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Why are you reading this?

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Iris knows about the world. It's two-thousand steps wide and five thousand steps long, and it has a lot of food. She just came out of a nap, and there's screaming outside. It's really annoying, but she does what she's told by the angry pony, because she does not want to die or, even worse, get more medications than usual.

She also knows the world is a lot bigger beyond the walls, but her wings are too small to fly and it's really cold outside anyway. She could really use another nap, anyway, if only the stupid pony could shut up.

And then everything goes to hell, and Garble is trying his damnedest to hump her.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 10 )

Good chapter, love the story, but one question keeps nagging me...




















...what happened to Crackle?

2520977 The Equestrians had rumurs of a great many legged war-beast that had a hide that gleamed and glittered like gems. No bullet could pierce it's scales, and it rampaged the pony forces until the day the bomb dropped.

Dragons live a long time, so there is probably a fifty foot long dragon thing roaming about in the wasteland.:rainbowwild:

2521734 Alright, steady, you never know exactly... WHAT THE F:yay:CK IS THAT!?!

BLAAARGH!!!!

This story is quite good so far. Also, I have never seen an FoE sidefic starring a dragon before. I am excited to see how this will go.

2881934 That's always a good sign.

sorry to critique right off the bat, but,

"Twilight Sparkles Home for Dispossessed Dragons" should probably be "Twilight Sparkle's Home for Dispossessed Dragons". An error on the first line just sort of jumps out to me at least. I'll read on, mark anything else, and say how it goes.
. . .
“Very Sharp Glowing Place With The Sharp And Glowing Ghouls That’s Also Very Irradiated And Still On Fire, Oh Goddesses Why Is Everything On Fire, Do You Think Canterlot Is Nice This Time Of Year”

Shouldn't that end on a question mark?
. . .
Hm, definitely a little ruff, but you did succeed in producing decent comedy and draw the reader in with a fairly brief intro. Probably should give it a little polish so the critical don't drop the story immediately, as many are want to do. I'll read forward and see if you can deliver on this buildup.

Suddenly Dragons are in FoE and they will kill them all.

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