I posted this comment EARLIER then first

Edit: sar why you make a sad story! Well i feel bad for kiki... I wonder... Will you do a prologue?
That would be awesome. I loved it sar, and i cant wait for you to start updating butterflies. You truly have a lot of talent!

.....wow.
What a way to go. I can honestly say I didn't see THAT coming. I liked this story, it had a scary tone surrounding it, in a good way. Like you kinda never knew what was going to happen. for better or worse.
Like, I thought Kiana would go into a depression and plan to get back at Vinyl. By either killing her and or Octavia(explaining the dark tag), or sleeping around in some way to fill the void. But straight up suicide? Wow. I had a story were Carrot Top was suicidal, and the only one keeping her around was Cheerilee. You sir or madam, are a brilliant author. I just wish this lasted a little bit longer, and Kiana and Derpy got together and have a happy ending.
All in all, favorite, thumbs up, and a waffle (o_o)>#

Wow, what a way to go. If this was gonna go on for a bit longer, I would have thought that Kiana and Vinyl got back together, but for it to end on the "Dark"-tag... wow just, wow
Brilliant story Sar, even if it was a bit short!
Having the entire universe against you must be though...
-Glassed

And Derpy just admitted her feelings too... I wonder what would have happened if Derpy stayed?

Either way, I type this while eating a delicious honeybun. And I must say... BRAVO! I can honestly say that I loved every bit of what I was reading!

Keep up the brilliant work!

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Well, the title of the story IS "Scratched Out." What? You guys thought it would end happy? Psh. Sometimes I wonder about my fans....

275793 The title is pretty self explanatory now that I look at it...
However, one should never judge a story by its' title. Even the worst of situations can have a highlight or silver lining.

Nicely executed, Sartarus. It was a ride from the start and ended just the way I would want from a story like this.

I thought it would be dark...my brain was geared towards some inevitable violence.....SUDDENLY....SAD. blew my mind and hit all that much harder for it. can't say it might have been a little of a sudden ending but it makes it stand out that much more I guess great plot twist great job!

Not really worth the mature tag.

I'm SO depressed right now..

Another writer to make my sad today. Congrats.

OMG I'm new to this but there is some contradictory what about cadence

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I seriously hope you realize this was written long before that.