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After waking up in a hospital bed, surrounded by her family, they try and convince her that she needs to return to Ponyville. But why? And what do them mean by return to? She'd never been to Ponyville. In fact she's barely heard of it, so why would she have friends there?
Begrudingly she takes a train there to meet her 'friends'. After an hour she decides that there must have been some mistake. How could she have ever been these ponies' friend? Who'd want to be friends with an over the top drama queen, a farmer with a southern drawl so thick it could stop a ball from rolling, a daredevil pegasus whose ego is bigger than her head, a logic and physics defying party pony, and a pegasus who's scared of her own shadow. Catching the next train back to Canterlot Twilight is ready to get back to her studies and doesn't care that she left her 'friends' in tears at the train station.
As tensions rise between the Elements, the Elements themselves start losing power. They try to fix their friendship with Twilight but start to worry about failing. Will friendship ever be magic again?

Thanks to Zenith042 for editing!

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Comments ( 19 )

Riping at the seams? Better pick it off the tree quick.

Interesting concept...I want to see where this is going. Faved and liked! :pinkiehappy:

Thanks for telling me. It's fixed. I started this awhile ago and didn't check my spelling on the blirbs.

How soon until the next chapter comes out?

I don't know. I just remembered that I had this started so I finished the first chapter and posted it but I have a really big, non mlp story that I want to get done so it's probably going to be a while until the update. But I'm glad to hear that you'd like to read more.

In that case, a few more for the short blurb: accident, arguments, and 'she' should be lowercase.
And for the longer one:

How could she have ever been these ponies friend

Missing apostrophe after ponies.

a daredevil pegasus who's ego


a logic and physic defining party pony

Physics. Think you mean defying. Also, missing a comma after pony.

As tentions rise between the Elements the Elements they themselves start loosing power.

Tensions. Losing. Lose the "they". Should have a comma after the first Elements.

Thanks. I'm never very good at editing and my friend who edits anything that I give her to read doesn't like MLP so I don't ask her to read any of my MLP stories and therefore they kinda go unedited.

Now fixed

very nice opening, but need a prologue of how twilight's injury occurred.
thumbs up if you agree :twilightblush:

If you're looking for an editor, I'd be happy to :3

If it's not too much trouble that would be awesome.

Do you use gDocs? If not, I recommend doing so, or something similar, for convenience's sake.

M'hm, great story! Looking forward to more!:derpytongue2:

I have one working right now.

That would be me! Working on it :P

And I'm very thankful for it.

Would like to see more as this is turning out well

more chapters please.

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