A legend it was they said... A story it was they said... Is it really a story? Well that's what the Cutie Mark Crusaders would like to know. In hopes to receive their cutie marks, the trio Applebloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle set off on a trip. It was just supposed to be a simple stroll, just a 'get in and get out' scenario. But soon they'll find out that some stories tell the truth, and they'll have to look after each other in hopes to survive the fog in the lake...
Mini-Project
I tried making a scary story but instead I just wanted to go to the creepy side a bit. Best if read at night and with eerie music. Cheers, and hope you enjoy my first creepy story.
Chapters (1)
Alright, I think so far, it's pretty good. The atmosphere of the story is well crafted, but I have a few concerns about the events and characters. Does the ghost girl thing have some sort of hypnosis power? Why didn't main character guy just row away? I guess its still a plausible outcome. It reminded me of the start of silent hill 2, where James is all stupid with grief for his dead wife and then he ignores logic. I considered that maybe you wanted to portray that the OC was suffering from a similar grief for his parents, but I wasn't quite sure. What I'm getting at is: are we supposed to find his actions reasonable, or pity him for falling into this trap?
Anyway, the writing is good. If you keep writing it, I'll keep reading it.