After Rainbow taunts Applejack that all she knows is apples, Applejack sets out to prove once and for all that she's just as capable as anyone else. Of course, that might be a little harder than she expects...
Short story, probably only going to be three or four chapters and follow the general episode structure.
Idea was made for Applejack Appreciation day on EQ, and decided to flesh it out.
First fic, so constructive crits,be harsh, sacrifice a goat, etc etc, you all know the drill.
Chapters (4)
My land. I can't see this ending well.
Could this be a mild case of Cutie Mark Failure Insanity Syndrome?
The biggest thing I'm iffy about is describing the appearances of the characters. It's good practice for a writer in general to do, but fan fiction is a special case in that everyone already knows what the characters looks like. It can just end up bogging things down. Or worse, they wouldn't describe them as you did (I didn't find this to be the case with your story, I just meant in general, and with my most recent story, which is what made me think of this criticism in the first place).
But your dialogue is ace. I think you've really nailed Applejack so far. Seeing how this story is all about Applejack appreciation, that is good. I too feel like she needs more love, especially since she's been getting very little of it from Friendship is Magic itself. But speaking of the show, your plot does have a very show-like feel to it, with the first chapter being the bit before the intro song plays, and then this scene playing over the credits and everything. That is also good.
images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120318155331/doom/images/a/ab/Betruger2.jpg Teleportation research, you say...
Rarity's British?
1592824 She always seemed to have sort of a posh, British accent, even if it wouldn't really be 'British' in that universe.
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It's actually what is called a "Mid-Atlantic" or "Transatlantic" accent, and unlike the vast majority of accents, it isn't tied to any specific location in the world. It is a deliberately cultivated blend of American and English accents, which is thematically notable because her parents and sister *don't* have it. It was popular in Hollywood for quite a while, for example with Audrey Hepburn, who is one of the biggest inspirations behind the character.
Sorry for the linguistic essay there. I've just always thought Rarity's accent was a brilliant and subtle bit of character development. There's no necessary reason you can't call it British in your story, since there could be a Britain, but it's going to give at least some people pause.
But really, it's not a huge deal, especially in the face of the goodness of this chapter. This is one of the first fics I've read in a long time that actually has an idea what to do with Applejack.
1598537 Huh. Didn't know that stuff. Thanks for the info
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And thanks for the compliments as well
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Nice setup, but it's a little flawed... Couldn't Rainbow Dash accuse anyone of the exact same thing? Except Rarity, maybe. And PInkie Pie, of course... And a few others.
"Ah don't give a shit about Spike, but I'm glad yer okay! Ah ain't even gonna bother askin' 'bout 'im."
This is awesome!
Wow, your version of rainbow is a b!tch. I wouldn't keep someone like that around a s a friend. Also, AJ has done all kinds of things that aren't apple related. She's saved the town from a cow stampede and during the Applebucking episode she helped everyone with everything. The mayor was even giving her a medal for all the work she's done helping ponies in town. So, either this Rainbow is just jealous and out to needlessly hurt her "friend" or you're getting to some point later in the story that I just don't see yet.
Oh my God... this is something... INSTANT FAVE, LIKE, AND FOLLOW!
This needs the Comedy tag.
3364110 I did originally have the comedy tag on it, but since the second half is somewhat moodier, and I couldn't put 'Comedy' and 'Sad', I just switched it to Slice. That said, I might add it depending on how people feel.
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Awwww, I apologize for making you spoil it.
3364662 Oh don't worry, if it was a spoiler I wouldn't have said it.
very good story so far
will your next chapter be up soon?
Well that escalated quickly
Not bad, although Dash's change of tone from "look at yourself. You got squat" to "What's wrong?" seems kinda odd...
Well... I'm still hoping that someday I'll see a new chapter of this story.
Hey. Will Chapter 4, and then the Epilogue, be up before long? It's been awhile since this was updated, and I'm curious as to what's gonna to what's gonna happen next.
4502530 You and me both.