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The life of Cloud

. Cloud is an ordinary stallion. He does whatever it takes to protect his brother Shine. They lived a normal life with their family. But their life soon falls into deep deppression.

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Birth/First day of school · 28th Nov 2012 · 1,366 words
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Unexpected Love · 29th Nov 2012 · 1,251 words
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Regidar

Regidar #1 · Nov 26th, 2012 · · · Birth/First day of school ·

*cough*

Zuton97

Zuton97 #2 · Nov 26th, 2012 · · · Birth/First day of school ·

1687670

Every time.
Do you even read these stories or just comment for the sake of commenting (probably first)?

Regidar

Regidar #3 · Nov 26th, 2012 · · · Birth/First day of school ·

1687695 ERRYTIM

No, I read then comment, or comment before read. I always read in the end, though.

nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #4 · Nov 26th, 2012 · · · Birth/First day of school ·

But will he go to far?

i think you went to far by posting this

Fanon Canon

Fanon Canon #5 · Nov 26th, 2012 · · · Birth/First day of school ·

Usually grammar problems involve a lack of full stops and no capital letters.
Just by reading the first paragraph I can tell the problem here is too many full stops and capital letters, like right in the middle of a sentence. How do you even get that?

Peppermint