When a wing of Wonderbolt-wannabes challenge the Wonderbolts to a race, they mention how the Wonderbolts are a lie. For a brief moment, Soarin, head of the Wonderbolt wing, flashes back to their life from foalhood to now, remembering how they became the best through controversial means under Princess Celestia's explicit permission.
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Disclaimer: I know there is at least one other Taking Flight inspired fanfic and the writer claims he knows the backstory of the song and all that. I don't care. Let them write their story and let me write mine. Mine is based entirely off of the images I got while listening to the song a few times in the mix of my other music after moving on from Fallout: Equestria (theme of the FO:E Wonderbolts). If there are similarities with other Taking Flight fanfics, that is either concidental or they read my story and took from it. Don't tell me of the others because I have no interest in them, just like some authors don't care to see the movie(s) based off of their book(s).
Supportive critism is always welcome. Hate is not. You hate a chapter or the story itself? Tell me why or don't tell me at all in the comments.
Chapters are too damn short.
Great art though
1538623 Tell that to PrinceWhateverer, musician of Taking Flight and requester of the art, and that guy who did it for him (and other future pics for future videos by PrinceWhateverer), not me.
1538621 Chapters 3-5 are going to be redone; I kinda died with them. But was definately in with Chapter 1 and Chapter 2, and I started to go too far with Epilogue before I went and "dumbed it down" to telling. It's not meant to be a long story since it's based off a song fully (except the Epilogue).
OK, OK. The chapters may be short but I just liked you for now. I will see where this goes. I'm tracking this story. Does this sound good enough?
1539485 I was just informing her of the situation. Any ideas anyone could give for improving Ch 3-5 would be great, by the way.
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Never dumb a story down. I'm saying this with the best intention. A lot of intelligent people won't read anything too easy. Also, try to promote the story with any placeit fits into. You know, for maximum coverage.
1549340 The way I was going with the Epilogue would have killed it. It was utterly LAME and didn't fit the Princesses. As with Chapters 3-5, it's just a matter of slipping out of the amazing groove and thus they aren't what they can be.
You need to fix a few Grammar problems.
Wait. What?
Next.
Fluff maybe?
But great chapter.
1556616 That's me simply transfering from writing to FiMfiction, which has no autocorrection system. But some things get fixed by Word, which I am using to make printed copies of my stories, so they will kinda be fixed when I am done and copypasta from Word to FiMfiction.
I love this song! Can't wait to see what kind of back story you have come up with! Awesome art too...
1702820 It's all completed, for the most part. I will likely come back to it and flesh it out a TON more before handing it over to the public to email me their own changes.
Just finished. It was a good, short, simple read. I feel that it could definitely be made into a longer more detailed story, and have a great future as a possible series of fics about the wonder bolts and their secret missions for the princesses. Lots of potential here if you have the time and patience to really give it the effort it would need to be awesome. Good job though, even if it was a bit too... rushed.
1704963 I'm planning to come back later after I do some other stories. And that is the end of them as Wonderbolts. They only did that one "secret mission", as you called it.
Well, I wasn't really referring to that particular "mission". I was thinking more along the lines of the Wonderbolts being Celestia's "special task force" if you will. Doing her bidding in exchange for their skill, fame, and fortune. Just a sort of tangent I took from the song and this story. Wish I had the time to write, because that would be a fun project...
1707226 With how I see it, such wouldn't exist down this route.
1707226 Though, if you'd like to see more Wonderbolt action, then look out for "War of the Bolts" once I get around to it. It will be between the Wonderbolts and Shadowbolts based off of MandoPony's respective series.
That sounds pretty legit... I'll have to check it out.
1707672 It's third on the list to do, after Halo: Equestria and Evefrost (Unpublished).