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Lady Spider


I'm more of an artist than a writer so any helpful critisim is wonderful!

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Raven Darkstorm spent her entire childhood locked away in an asylum. No one told her why she was there or how she got there except that she was a freak and was too abnormal to be in public. Her dragon eyes, which turn red when she's angry just as her clouded moon cutie mark does, are a most unusual phenomenon and her curse-like luck causes pain to those around her. She throws herself into a world that is nothing but a facade. Along the way, Raven finds ponies with bizarre abilities or features that set them as outcasts, worst than adult blank flanks. Together this little band of ponies discover what it means to be unique, why it's good to be special and why friendship is truly magic.

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Comments ( 11 )

No character tags?:rainbowhuh:

Protip: Never launch a story with just a prologue. At least have a 1st chapter to go along with it:facehoof:

Azu

1989057

Protip: Never launch a story with just a prologue. At least have a 1st chapter to go along with it

^ this.

1989057 I started a story with only one prologue, and it went well. Must depends on how great the introduction is.

And now we wait for the next part...

"Raven Darkstorm"
"dragon eyes, which turn red when she's angry"
"a world that is nothing but a facade"
Decent troll 7/10.

1988953

Not sure exactly who's gonna be in it yet. :pinkiehappy:
And I not know that :twilightblush: thanks!

1989574
uh.....................................

DemonRykuKyuubi: Interesting beginning. I'm not sure where you're taking this, but I have a feeling I know what inspired it. Nice start, Ela. Good to see you writing still. I'll track it, but no like yet. Not until I see more development. :ajsmug:

1991669
Always interesting to know a reader's take on where a story came from.

OK, interesting. Hope at some time we find out a bit more about the asylum and what the owners were trying to accomplish on the inmates, I'm guessing some kind of genetic experiments but I'm not sure.

Hope threre's more of this.

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