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MLPMcgee


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Queen Chrysalis is sending her younglings to be trained by Changelings already hiding within pony society in preparation for the final assault on the kingdom. One of the younglings lands within the Everfree forest and is taken in by Fluttershy. Soon Equestria will discover that it is too late, and only he has the key. But will Equestria come to accept him, or more importantly, will he accept himself.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 33 )

...I want a Flutterhug

oh pleeeaseee finish it!:applecry:

i always comment fairly but to your disappointment i really have nothing negative to say about this, i really like the premise of this story so far, i'd go a step further and label it a continuation of the canterlot wedding, writing is good, and striaght to the point, nothing long-winded or drawn out then whats necessary, i like it so far

By Celestia's beard!!!

I'm so glad that I've had nothing but positive feedback. This has really provided me with a much needed confidence boost. Thanks.

9/10

Only reason it isn't 10/10 is because its not finished yet

Please finish it. This is beautiful.

Man, what the hell is wrong with you? Do you have any idea how late it is? I was about to go to sleep dammit. But nooo, you just had to waltz in here with your compelling and well written story and ruin my sleeping pattern. And then I dozed off, and somehow took a trip over to your user page, accidentally followed you, and hit the like and favorite buttons on the story. :flutterrage:

I hope you're happy with yourself for writing this utter pile of genious.

FaleYur

Oh great, there's a second chapter? Are you going to let me go to sleep at all? Belive me, if you got paid for ruining someones day with this wonderful display of impeccable writing, you would most definately be rich. :twilightangry2:

The nerve of some people...

FaleYur

Pure changelings?!? So, Until then all changelings we have seen are crossbreed? And how Chrysalis was able to make such "pure changeling"?

Hurry up with next chapter!

Sorry it's taking so long, but I'm trying to get back into parkour training and I'm also in a very bad place right now.

:fluttercry:

3021811 You will find out shortly. Honestly I was going to remove that part about being pure in the first draft but I forgot, so now the story will be slightly different from my original intentions.

:scootangel:

i love it and i am sorry to hear that you are dealing with the a death of a family member

3121539 Thanks, it means a lot to have people understanding what I'm going through

Comment posted by dream1990 deleted Aug 29th, 2013

3121704 Your welcome and i do know what you are going though

I don't get it, why Fluttershy start crying at end?

Comment posted by MLPMcgee deleted Aug 29th, 2013

3122622 I don't understand... I didn't have a line which I removed after re-reading

I don't get it. It was already a changeling right? So why does it need a ring to change? Is it because its so young? If so then that makes MUCH more sense, but I feel there's more to that ring then we know......

Absolutely perfect! Well written and such an eye-opener! You, my good friend, get a green thumb! :raritywink:

Oh wow. This is just....perfect! I love it! I favorite this a bit ago, but I didn't have the time to read it. And man, I'm glad I did! It's perfect. Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

Sooooo goooooood! MOAR! WE NEED MOAR! :flutterrage:
I'm sorry for your loss.... :fluttercry: I hope you feel better soon!
Love you and this story! Great job! BRAVO!! :pinkiehappy::raritywink:

This looks promising,:pinkiehappy:...
But why must I always find the best stories at the worst times?:applejackunsure:

Oh well, that's life!:raritywink:
Now to follow this FABULOUSITY!:raritystarry:

I'm sorry that one of your family members has passed away.


Second, You are making a wonderful story, I can't wait to see where this goes.

I'm going to read this soon... Maybe some of it tonight but I'm going to read this soon. It sounds like a mostly adorable story!

:pinkiehappy: I'll get back to what I think about it after I read it...

HNNNGGG!!! OML this is so ADORABLE!!!!

I can hardly wait for the next chapter! :pinkiehappy::heart:

Grate story and sorry for the Los I now how it feels to lose someone close to you again sorry for the Los and Grate chapter remember to move on you have great potential

3123645 Can you please continue this story!?.

too bad this is dead.

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