parents. They were deemed unfit to take care of him and they gave me this address telling me that you two are his brothers? Is that correct?"

Bitch please. The mother of the little colt is already standing beside him.

It's just a prank made by a whore, so that she wouldn't have to take care of her own mistake.

Kind of sad, isn't it? I bet that was a better plot than this one.

"Uh...excuse us one moment." Gold said as he closed the door for a second. "OH SHIT!"

Oh shit, indeed. Gold just remembered the whore he had fucked, and raped.

"Hey Gold?! We got anymore beer?" Kyle asked his older brother who was watching TV.

And the story took place, where, Equestria has a television.

You don't need that shit, you're only twenty." Gold replied plain as day.

I reckon seeing the mane six, drinking ciders. Which had a few alcohols in it, if I may add.

And that means, if we were to think that the mane six were at the age of 18, then the drinking policy enables your shitty OC to drink beers.

Ha! Math, bitch!

"Actually, I'll get arrested for giving alcohol to an underaged colt, and then I'll get put on the fucking newspaper, telling everypony that I gave beer to my little brother!"

And yet, you didn't get reported for fucking, and raping a whore. Justice this days.

She was a whore anyways.

"Alright, Christ!" Kyle grumbled.

Who's Christ?

They walked up to the door, and saw a tall mare wearing a suit with a little colt standing next to her.

Slendermare!!! I've missed you!

"Hello gentlemen, I'm sorry to bother you so early, but I am from Child Services and I have this colt with me and a note from his parents. They were deemed unfit to take care of this child. The parents gave me this address, telling me that you two were his brothers. Is that true that you two are his siblings."

I'm sure Child Service doesn't work like that, if the parents gave their child away, directly.

If a parent was in no condition to take care of their child, they will receive help from the government.

But, since there are no government in Equestria. Fuck them in the ass with a pogo stick.

"SHIT!" Gold yelled with a whisper to Kyle.

"Awesome...!" I commented with an exclamation point, asking what the fuck did I just read.

"No, I haven't seen mom and dad for two years! You saw mom two weeks ago!"

What...? You're more derped than our favorite delivery mare.

"Yeah, but she never mentioned a fucking colt!"

Why would a mother tell their children that she just fucked a colt. And also, you're making parents look bad in this poor excuse for a story.

"How can we be sure if this really is our brother? Although, he does look kind of like mom."

We don't even know a single thing about their mother!

Oh God. We went through this like three fictions already.

"Yeah but mom was a unicorn and dad was an earth pony! So why the fuck does he have wings? No one in mom or dad's family had a pegasus in their family trees!"

I remember that Kyle was a zebra-pegasus. And also Gold. Are you fucking kidding me?

I may have used my OC for like, all of my stories. But I gave him only one race.

"Let's just ask him a few questions and find out if he knows who we are."

Yes. Ask a colt if he knows who you two are, and see if the colt has a higher IQ than you two coltcuddlers.

"That's...actually a pretty good idea!"

Gold said with his rape face on. His shaft, twitching in anticipation.

Lol, back to gay sex.

Gold opened the door. "Why, yes, this is our brother. Is there any paperwork that we need to fill out?"

Just like old time. How I deflowered my little brother, Kyle, Gold thought as he gave the mare a sincere smile.

Kyle took the dirty looking colt inside while Gold filled out the paperwork.

Wait 'till you see how dirty he could be with the two coltcuddlers.

Gold closed the door and began reading the note aloud as the mysterious alicorn sat on the bar stool in their kitchen and began spinning around on it.

The fuck. A minute ago, the colt was a pegasus, alone. And now, an alicorn.

Now, in this case, I'm sure the colt would be sent to the princesses, instead in the house of a two lone, sober coltcuddlers.

Dear Gold, I know this is all very confusing, and you might be furious at me, but please, take care of Tommy. I know you're wondering why he is an alicorn. I slept with another pegasus, and your father found out and left me.

Oh God. You're making me sorry for all the mothers around the world.

You're making them sound like a total bitch. I know that there are mothers who are a bitch, but not like that.

I hate you .-.

I raised him in a bad neighborhood, and he might be troublesome, but please, he's been through a lot and he needs his big brother's guidance.

Bad decision. Now there are three coltcuddlers.

I bet you're wondering where's the pegasus and where am I. He was flying home one day, and he wasn't paying attention to where he was going and crashed into a tree and broke his neck.

Suddenly, Rainbow Dash.
Who crushed into a fucking mountain without braking her neck.

The pegasus who crushed on the tree is a fucking wuss.

He never knew about my drug problem and now I'm in rehab, thus deeming me an unfit mother.

Mmmkay .-.

I tried giving him to your father, but he wouldn't take him. So now I rely on you to take care of him. I know you've got your hooves full already taking care of Kyle, but please, just take care of him for two months while I'm in rehab.

Remember that, Gold. Two months for you to turn the poor alicorn, into a world-class coltcuddling Alicorn!!!

"Oh shit." Gold said to himself. "I guess he is our brother. So Tommy, how old are you?"

Oh wait, since when did Gold knew the colt's name?

"That means he's Applebloom's age. So that means he can go to school."

So, Applebloom's popular? Or were you just stalking her, behind the a bush near the school building?

"Aaawwwww." Tommy moaned.

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That was the quickest deflowering I have ever witnessed in literature, and thus, I'm gonna savor it.

"You don't have to start tomorrow, I'm just saying." Gold stated. "So Tommy, what was it like living in Manehattan?" Kyle asked

What!? Since when did you guys knew where he lived?

"It was okay I guess. I was in a gang and we beat ponies up. And we made fun of something called a Cutsie Marx Cashier or something like that."

Ugh... generation this days. Such a disappointment that I came out at the same day as this.

Also, I came buckets from earlier.

"Wait...did you happen to know somepony named Babs Seed?" Gold asked nervously.

The fuck with psychic ponies this days?

"That little bitch? Yeah, I beat her up one time. I nearly put her mouth on the curb when she didn't give me her money."

Oh no you didn't. I'm gonna kill you in your sleep, regardless if you're an alicorn and a colt.

"You're not my parents!"

You're making our generation look bad.

"Well that escalated quickly."

Not, funneh ,-,

When Kyle went out to the back porch, he saw Tommy sitting at the steps. "Look, I know you guys hate me and don't want me here. That's why I'm Leaving."

That escalated quickly. One minute ago, he agreed to be deflowered by Gold, now he is disappointed because his brother's cock was so small to be considered as a stallion's.

Tommy said. "Leaving?! But why? We don't hate you. Who gave you such an idea?" Kyle demanded an answer. "Mom told me that you guys were rich and successful. I thought I'd be intruding in your lives if I came here."

Nice going, mom.

"WHAT?! No! You'd never be intruding in our lives. We've actually been longing for someone new at the house. If anything, you'd be helping us out."

Now c'mon, Tommy. Spread your little pucker for me.

"Look, why don't we all stay home from work and school tomorrow, and go somewhere nice to eat? I have great connections in Canterlot. The food their is amazing."

You really are destroying the brains of your readers, aren't ya?

That sounds nice." Tommy said as he lay his head on Kyle's shoulder and Kyle lay his head on Tommy's head as they watched the sunset.

I have never seen such a romantic incest story in my entire life.

Any sexual comments are gonna get deleted. It's annoying, no exceptions.

Okay, I'm just gonna copy this whole review, so that, if you delete it, I still have it.

[The Guy on Your Right]

2575287 Okay.

[Private Riften Guard]

Any sexual comments are gonna get deleted. It's annoying, no exceptions.

Now you're just begging for an anal pounding.

[wrestleforever]

2575249
Then why did it let me select them? "Broski?"

[Regidar]

2575463 Actually, I made a mistake. Carry on with your shitty, shitty existence.

Also: I came.

[Normal]

Ohhhh, ohhhh
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh
Slow down!
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh

Sorry your story raped my mind.

[FicusCat]

Please stop writting, you're just not cut to write stories.

[Cloudiee]

Waiting for more shitstorm comments...

[Commissar Rarity]

The giant head on that foal. His expression just cries out "Kill me! Kill me!"

[Spade-Heart]

Someone call Rammstein! They need to kill this story with fire!

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[ArCana_]

That was heinous.

I think you really need to locate an editor for this. But honestly, I think that even with a skilled editor at your disposal, this story would still tank. And that is my honest opinion.

[Lord Erhswin Wholewheat]

Guys, guys. We all know why were really here. At this point these stories are more like a meet up point than anything else. So instead of bashing it why not just ignore the story entirely and have a nice conversation. Let me start with a Ice breaker.

[rockstar]

Wow you're all a bunch of assholes. "frist time on fim fiction and I'm not impressed by you guys"

[The Guy on Your Right]

2579537 Oh, you should have seen the comment section of 'Rainbow Dash's Arch Enemy', and you'll know why we're like this towards him.

[tinymusicbox]

I'll admit, I click on these stories just to read the comments section.

[Alicorn]

2575333 Just died with laughter after reading that.

[Alicorn]

Okay, I can obviously tell this'll be bad story after reading a few comments. So... make way for my review!

When Kyle and Gold are sitting at their house, they get a knock on their door.

Ooh, how exciting.

Also, it should be:

When Kyle and Gold are sitting in their house,

"At their house" sounds completely stupid.

They went to go answer it, and they found a tall mare wearing a suit with a little colt standing next to her.

Ha, they're screwed.

"Sorry to bother you gentlemen, but I am from Child Services. I have here with me a young colt and a note from his parents. They were deemed unfit to take care of him and they gave me this address telling me that you two are his brothers? Is that correct?" The tall mare asked.

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That was kinda fast, in my opinion.

A mare shows up and just tells them they have a brother.

Okay.... wow...

"Uh...excuse us one moment." Gold said as he closed the door for a second. "OH SHIT!"

I think it should be:

Uh... excuse us for a moment.

Or:

Um... excuse us... for one moment...

Because "Um... excuse us one moment." gave me a poker face.

Oh, look at that. An alicorn OC.

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... Are you freaking kidding me.

When will people learn alicorn OCs are MAJOR turn offs?

Good grief. I didn't even bother reading the story after just viewing the description.

Just turn your alicorn OC into a pegasus or something... and don't rush things

Then, you might have a chance.

All I get out of the description is:

A mare comes to this house where two immature colts live and tells them they have a brother in the quickest way possible because she wants to ditch the annoying brat. Also, the brat is an alicorn so when he's older, he will overpower Celestia and take the throne. The immature colts react by cursing which will eventually lead the annoying, bratty alicorn colt to curse, too.

[The Guy on Your Right]

2581134 I try my best to please. -insert happy Twilight emoticon here, because I couldn't find the box that holds the emoticons-

My screen is too small .-.

[Alicorn]

2581195 Well, it certainly got me laughing.

[The Boss]

[Pirate Jesus]

2575463
He's not saying the system won't let you select both. He's saying they are two completely different types of stories. Comedies center completely around giving the audience laughs and good vibes, and in the classical sense, give happy endings, unless it is a black comedy. Tragedy on the other hand seeks to twist up the darker feelings of the audience, like rage, greed, and despair, and usually has a sad ending where things are more messed up than when the story started.

[staryoshi06]

Swear words aren't allowed in the description of teen rated stories.

[TurboTheGameGuy]

Wtf did I read?! I lost my ability to even!

[metroid_freak]

5488150
Guilty as well.

[metroid_freak]

2575333
That was simply outstanding.

[TurboTheGameGuy]

2575333 Best review ever

[TurboTheGameGuy]

5488150 Guilty fourth

[Scrapplejack]

Why.

[Distorted Flare]

2575249
tragic comedy?