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When everypony's family member comes in for Family Appreciation Day at school, Scootaloo builds up jealousy towards her friends. Not knowing where she came from, who her parents are or if she has any siblings, the Cutie Mark Crusaders head out across Equestria in a search to find where Scootaloo belongs.

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Comments ( 47 )

"where Scootaloo belongs."

Fluttershy's chicken coop, maybe? :rainbowhuh:

Any fic with the Crusaders are bound to be good. I'll keep an eye on this.

Nice start to a very interesitng storyline, as I can see almost most of the Mane 6 and the rest of the Crusaders asssiting Scootaloo in her quest to find her family. :pinkiehappy:

Please do keep up the good work upon suhc a great storyline like this one.:pinkiehappy:

I'm very glad you like it. :yay: I wasn't sure if it'd be of interest to anyone, but now I'll be sure to continue. :twilightsmile:

Not an original premise, but I like the way you're pulling it off. I'm interested in how Scootaloo describes her circumstances. Keep writing, please. :twilightsmile:

Great job, nice storyline. Keep this up :pinkiehappy:
Tracking! :yay:

This is interesting... *le track*

This is what I know will be an awesome story. Tracked.

This has quite the potential. That and you have a nice flow in the story :pinkiehappy:
Tracked for now :pinkiesmile:

Thank you to everypony who liked my story and is now tracking, I'm working on chapter two now, coming soon. :pinkiehappy:

Iloved it, I see that your a very talented writer and I can't wait for the next chapter!! :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

good job hailstorm! told you i read it! :pinkiehappy:

Scootaloo (Thoughts): OH shit, quick think of a lie fasts end thoghts) Err.... i'm doing a dare that i can sleep in the clubhouse... by other associates of my at school... with my family thinking i am having a sleepover.

Scootaloo brain: that is the weakest lie ever, of all time

but serious good stuff so far.

Daaaawww :rainbowkiss: That's it! Scoots and Whooves now share my #1 favorite pony spot :rainbowkiss:

followed, favorited, and waiting for more!!! i love a good scoot fic!!! :rainbowkiss:

Nicely done! I sense that an awesome story is coming :yay:

Cute :rainbowkiss: I love this story man. And we're only two chapters in. Scootaloo as an orphan is probably one of the more popular themes found in MLP fiction but one I enjoy :heart:.

Looking forward to seeing what you can do with this story. I already have an idea of what the possible ending will be, but I'll wait and see what twists and turns this story gives me it'll likely be 20% cooler than what I imagine it to be.:twilightsmile:

I have seen the future, Her parents are chicken farmers!!! (Ok, Chicken jokes aside, tracked and 5 starred.)

Scootalove=never not awesome. Ve are tracking zis story vith great attention!

Great update as it was interesting to see Applejack so understanding of Scootaloo story. She of all ponies would know how much family can mean to a filly. :ajsmug:

I do wonder how the other Crusaders will take Scootaloo's tale and if any of the Mane 6 will also help out ?

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one. :scootangel:

:scootangel: looove it! make more!

Thanks again to everypony for all the positive feedback. :twilightblush: Chapter three on the way! :yay:

Holy haystacks its finally here. I've been waiting for this chapter for a while now. CAn't wait to read it. :raritywink:

I:heart:the "Scootaloo is an Orphan" genre of the fim universe. I know it's not nice to say she's homeless or an orphan but it's better than the "Scootabuse" genre (though I admit I have written stories of that genre as well as this one!)
Scootaloo is the best pony!:scootangel:

I can totally understand your predicament, I have midterms this following week :/
They aren't any fun but once there over its just the other half of the year you have to finish :rainbowlaugh:

Mid terms, bah! :raritydespair:
Good luck with them nonetheless, can't wait to see what you write next! :scootangel:

Nice update and do take your time. Sometime perfection and great storytelling tends to take time and this story is good so far. :ajsmug:

I mean it's nice that Scootaloo is able to confinde in Applebloom, but I do wonder how Sweetie Belle would take it if she learn the truth ? :unsuresweetie:

I guess in a way Scootaloo is right to think that she would react similar to Rarity...I mean she is her big dramatic sister. :raritydespair:

SO please do take all the time you need and keep up the good work. :scootangel:

:yay: Keep going!! and take as much time as you plesase, :scootangel:, and study :twilightsmile:.

She'll have to learn the truth! You know that!

You stole my 5 stars a track and watch, GRRRR! xD Good work study then write! xD:pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy:

The transition from flashback to present day was kind of muddled. Other than that, it looks good.

I havent even started reading yet and I already lol'd at ur comment ^^

i love this story. keep it up!

:derpyderp2: very promising.
cant wait to see where you go with this!:pinkiehappy:

“Cutie Mark Crusader Parent Finders.” That was a new one :twilightoops:
Love the story so far :twilightsmile:

This is going to be some adventure, but where will the three fillies start their search ? :unsuresweetie:

Nice flashback to how Scootaloo met Sweetie Belle for the first time.:scootangel:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

I was a little worried when I saw how relatively short the new chapter is, but the way you do this is just perfect! ^3^

So cute, I really hope this won't end soon :scootangel:

Very nice!
Cant wait for a new chapter

I REALLY like this story. And I REALLY want to know what happens next. And I REALLY hope you didn't give up on this story. :twilightsheepish:

Comment posted by Justin Mershimer deleted Jun 4th, 2016
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