There's a new kid in Mrs.Cheerilee's class, his name is Quiver, he has no cutie mark, just like three other children. Although, he is a quiet and odd one.
After the events of "Crusaders Of The Lost Mark" Diamond Tiara becomes friendlier and finally accepts the CMC as her friends. All is well for her...except for the fact that her mother is beating her on the down low and her dad doesn't even care.
Diamond Tiara witnessed Checker Monarch, a pony she looked up to, be revealed as a monster. But something else also happened to the young foal that day...she saw a glimpse of what her future could be. She didn't like what she saw.
this is really good!I am not tryin to be mean. although i wish you would indent or start a new line or something when the characters are talking. for example: "Hey, how was your day?" Diamond asked. "Oh it was fine," Silver replied.
2291535 Thank you soo much! I think plot twists are annoying when used with a billion subplots but since there aren't a lot I think I should put in one. yay derpy! Not foreshadowing... Maybe
Aaaah so her mother is a repressed Lesbian and supplements her desires with her daughter and then tells her self "the love we have is different" much like Miss Rarity did with her sister in "Tarnished Silver" by Ham Gravy.
and what of Silver? does she secretly enjoy her mother's abuse?
One thing I don't understand is how in the pony world do masochists and victoms cover the scars inflicted by their masters or attackers cause they wear no clothes?
Also her feelings for DT seem a little rushed. She just met and already she is writing shipping fics about them? A little hard to swallow.
I would have had SS meet and then slowly come to terms that Diamond would not get out of her mind no matter how hard she tried to obey her mother's revelation that Lesbianism is bad. What a hypocritical bitch
HOLY SHIT Silver's mother could give Miss Rarity pointers on how to be cruel! She actually lef her daughter tied to a branch in the Everfree OVERNIGHT!? FUCK ME that's harsh! She could have been killed, turned to stone or blanked!
So her dad only wanted to take her virginity? he has no feelings for her otherwise?
and again OMG Diamond's Romance is moving WAAAY to fast.
Next chapter is in the school house I might get teen and I will tag he CMC.
Sorry about last comment I forgot that it had to be 1000 words
By the way silvers kinda embarrassed by this. Ummmm.... So.. Yeah.
Ooooooh! Can't wait for more!
>> seprentinewizard
I think I will have up to chapter 5 by Saturday or Sunday
>>SerpentineWixard12
Read my before comment im sory I got your name wrong
>> SerpentineWizard12
Spelled it wirb again ughhhh nvrminnd just read the comment
Dont read diamonds basement yet. Ill comment when
1/10 would read 9 more times
this is really good!I am not tryin to be mean. although i wish you would indent or start a new line or something when the characters are talking. for example:
"Hey, how was your day?" Diamond asked.
"Oh it was fine," Silver replied.
To xXSheltieXx
Thanks will do
And to all Mz. Elysium is an OC.
I am sorry, but are you deleting comments? Because if you are, you should know that it is frowned upon heavily in these parts.
Sorry it's a little short
Wen I say Big Mac comes back that just means Mz. Elysium does.
Next book should come out soon. And eclipse my new story series.
That... Was the most amazing dramatic twist I think I've veer seen.
2291535
Thank you soo much! I think plot twists are annoying when used with a billion subplots but since there aren't a lot I think I should put in one. yay derpy! Not foreshadowing... Maybe
Aaaah so her mother is a repressed Lesbian and supplements her desires with her daughter and then tells her self "the love we have is different" much like Miss Rarity did with her sister in "Tarnished Silver" by Ham Gravy.
and what of Silver? does she secretly enjoy her mother's abuse?
One thing I don't understand is how in the pony world do masochists and victoms cover the scars inflicted by their masters or attackers cause they wear no clothes?
Also her feelings for DT seem a little rushed. She just met and already she is writing shipping fics about them? A little hard to swallow.
I would have had SS meet and then slowly come to terms that Diamond would not get out of her mind no matter how hard she tried to obey her mother's revelation that Lesbianism is bad. What a hypocritical bitch
I cant wait to read more.
HOLY SHIT Silver's mother could give Miss Rarity pointers on how to be cruel! She actually lef her daughter tied to a branch in the Everfree OVERNIGHT!? FUCK ME that's harsh! She could have been killed, turned to stone or blanked!
So her dad only wanted to take her virginity? he has no feelings for her otherwise?
and again OMG Diamond's Romance is moving WAAAY to fast.
must.. read MORE!
(in Applebloom's voice) err.. WHAT jus happened?
Ahh so THAT happened.
and SS and DT start a new life as whores. wonderful.
Um.. but they JUST met the CMC a day or two ago and Scoots already HATES them with a passion?
(table flip) well I'm done.
....thought this was gonna be a sweet love story.... but ..OhMyGlob. you should change the description, so people won't get mixed up like I did.