The Elden Ring / Thousand Words Contest Crossover - brought to another world, The Girl, The Alicorn, The Unicorn, and The Shadow must make their way back home.
Pending Titles, And Other, Cooler Morals:
The Wrong Four Horsewomen in the Right Horse Place;
Heroes Are Graced & They Earn Their Names;
My World May Be Missing, But I Still Have Me, & One Day We'll Have Eachother
For Bicyclette's Thousand Word Contest per adventure-fluff. My heart bleeds for heroes.
An Elden Ring crossover, albeit approachable for all ye tarnished who choose to enter.
Chapters (1)
So, which Age did they create? Who got to marry Marika? Was it a joint wedding? Are they all the Lord now?
I do love a good crossover curbstomp, but this does end up feeling unsatisfying with how little I know about Elden Ring. Still, this is submitted under Fluff and I can't deny it's a delightful bit of spectacle. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
so i'm going into this without knowing anything about Elden Ring, which is good because as a contest judge i won't have to pretend i don't know anything about it when judging it
good repurposing of a classic Sunset Shimmer line, i'm sure if i knew anything about the context it would mean something
this is a good line!
so technically this is good, in the sense that the sentences are constructed well and have good rhythm, with art in them here and there. but i can't say anything more than that, because to me, this is a completely random series of events that don't cohere into a story as far as i can tell, nor does it do anything conceptual or thematic that can be understood by someone who knows nothing about the background it is drawing from.
maybe one day i will for some reason learn the lore of Elden Ring or even play it myself, and i can come back to this as a member of your target audience and better be able to understand it. but until then, i'd love to see something from you that i can understand! it's an honor that this contest was your first published story; i only wish i were in a position to appreciate it.
Git Gud