I GAVE THIS STORY A LIKE SO YOU WOULDN'T CRY. I AM A MERCIFUL GOD.

Most excellent.

It's a good start... sarcastic and snarky Discord is best Discord.

This pleases Sithis, somewhat. You need to describe what each human is wearing in the first chapter unless they are nude in this humestriaverse. But other than that small thing, I have no qualms with this and it is quite good.

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I AM A MERCIFUL GOD

A merciful god? HAHAHA, you are no god then.

Looks good so far. The story has potential. Keep up the good work.

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THANK YOU OH GREAT ONE
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Thank you.
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Thank you.
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A fair point, I will most likely rectify that when it comes to editing it, most likely later on. Thank you for reading.
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Thank you.

Berry Likey

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God help me if no one is raped.

Cause honestly, I can see either raping the other.

Seriously, Fluttershy can only take so much before she decides to yell "Love me!"

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My mind has so many images racing through my head right now, I thank you for them good sir.

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Thanks.

This is developing well.

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Again thanks.

I can't wait to see him mess with Angel. Please, please, make him turn the bunny purple or even use him as a Q-tip while Shy isn't looking.

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My good sir, I have a burning hatred for the little white devil, I have plans for him in the next chapter.

2386475 Good. But the Q-tip thing is on? Like it could be an accident and she'd walk in just as he realizes it's Angel.

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Just have to wait and see.

2386495 Ok... I've been getting that sentence a lot recently.

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I hope of one of them is:

Discord: Fluttershy, you're scaring me...

Fluttershy: Love Me!

Discord: Rape! No wait, that's not what you yell... Fire! * yells through a window*

Fluttershy: When somepony tries to block, show them you rock!

Discord: Help! *Gets dragged back as the windows shut*

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'After that day, Discord swore he would fight for the side of good. When asked what she did Fluttershy simply stated she used her charm, when Discord was asked what she did he would mutter incoherent sentences and avoided giving a proper answer.'

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I'm sorry Will this picture of Twilight make it better?

i.imgur.com/rUhP0.png

2386907 Weeell..that pic is pretty adorable...

Okay I'll forgive you

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Yes .... Just yes.

Essentially what I wanted to happen.

That coverart... Fantastic.

I was wondering when I would see this out. It's brilliant.

Let the fun Begin

I'm digging this so far. It's great seeing a good humanized piece on the site. Too many are pointless wish-fufillment that give the rest of us that try to tell a good story a bad name, haha. Keep up the good work!

Ps: nice coverart, may I ask who the artist is? Because I dig the style.

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Thanks man.
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Thank you. And his name be ManicPaint.

I like the premise and general tone, but you might wanna get a editor or even re-read it after you finish a chapter, there was some errors.

Also, who is the artist of that cover, I love it!

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Thank you, the artist is a guy called ManicPaint, and its gunna get edited soon. My editor is currently sick and I don't want him to be overworked as he edits other work as well.

How exactly have you got the characters set up? They're human in this fic but you've made Dash able to fly a couple times.

2396481 i imagine its kind of like a celestial element like how twilight can use her magic without her horn. like some kind of transcendent wings

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I believe it will happen later

Cast a spell on the elements of harmony so that Discord couldn't do anything to them...

Riiiiiiigggghhhhhtttt.

Rules of normal magic: Limited.

Rules of Chaos Magic. Rule Number 1: There are no rules.

Pretty sure that if he really wanted to, Discord could get around Celestia's spell

This story is very good so far. The plot is moving at a good pace, the characters seem very in character so far and I love how Discord acts. It does need a bit of editing though. You have a few spelling and grammar mistakes. Other then that this story is great.

Twilight frantically nodded as Rainbow stretched her body and flexed her wings before opening the door; she stopped as she came face to face with Celestia who hand her hand raised up ready to knock.

I believe that should be had.

Just an showing one of the few errors I found. But like I said a little polish and this story will be truly fantastic. Favorited.

2400409 Um technically that is a rule isn't it?

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Actually I think it would likely be Discord teasing poor Fluttershy, with at most some minor molestation. At which point Flutters snaps, and the "Man of Chaos" (I really love that title, it fits too) finds that even he can be brought low by a woman. The only question is will it be a sudden snap and a shredding of clothes or will she trap him and 'forces' him to love her.

Don't wanna be grammar Nazi davidwriteswords.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/02/grammar-nazi.jpg but it's apologize

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Nope! "Apologise" is correct as well. In fact, in the UK and Canada "apologize" is regarded as incorrect while "apologise" is right. Actually, many words that have a "Z" in them are spelled with an "S" instead. Like apologise, realise, and analyse.

That little lesson aside, there are a lot of real mistakes in this story.

Lol! Tyrantlestia is so manipulative! There were blatant hints of Celestia being manipulative in the original episode too.

It's not supposed to be a comedy, but I am already cracking up!! XD Idk why tho.

HEYTHEREPRINCESSCELESTIAHOWAREYOUTODAYI’MGREATWANNACUPCAKETHEREFRESHLYMADE

wrong there, it should be they're

[quote“I’m sure there is a perfectly reasonable excuse to why there not here Twilight.” Rarity tried to suggest.]They're*

“Yeah Twi you need to chill out, I can go get them of you want.” Rainbow Dash said standing up

If*

Celestia blinked at her, shocked by her sudden outburst before raising her hand up and placing it on Twilights shoulder reassuringly, she smiled to her and the others who were equally chocked by her outburst.

Twilight's*, shocked*

“Well, bets be headin’ on over there now, shouldn’t keep the Princess waitin’ any longer.”

Best*

“Me either…I’m worried about Shy.” Dash added.

Neither*

“Me to.” Pinkie said.

Me too*

The story itself is good. I like the idea and the flow of it, but there are a lot of mistakes, mainly comma mistakes.

...fully grown Dragon...

Because all the characters are humanized, including Spike (I think), what would this exactly look like? A giant human? Or does genetics dictate that over time dragons become more anthro over time? Maybe a visual aid can help.

Also, I'm not criticizing the story I'm just curious what this alternate human-like universe is like.

Well, this shall be fun. DISCORD IS BEST PERSON!

DISCORD IS BEST DRACONEQUUS EVER