Why can't my life just be normal?
It wasn't like I was breaking any rules. There I was, sitting in my room, writing a bit of simple fanfiction for my favorite website, www.fimfiction.net. I always enjoyed fanfiction, even though I wasn't the best writer. I was doing what most of us fans did, nothing different. Just some harmless tomfoolery.
But no, I wasn't allowed to have a little fun. Now, I've been shoved into the body of one of Ponyville's most hatted creatures, the timber wolf. Well, sorta a timber wolf. Basically, I'm slowly changing into one. Right now, I'm just a half girl, half wood beast. Soon, I probably won't even be able to think clearly, the animal instincts will cloud my judgement. What'll happen then?
I really hope Fluttershy can help me.
Only there's one problem.
I can't speak.
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Follow the story of Jordyn, the high strong, overly hyper blonde teen girl as she researches a way to get home and away from the madness that is Ponyville now that she is slowly morphing into a rabid timber wolf.
Adventure, comedy, and possibly romance, this story is rated "teen", just in case!
Characters will be announced as we go along.
Based on the description:
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Reading now.
EDIT:
+++First Impressions+++
-Pros-
You are by no means a bad writer.
Timberwolf girl is an awe-inspiring mental image.
Tick all the right boxes on HIE Psychology.
-Cons-
Brony.
Character seems bland so far.
Unnecessary opening explanation of FiM.
-Overall-
Not rating this yet but I will be watching it for progress. Good Luck.
OMG GUYZ, ITS A GURL
Actually, I have no idea who you are. Regardless, 1st person female is sort of unique here on FIMFiction. The last time I tried to write that, it got over 9000 views.
You have a couple of spelling errors. Other than that, the writing itself is pretty good. I giggled a little at some of the similes you threw in.
The story felt a little bland. My only thought is that maybe your pacing is just a little too slow, and you spent a lot of time telling us about the show.
I'd like to see more of this, as quickly as possible. To accomplish that, I volunteer to be your editor. Send a message.
This actually sounds intriguing, however, the description is putting me off. The impression I get is that I feel like I already know everything that will happen, so there is little reason to read the fic itself.
Perhaps if you shortened the description and removed the explanation of the character from it, more people would read it.
Will read later.
Just saw that this is your first submitted story. Thanks, I needed something to prove that that's a terrible excuse.
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Agreed. If at all possible, avoid descriptions long enough that you have to click "more"
Hmm... sounds so far that it might be a great story, or a "meh" story.
Shoo-be-doo?
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Anyway, on to the critique. Bad before good, as it were.
There's a few typos scattered throughout, and that may be one of the worst opening lines since "It was a dark and stormy night", but honestly, you've got quite a bit of potential going here. And diddle my dog, it's got more than 2k words for an opening chapter of a first-ever fanfic? It's got a HiE plot that doesn't make me want to shoot myself? A fairly unique protagonist (and a FEMALE protagonist at that!) who has a definitive problem to overcome? I am stunned, in the absolute best way possible.
Time constraints being what they are, I may or may not be able to put myself up for being your editor, but I will make a very helpful suggestion. GO HERE. Put your story into a Google Doc (if it isn't already), enable comments, and post your story on SALT. You'll probably end up with more than one editor, and most of us know what we're talking about. Even if your goal isn't to ascend the lofty and often unreasonable heights of the EqD frontpage, I promise you that at least one of us will help you craft your story as you go, and if you can take constructive criticism well, then you'll probably end up being a much better writer when you come out than when you went in.
1303044 I was about to comment on that. Beat me to it though.
I'll follow you for now but dont disapoint
Sorry everyone, didn't realize I had made quite this many mistakes! I'll go ahead and straighten all this up right now, don't you worry.
hmm... im gonna keep an eye on this
You deserve a BROOOWWNIIEE!!
Plz update 
I WANT MOOOAAAR!! 
Plz? 
More please.
though im a tiny bit put off with what is essentialy a human timberwolf hybrid. It just sounds weird to me.
PLEASE update this story! I've had it favorited for at least 50 weeks holding onto the vain hope that it would be updated. I really, truly love the idea and would love to see it written, even if it was a grammar Nazi's playground. I will keep this story favorited just in case, but know this: if you ever need editing help, I will gladly volunteer my services to you.
Ponyville's most hatted creatures,
you spelled hated wrong.
Next chapter please!
Chapter 1: The end.
And then he was never seen again. Literally.
Sad it looks like it won't be finished it sounds interesting to read it to the non existing ending but still it is a great start