When a new stallion moves back into town, he stirs up a few things, mainly Fluttershy's heartstrings. He is Fluttershy's old crush from back when she lived in Cloudsdale, when she was a little filly. He finally gets the erge to ask her out. They are happily ever after right? Maybe...
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DAMN IT, REGIDAR! HOW DID YOU GET HERE BEFORE ME?!
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1764063 What is that supposed to mean?
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It's an incredibly fast paced story. Within ten chapters they've already moved in together, after seeing each other for the first time in years. I understand the whole "love at first sight" thing, but this is still very fast. Just slow it down, add more details, you know? Good story overall so far, though. Me gusta the Fluttershy shipping.denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw1083_large.png
1764285 True, I'll try, I'm good t short stories though, plus it's not a clop fic, remember.
Well, sir (or ma'am, forgive me if I have guessed your gender wrong), I must say, although short, I found your work very entertaining
I see that you have great potential in writing stories of this genre; if you had put more effort into it, it would've no doubt rivaled even ROBCakeran53's "My Little Dashie", by far one of the best fanfiction stories ever concieved by any human being. I was very displeased that the story was so short, for you displayed such great talent in the first few sentences that I was eager to read more of it, even if it meant waiting a few more days
. Still, you made a valiant effort to make this story as exciting as you can, and thus, as a fellow writer, I applaud you for your work
. I do hope you make good on your word to do better in the future - you show great promise, my friend
.
1766703 Thanks a lot. I am a guy FYI, but thanks. I need ideas for a new story. If you could help I'll be as happy as Derpy in a mountain of muffins.
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If you seek assistance for your plot troubles, then I would be glad to help! Anything story related you need, don't hesitate to ask! Good story, by the way.
1766703
Not sure if sincere, or just being super nice. Either way, I agree. He has a very high potential for this sub-category of writing and, with more time put into them, his stories could become featured, easily. So, good job, random reviewer guy, and excellent use of emoticons!
You hit me right in the feels, you sick, lovable bastard.
Great prologue, and posted right as I finished reviewing the author's note. Great timing. I like how you didn't just leave a life cliffhanger; you went ahead and filled out what happened for the rest of their lives. That's what I like in a story. I would be honored to edit and spell check any future stories you have.
1767376 I Ioled at the last few words of your comment. I try to leave cliff hangers at the end of chapters. i always sum up a story. I don't do sequels
Cantelope
Yeah. That was way fast and it felt rushed. The tense changed quite a bit from present to past and that makes it look choppy.
Wat
It was a first story don't hate
Wow you crazy