It's the first day at Twilight's job and everything is going as scheduled...until griffins attack. Though she remains unscathed the attack reveals a secret. A secret hidden away by the government she is suppose to serve.
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I was just wondering what the hell Celestia was doing.
Pretty good so far. A shame it doesn't have more readers.
2494235 Thank you for taking the time to read my story. I also would like to thank you for commenting. Tis the food I enjoy eating as a writer
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It's amazing how much different a sentence is when you spellcheck the wrong word.
Looks like things are starting to heat up. I wonder what happened to Luna?
Could use some proofreading, but I really like the premise of this story. I'll be watching to see where it goes!
2932558 error fixed.
FIve bucks says Vlad's more than he says he is! Loved the new chapter, although it could use a bit of a proofread in some spots. At first I thought Blueblade was the name for the alternate universe Blueblood, but now I'm wondering!
3058324 I do all the editing myself so there is bound to be mistakes that I miss and everyone else sees
. I was going to put this in the author's notes but decided against it...I guess I'll put this here. BlueBlood's parents met earlier in this reality. Hence Blueblade was born before Blueblood.
This story is intriguing, but it definitely needs some editing if you want to bring it to the level that attracts more readers. I'll keep an eye on it however.
The story seems like a good story (to me at least), but you need to work on your grammar or get a pre-reader.