A changeling's only food

A changeling, thrown into the world of humans, has to survive. He finds himself unable to take the shape of any of them, and only finds disgust, hatred, or other vile words to 'comfort' him, until a lucky encounter shows him differently.

(I decided just to swap out the 'General audience' with Teen because of various topics I would probably never want to talk to a kid about. It is neither NSFW, nor gore-related)

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VilkaTheWolf

VilkaTheWolf #1 · Jan 9th, 2013 · · ·

Well that was an interesting ending...

Nataniel

Nataniel #2 · Jan 9th, 2013 · · ·

Good story.

Jack-Pony

Jack-Pony #3 · Jan 9th, 2013 · · ·

I really don't know what to say to this... I suppose you've got me thinking if nothing else?

gordobraveheart

gordobraveheart #4 · Jan 9th, 2013 · 1 · ·

"Endings in life are brutal. Stories would be no different" - Dashed_Brony.

That line should be a quote, you know? Extra points for creativity of that quote, and the story overall, wasn't that bad.

I get it easily too. I only felt some minor feels, but the message you were trying to show got to me very strongly.

I hope to see more of your work in the future, Dashed_Brony.

ForlanceAbice

ForlanceAbice #5 · Jan 9th, 2013 · · 1 ·

And that is why even though I give this story a like for originality, I hate stories that end this way.
I don't need to be fucking reminded that we are basterds. I already know too much about the suffering of this world, so much so that I have even become desensitized to it. Yet you come into to even further destroy my hope in this race. Need I remind you that we already have the Halocaust, the Purges of the Soviet Union, and North Korea to provide us with more stories than one would rather wantot hear? Or the fact that the CIA has overthrown countless democracies and installed dictators?

But even so, I doubt we're THAT xenophobic. Not everyone is a grade A asshole.
If anything, we'd treat this changeling as a curiosity. Overall, while I am somewhat dismayed at the ending, the story did hit well within the feel zone...
But you are an utter basterd for it.

Andreno

Andreno #6 · Jan 10th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Well that was interesting. I did like the story quite a lot, at least up to the point of the changeling entering the house.

The diary entries felt very strange to me. Like you were trying to shove emotions down the readers throat instead of letting it occur naturally. The situation would be more understandable if you had labeled the man as insane or something, but it did not seem much that way until that last part (GAH, I hate trying to avoid spoilers).

I think the whole part from house entry to end could have been stretched out and made into something much larger and longer lasting really. I still loved how everything was written, and the story was good, but I did end up just skipping/skimming all the diary entries and a lot of that last part.

Dashed_Brony

Dashed_Brony #7 · Jan 11th, 2013 · · 1 ·

1934284 I'm sorry if it seems 'Pushing'. However, the 'Short story' I read was very undescriptive, so it was the best, and possibly only way I could describe it. I didn't want it to be too long. I personally find a short, but good story more enjoyable than a long and lasting one. That's just me though, I know some people love reading, and for that, you are awesome!(And possibly an egghead )

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Yes, curiosity might be a better way to put it, but out in the streets, curiosity mixes very well with fear. We aren't all sadistic, and the majority of us probably have a heart for poor, broken or scared things, even if they seem out of the ordinary. However, humanity has been shown as both cruel and hating. It's a darker part about society, but that doesn't mean we're all just bastard children of the earth.

If you believe so, go prove it! Make a world of differences outside your door, or simply pick up some garbage from the ground. It might not SEEM that much, but if everyone did it, imagine the results...

ForlanceAbice