Synful
Joined 22nd Oct, 2012 ·
Offline
Sequels1
-
Synful · 8k words · 60 25 · 2.7k views
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Synful · 8k words · 60 25 · 2.7k views
- Synful · 4.8k words · 69 25 · 2.4k views
- Omegathyst · 12k words · 53 19 · 1.7k views
- Holocron · 64k words · 82 45 · 2.1k views
- Holocron · 64k words · 56 36 · 1.3k views
- TheOneWithoutAName · 5.1k words · 63 17 · 2.2k views
- Pillowfight · 8.7k words · 73 20 · 1.9k views
- Shadic Midnight Blitzer · 9.6k words · 19 11 · 383 views
Featured In46
Clopfics11,544 stories ·15,808 members
The Writers' Group56,365 stories ·9,290 members
The OC Fanfiction Library1,803 stories ·1,404 members
- All Mature2,242 stories ·649 members
NSFW3,901 stories ·1,371 members
I Just Want a Comment15,697 stories ·3,671 members
Sweetie Belle2,657 stories ·1,637 members
Anthropomorphics7,624 stories ·5,013 members
Stats
Page generated in 0.112 seconds
Total duration
776 users online
529,230 hits today, 1,822,946 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
I'm just imagining her using one of his game controllers' vibration function in desperation.
11569944
Same, then I imagine button would get pissy and complain about it being wet. haha
Damn, as much as I like video games. Having a very needy and sexy girlfriend wanting you so badly is a very missed lifetime opportunity. Especially now that she tried the zebra special.
11570077
Who knows. Might lead into others. I hope you enjoyed the story. :D
Your punctuation needs work. Also, I can't figure out why you capitalized "video".
11570180
Thanks for pointing that out. Gonna fix that and improve it.
As for the video, I have no clue. Fat finger maybe? Regardless, thanks for the feedback. If you see anymore please let me know. I don't have an editor for these so its easy to miss them with self editing.
11569944
I'm sure Love Tap has connections that might help getting her a https://kotaku.com/gamings-first-vibrator-turns-15-years-old-this-weekend-1790954050
It's unfortunate that Rez got a remake, but it's incompatible with the original accessory.
https://steamcommunity.com/app/636450/discussions/0/1471967615865182222/
In your honest opinion,would you call what they just did cheating?
11570617
Yeah, It's questionable. I feel in context it is because she does care for Button still. I was trying to play around with the weird grey area that many will find a bit touchy.
I thought so. Well,might as well see where this goes now that I've started reading this.
I just hope that this doesn't with neither one of them having a broken heart.
11570722
No promises.
11570896
He's gotta get his eyes off that video game of his for that to happen.
11571064
But he's gotta get to super secret bonus level, bonus level 420 that you get by having 69 coins and 69 lives, then getting a Munster energy drink code with his cheetah bag's promo code that has a chance to win one million dollars! Think of his high score! ;3
Nicely done, can’t wait to read next chapter. Will we see how Zakia got Cream Heart too? .
11571829
Maybe, I have some ideas. I cant make any promises though.
For those who want to see the full version of the cover pic, check out 2158669 on Derpi.
11570213
I would say you missed some of the most pertinent mistakes.
1) - ... Sweetie Belle's heat ... - the heat, as an "item" belongs to Sweetie, so it requires a possessive apostraphe and "s" after Sweetie Belle.
2) - ... A week earlier than expected ... - you "expect" a thing to happen in the future something that has happened already comes after expectation,, so in this case the expected is in the past tense.
3) - ... She had planned on ... or ... She'd planned on ... - Context of the paragraph makes this a pretty clear tense mistake.
4) - ... He is too preoccupied with ... - A two-fer, can't quickly or neatly sum-up the "to, two, too" rule, but you used the wrong one here, and missed an "e" in preoccupied.
5) - ... Specifically his video games ... - Typo in "specifically".
And that's just the first paragraph, and not counting the passive voice that litters the whole thing.
While I don't generally "like" zebra-dom / striping stories, just being that genre doesn't automatically get a thumbs down from me, "different horses for different courses" as the saying goes, the bad grammar here does.
11663717
Thanks I'll check these over.
That's fair, we all have our preferences.
That's for pointing the grammar issues. I will give them a look. I might get a proof reader in the future.