I'm new to this website and I've grown interested in the show. I've also decided to try out my writing techniques too. But I'm also hear for the joy of reading and writing :)
"I'm not crazy... I'm not crazy... Nobody seems to understand me at all. Why do they not see Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, and the rest of my friends? Why can't they see... They say it's all in my head. Should I believe them or should I believe myself? They seem so real... But are they real? Is friendship an imagination...?" (This is a Beta Story. If you guys don't like it, then I won't continue it)
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Seems very interesting, I'd like to see where you go with this. There are a few spelling errors and a lot of commas need to be inserted, but good job so far.
Oh my oh my oh my. It needs some serious proofreading. The meaning of each of your sentences comes through clearly enough, but your phrasing of some things is awkward and there are various spelling and grammar errors. However, the premise is highly intriguing and I encourage you to continue, just read over chapters first and I would recommend finding a pre-reader!
Also, a couple things I will be uncomfortable about if I don't mention them, AJ's name is Applejack, as one word, and you said "people" or "person" when most would say "ponies" or "pony." Not that the second one is incorrect per se, it just doesn't feel quite right to me in a pony story.
This is a very interesting concept, I am definitely intrigued about how the story could go. As stated above there are some grammatical errors, but still this story is very good. I hope you continue!
838147 Eat your heart out why don't ya creative intelligence shouldn't be limited due to execution
838462
See, languages have rules. It isn't a matter of limiting freedoms. It's a matter of clarity.
As as been said, you need a proofreader.
I love the idea but you need to go back and edit it.
'rapped' wrapped
'dam' damn
Etc. etc.
But I love the idea!!!!!!!!!!!!
I want to see more, but a little G&S would be nice (Grammar and Spelling)
Thankye!
Oh, and 6th comment.
838502 i never denied that it shouldnt have boundaries and guidelines i just said... wrote that just because the execution isn't great it doesn't lower the quality of the idea behind the story
838583
Ah. You worded it a bit funny.
838462 I was mostly offering opinions, not scolding the creativity or suggesting limitations... I tried to use "I think" and such to differentiate between what I think and what simply is (as in the case of Applejack being Applejack, not Apple Jack in canon universe [though this is clearly alternate, but Apple Jack is normally used for rule 63 AJ]). Mostly I was suggesting a check on spelling and grammar, which (outside of dialogue) aren't typically open to interpretation. Obviously, any writer can do whatever they want, and I've seen people willingly do much worse than this and not give a flying feather, but I'm a big fat word nerd and at least feel obligated by my art to offer my two bits.
I'm seriously sorry if I offended you, though.
838583
Oh, of course not.
1. its called grammar Nazi
everyone has their own opinion its human nature to deny or agree and it we don't like what we hear or see we will rebel against it some people think of violet as purple where as others think of it as its own color... that was bad 
2. i don't get offended
3. i troll
i was trolling you
Well I was rushing this so I didn't get a lot of time to proof read. This was just a beta (since I'm working on other writing projects here and on a different website.) But I guess I'll continue this. And I promise you there will be less grammar Nazi
Great concept and in character! I would like to see this continued!
I wanna see this keep going.
I'm kinda curious to read what the "snapping point" was.
pony grammar in normal conversation is annoying for me
879630 Please note my mistakes so I could fix them. If there are any or if you want me to change something I would try and take it accounted for.
879935 uh no, theres no mistakes i just hate it when people use everpony or anypony or whatever in normal conversation
"Chief" should be "chef", no "i"
“Why thank you Princess. But shall we go back to the matter at hand?”
I heard Applejack say as I felt a hand lift me up to my hooves.
So rainbow and fluttershy are real...
(First!)
did the colt cried because of his popped ball or because of the excess of laught