Just Say It!

by Doctor Proctal

Setting the Stage

It was a perfectly ordinary day in Ponyville. The sky was very clear that day, what with Rainbow Dash working overtime in order to see the Wonderbolts show later that week. All was peaceful for everyone in Ponyville. Well, almost everyone, at least.

At the edge of Ponyville, where the town met the Everfree Forest, Fluttershy anxiously paced around her home. Not that this wasn't common, what with it being Fluttershy and all, but today she was nervous even more so than usual. Usually it felt like a butterfly was flying in her stomach, but now it felt like a whole swarm of butterflies were flying around in her stomach!

But why, you may ask. Why was Fluttershy so nervous? What had caused our favorite canary pegasus to have such a reaction on a perfect day like that day? Well, dear readers, let me tell it to you as easy as I can. Fluttershy had a crush.

Oh, yes, yes it is. I can see the looks on your faces now. It's a shipping story! Ha ha ha!

Now, the interesting thing about this crush, was that it was on someone special. "Was it Rainbow Dash?" No, sorry. "How about Big Macintosh?" Uh... no, not him either. "How about Rarity? Luna?" No, no, no! None of them! ...You give up?!

Urgh... this is going to be a longer story than I thought.

Fluttershy had a crush on somepony special. Somepony who had captured her heart the moment Fluttershy saw her. Her majestic curves, her elegant horn all floated through Fluttershy's dreams at night, doing several things that shall not be named in the story, for I would not like a Mature nor a Teen rating. Every time Fluttershy looked into her love's vast purple eyes, she could just feel herself melt.

...Oh for the love of god, it's not Celestia, you nincompoops, it's Twilight Sparkle! Fluttershy has a crush on Twilight Sparkle!

...Argh, dang it, guys! You've ruined the surprise! Thanks for nothing! Now I have to skip ahead!

Anyways... yes, it was true, no matter how much Fluttershy would try to deny it. Twilight Sparkle was the mare of her dreams. And today, Fluttershy was going on a date with her. Well, not so much a date as a not-really-a-date-because-Twilight-doesn't-know-but-it's-actually-a-date date. Y'know, where the main character invites the oblivious love interest to a dinner or private meeting or something, then drops the bombshell that the love interest is the love interest.

That's why Fluttershy was so nervous today. I mean, come on, it was only 6 hours until the date, and she hadn't even gotten dressed!

Fluttershy stopped pacing and sighed. How could she have let Rarity talk her into this? It seemed like a good idea at the time. All she had to do was get Twilight in private, and tell her that a certain canary pegasus that may or may not be sitting at the table was in love with a certain lavender unicorn that may or may not be sitting at the table.

Simple, right? Well, not to Fluttershy, oh no. Fluttershy wasn't a confident pony most of the time. And putting her into a position where she had to have the spotlight glaring on her in front of the pony it mattered the most to Fluttershy? Bad idea. Really bad idea.

So, Fluttershy was on a not-date date with Twilight Sparkle. She had 6 hours to get ready. And she was currently having a panic attack. Business as usual, I guess!

"Oh, Angel, how am I going to survive tonight?" Fluttershy asked, casting a worried gaze over the small white rabbit sitting on the sofa.

"Caretaker, I require sustenance in order to replenish my reserves of natural energy." Angel said in his natural bunny language.

"But Angel, I don't think that staying home will make things better! That might make them even worse!" Fluttershy replied.

"I never stated any plans to assist you. I requested an immediate drop of provisions at the designated coordinates of 'My Food Bowl.'"

"Oh, Angel, you say the sweetest things."

At that point, Angel began to get irritated, as he usually did with most things ponies did. With one large leap, he jumped off the sofa and landed on the coffee table. He hopped over to the day's stack of mail, pulling out a sheet of paper sitting in the middle of it. His bunny paws made quick work of the paper, turning into a ball the size of his head. Then he threw it at Fluttershy's face.

The sheet of paper impacted against Fluttershy's muzzle and landed back on the floor. Fluttershy lifted a hoof to shield her nostrils from any further assaults.

"Oh, Angel Bunny! That is very rude!" The pegasus said, trotting over to the ammunition used in the bunny's attack.

"Shall you provide myself with rations, or will I resume the barrage?" The bunny replied, his paws crossed and his face formed into a scowl.

Fluttershy picked up the small ball in a hoof and smoothed it into a readable form using a very awkward technique using her hooves and mouth. She began reading from the now slightly moist paper.

Dear Fluttershy,

I know that this may be difficult for you to go through. I'm sorry if I went too fast for your liking, but if you didn't do this now, you'd never have gotten the courage to do so. If you need any help, I will be here for your assistance.

Sincerely,

Rarity

Fluttershy let out a loud gasp that was really only about as loud as a whisper.

"This is perfect, Angel! Thank you so much! I'll be back soon!" The pegasus said, dropping the paper and flying out the door.

"Cease and desist! You have not yet accomplished the task of dispensing my assorted edible substances! Return at once!" Angel yelled at the top of his bunny voice, hopping up and down in rage.

Ah, Angel Bunny, such an angry little rodent, aren't you? Oh well.

Spectators would later say that the canary pegasus may have reached a record flight speed of 10 mph. Rainbow Dash commented that it was actually pretty fast. For Fluttershy, that is.

Now, Fluttershy had a problem, right? Well, she wasn't the only one with a problem. You see, there was another pony that had a problem just as bad as Fluttershy's problem. And what did this pony do? Why she went to Rarity's as well!

So while Fluttershy was flying as fast as she could to Ponyville's premiere fashion boutique, Rarity was currently speaking to a particular pony inside of the Boutique, a particular pony with a crush on another particular pony.

"Rarity, do you have a minute?" The pony asked, entering the boutique, her presence marked by a small bell dinging with the opening of the shop's door.

"Why, yes, I should be able to spare a moment or two." Rarity replied, using her magic to gently stitch together a bodice and skirt. "What seems to be the occasion?"

"Well, uh, you see..." Her visitor began, fumbling over her own tongue, trying to get the words to come out.

"You see what exactly? Come now, I haven't got all day." Rarity answered truthfully. She had 3 dresses due for the end of the week. All of which were being sent to Canterlot of all places! The dresses were for the VIP's at the Wonderbolts show, and if Rarity could get some of her dresses there, she might be noticed!

Her visitor felt bad for holding her good friend up with this. She steeled herself, deciding the only way she could tell her dressmaking friend was to blurt it all out at once. Screwing her eyes shut, the visitor took a deep breath.

"I-think-I-might-be-in-love-with-Fluttershy-and-I'm-going-on-a-date-with-her-tonight-you-gotta-help-me!" The visitor yelled, speaking with the speed of a half-asleep Pinkie Pie.

Instantly, the dress, as well as Rarity's jaw, fell to the floor. Her eyes widened in shock and surprise. She slowly turned to the lavender unicorn that was standing in the Carousel Boutique.

"Did you, Twilight Sparkle, just proclaim your unrequited love for Fluttershy?" Rarity asked slowly, her voice filled with doubt.

"Uh... yes?" Twilight Sparkle replied, her face hot at her embarrassment for admitting such a thing. In front of Rarity, no less!

The squeal of utter glee that Rarity let out could be heard for miles, reaching even the faraway ears of the Princess of the Sun herself.

At the time, Princess Celestia was having a cup of tea with one of her closest advisers, a lime-green unicorn stallion. They were making small talk, and it was a good break from all the preparations being made to accommodate the Wonderbolts. She was daintily floating her cup to her lips, about to take a small sip when she heard the very faint squeal.

Her companion heard it as well, and asked with a slight accent, "Princess, pardon me, but... did you hear a wail of sorts?"

"Yes... yes I did, Lord Twist. And I fear that I know the source of this noise."

"And that would be...?"

"Ponyville."

Comments

[Doctor Proctal]

Alright, so second story ever published. Yay.
Just an FYI, before bashing it. I wrote this in about an hour (From 10:21 PM to 11:26 PM) with no editors, no editing, and minimal rewriting. Final Destination. Had some time to kill, wanted more TwiShy, so I wrote some more TwiShy.

Tell me what you think, the ol' Comment and Critique never fails, but keep in mind that I reserve the right to change my story at my own discretion. I'm literally writing by the seat of my pants and writing a story that I personally will enjoy. If you have a problem with that, by all means, tell me. Not that I'll actually pay attention, but still. If you've got actual critique, go ahead and give me it. I'll take it into consideration and adjust the story accordingly.

I'm looking for a good cover for this either. If anyone knows a good TwiShy picture I could use for it, it'd be greatly appreciated. I'd also take submissions of artwork drawn specifically for this, too. I won't complain if that's what you wanna do.

And please, for the love of God, no dislike bombing just because you don't like the pairing. That's just a nasty thing to do, and isn't very nice. How would you like it if I did that to you?

[Regidar]

Love makes the world go triangle.

[Fusion Fool the 3rd]

As much as I love the humor in this story...I gotta ask...

What kind of material did you use to beat the 4th wall with, dood?

I'mma keep an eye on this...

[YayFlutters]

Twishy
Twishytwishytwishy

I'm very much okay with this and will read.

[ButtEater9]

In my opinion, this breaks the fourth wall too much. There were a couple parts that made me smile (such as Angel's dialogue), but other times the humor seemed forced. I'm honestly not a huge fan of the writing style. It cuts from pony-to-different pony with no separation in between them. It's not a bad story by any means, but I don't think I'll be watching it.

[YayFlutters]

Just read it, and I have to say:

I enjoyed it. Certainly not the finest story ever written, but it was definitely enjoyable and the fourth-wall breaking made it feel unique.

I will be awaiting more because Twishy and enjoyable fic.

[12]

You wouldn't say a flock of butterflies, but a swarm of butterflies.

“...doing several things that shall not be named in the story, for I would not like a Mature nor a Teen rating.” This disappoints me.

[Evilpresident]

Twishy is second best ship

I liked it and I think it was rather well written, despite you claiming that you don't have an editor. I didn't spot any glaring errors nor any small ones, though my judgement isn't really reliable, since English isn't my main language

Anyway, I'm going to keep an eye on this and see where this story will go. Have a fav and an upvote

[Awesome McCoolname]

OOOH A FIC THAT ADDRESSES THE FOURTH WALL I LOVE THOSE KINDA.

Okay, there's a mild formatting error with the letter deal. Sincerely is spaced out into Sin cerely. If I wasn't running off of a few days of no sleep, I could probably help point out a solution to that problem but my brain are broke.

It's fairly decent, and the pairing is a fresh twist because, well, it's not exactly common. Kudos.

Now, as far as plot line elements go, the whole fourth wall thing... it is enjoyable to some. But be more creative with it. Don't write the story as viewed by you, do it like you were Pinkie Pie! I mean, seriously, the 4th wall thing is kinda her shtick. Actually, it kinda reads like Pinkie Pie already so it's not all that far off. But then, my brain is sleep deprived. You should probably spend a chapter detailing WHY TwiShy is going to be a thing, what made them stare wanting to get up close and personal to each other's cutie marks to do things that aren't for Everyone rated stories. Out of all the mane six, Twi and Shy are the... well, shiest of the group, with Fluttershy being naturally shy and Twilight being socially awkward to the extreme due to spending most of her developmental years with her head in a book. I'm curious as to where you're going with this, because in a way it's a fresh twist on an old episode idea where roles are reversed.

Good luck. I'm goin to bed.

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[Doctor Proctal]

1723338
Or pyramid, depending on how you look at it.

1723431
I used the powers vested in me by my god-like control over what happens in the story.

1723477
That's perfectly fine. It's your opinion and I respect that. I'd rather be damned for an eternity in Hell before violating someone's right to their own opinions.
I will however, go back and make it clearer that I'm changing perspectives. I think that does need to be a little addressed, to control the flow somewhat.

1723516
Good to see that at least someone liked it. And now, considering I've got confidence, people who want more, and editors on my side, it can only get better, so stay tuned.

1723610
I apologize for the lack of clop in this story. I will try to make amends somehow, such as fixing the flock of butterflies thing.

1723918
Ooh, thank you. Let me just pocket those two for safekeeping.
And while you're judgement isn't the best, I still appreciate it. Any little bit helps.

1724042
OOH BOY THIS IS A BIG COMMENT TIME TO RESPOND
Roger, I will fix the formatting posthaste, my good man. As for the plot, yes, I am planning on expanding the reasoning between the two in the upcoming chapters, as well as showing how Rarity got into this sort of thing. Yes, I did say I was writing by the seat of my pants, but all I'm doing extra now is giving myself a little direction to go in.
And as for the Pinkie Pie... well...
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[Awesome McCoolname]

1725208 Hey, I'm not knocking writing by the seat of your pants. My whole fic is made with next to no editing, hardly any planning, and usually in the dead of the nights where I don't have to work in the morning so I'm usually sleep deprived.

[Doctor Proctal]

1725224
Ah, the joys of writing fanfiction!

[Awesome McCoolname]

1725265 Insomnia and bags under the eyes are usually the sign of a dedicated fanfiction author.

[Doctor Proctal]

1725272
Indeed. It is the mark we must bear.

[animeyasha66]

i love your narration style

[Bujin]

yay! More Twishy. :) I liked your writing as well.

[Nightroad]

Hmm...interesting. And it's Twishy no less. Methinks I shall follow

[Red Mare]

Great story. I want to see more chapters.

[Randall116]

I'm not a huge fan on serious ship-fics
So I highly enjoyed the humor and narration style in this fic.

But to touch on a point with another comment, I did like the use of humor, but I can see where they personally thought it was forced.
Keep it light and don't embellish on the jokes to much. Not that I thought you were beating them into the ground or anything! Just so it makes everyone happy

[Mattricole]

I love your writing style! It feels unique compared to other fics! Please keep writing, and please don't change your style despite some of the naysayers.

[The Writer of Fate]

A romance story told by Pinkie Pie.

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[Doctor Proctal]

1748125
Or horrific, depending on how you look at it.

[The Writer of Fate]

1748410 That's entirely depended on personal preference and the skill of the writer.

Though mostly it's all on you.

No pressure though.

[Doctor Proctal]

1751414
I DECREE THAT THIS CANNOT GO WRONG

[The Writer of Fate]

1751565
THEN HENCEFORTH, LET US READ AND JUDGE YOUR EVERY WORD. FOR PONY! FOR COMEDY! FOR PINKIE PIE TELLING A LOVE STORY!

[Doctor Proctal]

1751601

[The Writer of Fate]

1751913 What the bloody hell are you doing cutting to Valve? We have no need to know of what we already know is going on over there in between swimming in pools of money and coding new hats for TF2.

[Doctor Proctal]

1752594
I'm sorry, it just slipped out!

[The Writer of Fate]

1752622 Shame on you.

SHAME.

ON.

YOU.

[Probably Jesus]

This is going to end so well for them