Horse-words writer believing in the Savior and Lord Jesus Christ, creatively crafting stories in imitation of a creatively crafting God. Consider this: Are you sure you're going to Heaven?
Years later, former world-saving hero Sunset Shimmer has been trying to help others embrace Equestrian magic on Earth. This winter, it's by assisting a couple college freshmen do well in a start-up college fair-slash-competition with magic as its gimmick.
But her routine breaks when an old friend comes up at work, looking for good company and someone to talk to after the holidays. And it won't just be about catching up with friends...
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I love your idea of the Equestria Girls grown up! And how magic is received by the human world, I'm loving it so far!
Loved it! I second liking your look at how life has gotten on for Sunset and Starlight with magic and communication between worlds being a thing and the two of them being at the heart of it all. Like a rock in the middle of a hurricane. Only critique is that it was sometimes hard to tell when scenes were in Equestria or Earth, but I think it worked and that may have been intentional to blur the lines between worlds now that they're so close.
All in all, a great little friendship fic. Thanks very much :)
That was pretty great. Seems Sunset is a natural for the consulting buisness.
I have a soft spot for Equestria Girls fics, especially ones set after the gang leaves Canterlot High.
The “magic plus x” complaint is an amusing insight into Sunset’s adult life. Her job is to help bridge Equestrian fantasy and human world creativity, but the doldrums of office life has clearly killed her enthusiasm. Per her frequent thoughtless scrolling through the news feeds of her old friends, she likely misses managing fantastical disasters at Canterlot High. At the very least, she misses how those days made her feel while she was living through them.
Starlight’s entrance is like a defibrillator jolt to the fic’s pulse. Cleverly, you have no spoken dialogue in this chapter outside of Starlight scenes. Whenever Sunset is apart from her old friend, Sunset is silent and the speech of her coworkers is summarized rather than depicted.
In summary, the scene comes alive after Starlight shows up on Sunset’s doorstep. Just a few paragraphs ago, Sunset offhandedly dismissed Earthly ideas of applying Equestrian magic. But as Starlight excitedly chats her up about that exact topic, Sunset’s attitude warms up and so does the reader’s. This a very well crafted opener, and a good theme to explore in a Jinglemas fic. That being a post-grad worker’s inability to get into the spirit of the season.
Perhaps I need to read more of your stuff, but this is the first time I’ve noticed you leaning into quippy dialogue. Mostly I think of you as crafting thoughtful grounded Equestrian On Earth stories containing vivid descriptions of food.
Starlight’s POV is explored in this chapter, and we see she’s more openly gracious than Sunset. The talk with Cosmic (for whatever his opinions are worth) suggests Sunset’s colleagues appreciate her far more than she appreciates them. This adds a dimension of Dramatic Irony to the plot, while the unexplained Twilight incident at the stoplight adds intrigue.
Tension builds. Starlight is here strictly on business, but her instincts are probably alerting her to Sunset’s atrophied personal life. Before this fic is over, one of them will have to address it. And judging by the hasty goodbye at this chapter’s end, it won’t be Sunset.
The montage of scenes in this chapter solidify a distressing routine of isolation for Sunset. Her distance from her friends is getting passively deeper, with canceled coffee dates and impersonal short phone calls. She’s also becoming icier towards her coworkers, only speaking when spoken to and immediately disengaging when a conversation strays away from strictly task-oriented workplace stuff.
I’m not proud to admit that I often catch myself falling into these behaviors, especially this time of year when winter has had several sunless months to erode one’s inclination towards good moods.
Once again though, Starlight’s geniality cuts through the funk, reaching Sunset when the latter is at a literal crossroads. We don’t see Sunset’s reaction (kudos for keeping her stoic but understandable so far), but we the readers feel a surge of joy at the invitation to return to Equestria and reunite with old friends. Even if the trip will only be for a few days.
From Earth’s snowy streets to Equestria’s warm woodland wilds, this fic really knows how to flop between opposite moods and settings.
I don’t often comment on your chapter titles, since I suspect the ones in Tagalog are there simply for your own amusement. This one however, is a riff on a famous latin truism. Reminds me of a shirt I once saw that read “I do not think, therefore I do not am.” Regardless, I expect this to be the chapter where Sunset has a pivotal moment of self-reflection.
Oh the delicious poetry of Sunset and Starlight being the ones conversing about this topic. It's also fitting that that dialogue, the line begs the most introspection from Sunset, immediately precedes Starlight putting her on the spot.
And so at last Sunset admits what the fic has been demonstrating all along. In the opening chapter, she “bemoaned their lack of thinking magically.” Unsurprisingly, that was projection on Sunset’s part. She has been quietly suffering without her friends, so her passion for her work and colleagues has been suffering too.
Still, the first step to solving a problem is admitting you have one. Sunset’s sobbing at the end of this chapter is a catharsis, not a resignation.
Ah, just like the reader hopes, Sunset has her mojo back. This is indicated by many elements of this chapter, such as her renewed chattiness with characters other than Starlight, but my favorite is the casual return of your signature poetic descriptions of food. All is right with the world.
And hey, it also ends on a meta moment related to gift-giving. The thing that the fic itself was written to be.
I see shades of Macario in this depiction of Sunset. You’re good at portraying young professionals deep in the throes of a quarterlife crisis. They always pull through though, even if takes some prodding from a diminutive Equestrian companion to set them back on the right path.
Happy (belated) Hearthswarming, everyone.