Rarity's Naughty Cave Adventure

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fanreader999999

fanreader999999 #1 · Jan 30th, 2023 · · ·

Not bad

Clopfic Appreciator

Clopfic Appreciator #2 · Jan 30th, 2023 · · ·

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"Not bad" is better than "Bad".

Kiskadee

Kiskadee #3 · Jan 30th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Ah you wrote this so well! I love how rarity is in control and how eager Max is the whole way through. Gah! I want to write as well as you one day!

SugarCube

SugarCube #4 · Jan 30th, 2023 · 2 · ·

This was good! I appreciate that you spent enough time to establish the emotions that the characters are feeling both in the moment and the leadup to it. The prose itself is coherent and easy to read.

Post more, please

osmar lael

osmar lael #5 · Jan 31st, 2023 · · ·

oh the fic is very cool although I think that Rarity feeling more pain because of how big she is could be good since even if she is a queen of the size the big dog could be bigger than she expected and it hurts a lot as he gives it to her fuck that's why I would think about using the spell to make it easier for her to have sex and be able to put his whole penis inside

I hope you have thought of a chapter 2 of Rarity being fucked by Max this time with him using all his strength in sex. It would be great to see her being treated like a sex doll and how he moves and fucks her in a way that no other being can compare.

I hope you have thought of more lemon interpecies fic it would be great to see them

Clopfic Appreciator

Clopfic Appreciator #6 · Jan 31st, 2023 · · ·

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Pleased to hear you liked this!
For improving your writing, the answer's simple (but that doesn't make it easy): read a lot, and keep writing. Practice is what it takes.

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Thank you! I hope to have more stories posted, sooner or later.

11493533
That's something to consider!

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