A lot of strange things are happening all over Equestria. Bodies are being stolen by a mysterious doctor who was also the one who worked on Private's mom. Upon capture he reveals that Sparrowheart's death was no tragic accident. Private's personal demons start to come out as this case appears to be connected to the Vice case that caused Private to leave in the first place. Will Private be able to save himself and Manehatten from a dark and evil threat? Or will he give in to the growing anger inside of him? Is Irenius really as innocent as he claims to be?
Chapters are based on the song "Sweet LA" By Miracle of Sound, the song that inspired this series in the first place.
Chapters (7)
YAAAAAAY
(times infinity)
Dun dun dun....
Ever since I've read that story about Ditzy dieing of cancer, Sparkler seems to be coming into a lot of stories now.
Good chapter, Tailspin's feeling of helplessness if highlighted very well.
Three years is a hell of a long time...
12. 12 Dirty cops.
It would seem that Private has always been a beast.
Huh, so Larksong was just using him.
I did not see that coming.
Great chapter, delving more into Private's past, and beating the shit out of Vegas is always good.
I.E...
Irenius Eye?
Damnit now I need a conspiracy board
1650804 do you think he intentionally killed his wife or that the letter was forged?
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Maybe it was forged... or maybe it wasn't Irenius at all, that would be to obvious wouldn't it?
Guess we'll have to wait and see
1650804 I have a spare one if you want!
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Yeah
We can be conspiracy buddies
1673443 Well, now that Psycho Me is in The Cage I need somebody new to work with!
“Maybe I don’t owe ya,” Grimwing said, pointing his claw at me, “but after this, you will owe me. It’s always good to have favors, Private, on both sides of the law/”
Might wanna remove that /
More revelations! This case is pretty good, guessing it's gonna wrap up most of Preventus' early life. Great work and fantastic to see you back!
Another great chapter.
I love the relationship between Private and Grimwing, in no small part because I don't quite know what to call it.
1676645They respect each other, they understand that they are on two sides of a war but they know they can benefit as a whole if they work together. Yet with that they know that one day the war will catch up with them. I guess you really can't call it friendship, more of a beneficial rivalry
1676659 i can't believe you put a very subtle Red vs Blue reference in here and also its Me Scarve1337 i just changed my username for personal reasons that i think you are aware of
I love this chapter xD
I love how you linked the last episode into this! It's just amazing!
Keep up the good writing, bro!
“My name is Downbeat Ingram.”
I see what you did there.
Great chapter, just what was Irenius doing in the whorehouse? Why was he there? I feel it was something deeper, although knowing me I'm thinking too far into this, and he did just cheat on his wife.
Keep up the good work, you too!
On a side note, I know this story doesn't directly come from the new canon, but at the end of the episode it was said Babs had a sister, presumably around AJ's age? Will she make an appearance, or is she not in this universe?
Green text...is that a warning sign of something? Interesting...
*low whistle*
I really like where this story is going. That back story for Babs is interesting, I now thoroughly loathe Vegas, and Irenius... I don't know what to say.
1715640I'm adopting a Japan style with the narrative. I'll take what I like out of the new canon and mix in my own if I think it could be more interesting. Some events will happen seemingly out of order if the narrative calls for it but you never know what can happen in Noir...
1715653Tis a clue into Private's Ancestry...let's just say Nocturne is one of the lesser players in his family line
1715653Tis a clue into Private's Ancestry...let's just say Nocturne is one of the lesser players in his family line>>1715674Rember my friend, never judge anything by appearences....but yeah Vegas is a bastard
Oh. Fewmits. Private, you are a bloody idiot.
1735105 It kinda sounds like he might not be in his right mind...or minds.
Oh and also....
That's what he just said.
Its about to hit the fan...
Holy shit. No matter what the outcome, I feel his relationships will not build up for a while, or may even be non existent for a few cases.
Great job, this case is about to get crazy.
1737563 Gee, ya THINK?! It's never a good thing when anypony hears voices. Never mind his going all Sombra on their asses.
1740083If you think this is strange wait till you get to next chapter
1740097 Oh fewmits...
Title of the chapter... "From where you're standing it must seem like an 18kt run of bad luck... truth is... the game was rigged from the start *gunshot"
Am I right or horribly wrong :D?
1745002It is a song lyric but the saying still definitely applies here
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Shoulda known it was a song lyric from the other chapter names... just been playing too much Fallout lately
I have to admit, i wasn't expecting you to make him an Element, i always figured him to be a focus of some sort, but i approve
Nicely played
Also, bonus points for the Return of the Jedi reference
1745426Couldn't resist in the end,
I don't know, Tenacity sounds a little...off for an Element name. Perseverance strikes me as a better one. But that's just my opinion.
1745583I wouldn't necessarily call it a full element really. It's more of a means of empowering the other elements of harmony. For without the determination to succeed true friendship will falter. That's what Tenacity is, I just thought it sounded cooler at the time.
TASTE THE RAINBOW MOTHERFUCKER!!
Ahem, now that that's out of the way...
Nice to see you got this chapter out so fast! I really enjoyed it, bringing the element arc to the end. We have more characters to work with now, so I can't wait for the next case! And also awkward Tailspin-Irenius reunion.
1746020Things will work out though,
I lol'd.
So...much...awesome and so many d'awwws have been had. I've been waiting for this meeting since the side story where private's dad left him the phone message...
I...I shed a tear during the reunion...that was excellent.
I can't believe this is the 15th case already! With Shattered as editor, grammar and spellings have certainly improved, and the "7th Element" arc was great, instead of just another random case. I'm looking forward to more future cases, with the new characters. Keep up the good work you two!
Oh yeah, MOAR SPARKLER!
1751289 *bows
1752603This could not have been possible without my now co writer Shattered, She's the real reason this story got the way it did. I'm happy to have her
That was awesome, hats off too you.
No, seriously. I'm wearing a fedora right now.
1753013I need to find one so that if I ever come to conventions I could dress up as Private so you guys can identify me
1753013 Fedoras are the best hats.
And that was a sweet story.
1753223Don't tell the Doctor that, he'll give the insane argument that fezzes are better
1753228 Fezzes are the most amusing hats, right along with lampshades. Fedoras are just cool. They are the hats of detectives and badasses, and detectives who are badasses.
Wow...
I believe you mean anesthetic.
Also, tenacity is the seventh element.