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*sounds of furniture being broken*
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*chainsaws*
Bu-
*machine guns firing nonstop*
Okay, I am seriously fuckin' creeped out here.
Good job wrecking my little world built upon blissful ignorance.
What the fuck is wrong with you.
Nope.
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This, combined with Fimfiction's new interface, made me vomit. Hard.
Ow...
The writing was okay I guess. Could be a lot better though.
Well, there was nothing wrong with grammer or puctuation. Kind of dark, and gory to think about, but I'm sure that's what you were going for.
Oh, and there was a story with this exact same title published just two days ago.
Don't listen to these fools, your story was great.
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hee haw
Uhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Okay then.
The writing itself is okay. Just one burning question about the whole thing. Why?
Why did any of the stuff in this take place? Why?
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Because everyone is a unique snowflake!
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You mean a "thpethul thnowflake".
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...Yep!
I really hate the new youtube layout...
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Meh, it's not really "new" any more. I'm pretty sure there's gonna be an even uglier one real soon though. "Redesigned for 2013" and all that.
Fucking hell, I was okay with Fimfiction 1. Then came Fimfiction 2, and now this is... Fimfiction 2.5, I guess.
I dread 3.
WOW Awesome love this type of shit Great story.
Alright, a few things I'm confused about. Why dd Twilight burn her brother, why was he drunk and why did he not care? No reason was given for this mindless burning and this really goes against Twilight's character, the only reason I can think of is she wants zero distractions from her books due to this line "With the books she now called her family." okay, let's say that was her motive. Why not burn the rest of the mane six? Why just Shining Armor, this should have been dragged out far longer.
A mindless gore story won't sit well with most readers, you need a motive and a lot of creativity to create an excellent gore story. I suggest reading something like "Cheerilee's Garden" that is a gore fic built to perfection, nothing like "Sweet Apple Massacre" "Cupcakes" or "Trixies Funhouse" which were all mindless and rather bad.
I apologize if it seems like I'm bashing, I'm just trying to offer constructive criticism. If you ever need help with anything you know where to find me~
2271355Cheerliee's Garden was amazing.
And I thought this was about an eldritch flesh monster with eyeballs and teeth.