Fiddlesticks would risk the world for her marefriend.
This story contains LGBT themes. Emphasis on the L.
An entry in the Fiddledust Contest.
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Fiddlesticks would risk the world for her marefriend.
This story contains LGBT themes. Emphasis on the L.
An entry in the Fiddledust Contest.
Preread by The Sleepless Beholder
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Come now, I’m sure your entry will be perfectly competitive. No need to announce that you’re taking the L.
Dates, job interviews, funerals, it really worked for all occasions.
Ah, so one is the donut, and the other the tea. Fantastic, splendid.
But can one dunk a donut in one’s tea? If not, then I fear this relationship may be over before it’s begun.
If you believe the theory that Lightning Dust and Sky Stinger are siblings, then this exchange takes on a fun little bit of subtext.
...Khaled?
Dump him. You know why.
...I-it’s a donut shop. It’s a donut shop, Elle-Dee.
Lightning Dust is the type of person to complain that Arby’s isn’t vegetarian enough.
Little did she know, Fiddle was actually saying “luv,” the Anglican diminutive that can variously mean “friend,” “acquaintance,” or “person who I fully intend to kill.”
Incidentally, “Mischievous Intent” was one of the weaker Law and Order spin-offs.
This was kinda cute! I’m lacking crucial context for most of it, but I liked the interplay between gay horse girlfriends well enough.
That said (and maybe this is exacerbated by me not really knowing the source material behind this particular couple), the story after the scene break and the POV shift is markedly weaker than the first portion from Elle-Dee’s perspective. We go from some entertaining and cute banter and small-talk to a long and dense exposition dump explaining that... someone is... dead? The story ends right after that, which gives you no opportunity to make anything of that twist.
It’s just sort of... there. Signifying nothing.
Again, I thought there was both cuteness and sweetness in sufficient quantity. But, to me, there isn’t enough substance beneath that cute, sweet exterior.
The judges might think differently, of course. And, in any event, I wish you luck. Donuts and tea are on me if you win.
After the break--a very interesting idea! It makes the story.
And re: the other DJ's name... different names/swaps in different universes, or a different pony with a joke-inspired name? Neat foreshadowing in one case, amusing anyway in the other.