Alex has been running for five years now. From what, he doesn't know. All he knows is that he saw something kill his mother and it's not going to let him go until it gets him and anyone involved with him. So he runs and runs. Until something changes.
Prologue to The Beat to My Heart
Something is wrong with Celestia and Luna is determined to find out the meaning behind it, as well as the meaning behind her reocurring headaches. But will it mean the downfall of her sister?
Complete list of characters:
Alex
Anna
Pinkie Pie
The Cutie Mark Crusaders
Spike
Princess Luna
Nightmare Moon
Queen Chrysalis
Discord
Princess Celestia
Other various characters I've made up.
Chapters (12)
Could make longer chapters, tag applebloom, but is a good story so far...
2129183 Thanks!
I'd recomend going back over chapter 1 and fixing some Tab's out so that sentances that arent Thought or, "Talking" arent spread out. But awesome story so far. Heres a mustache as well as a yay; and I cant wait to read more!
2199851 Thanks for the fav and advice, as you can see it's kind of my first fic so it's only natural there will be some errors. I'll fix them when I can get on an actual computer.
~Sylpheed Dashstep
P.S. I don't think you realize how much I'm flipping out right now, you're my favorite writer by far up here and this means a ton to me!
2200228 I would reccomend Microsoft word for editing when you get to a computer; and I'm your favorite writer?
That made my night right there. 
The important thing about everything, writing includng is to have fun doing it... Unless it's a math book... No one likes math books. 
2200431 No problem, it's not very hard to tell the truth, unless you're a compulsive liar.
~Sylpheed Dashstep
So far so good though you might want to fix that wall of text near the end into several more paragraphs of four to six sentances or at the bits of conversation ending.
So instead of "blah blah blah" haha. Nah nah nah, "clap clap"
Try:
"Blah blah blah," haha.
Nah Nah Nah, "Clap clap"
Sorry for the insentient word if they are gibberish. Just thought to let ya know it looks cleaner and easier to read than a wall of letters. Otherwise a fun read and Can't wait for the next chapter.(Well I can wait, don't need to rush quality over quanity.)
2259473 I already have chapter 5 written, I just don't have it typed up yet, and probably won't untill I get up this story my friend Nick is making me write (read latest blog post for reference).
Tyrant Celestia. Ah that would explain a lot. Though she acts kind and nice there are some subtle hints like the economy and political ruin that ferments canterlot and ponyville. (20 bits a cherry? Seriously is that legal? Consdiering a bit is like a $ if you consider it takes two bits to get other larger fruit when berrys usually comes in bags/boxs worth for the same price.) Well done.
Edit: You may want to remove Tia's nickname and swap it for Celestia, maintains the name flow rather then suggest Tia and Celestia are two sep' beings. Well not for dialogue but for actions of course.
2314743 Alright, thanks! I'll fix it when I can get my hands on another computer. If only it wasn't blocked at my school.
EDIT: I've fixed the errors in The Princess of the Night as well as changed things I felt needed changing a little.
The Random appearance of slaughtered villagers and Chrysalis random trust of something that just killed her new 'special somepony' seems a bit out place in consideration. But good work.
2341075 I have to admit, I changed that part several times, but I just couldn't get that chapter right, so I left it with the original and decided to just go with it, sorry I tend to be horrible at writing at certain times
(ex: beginning of the story, we all know how horrible that started)
2341075
Well good news Irid, it's being re-done and I have the perfect explenation for the slaughtered villagers and Chrysalis' trust of Garanth.
Hint: Garanth may have killed the villagers (we'll make that more apparent this time) and her trust may involve the fact that she's practically in shock after what she saw.
ELI
~Sylpheed and Eli